[CCWG-ACCT] IRP text following call with Malcolm

[Greg Shatan]

A consolidated draft with changes from Becky, Malcolm and myself is
attached.  Given where we are in the process, I have included marginal
comments explaining any change I made that was more than punctuation or a
typo.  I don't think any of the changes represent "new ideas" but there are
a couple of places where the original idea was rather obscure so I
attempted to clarify it.

Greg

On Thu, Jul 30, 2015 at 7:45 PM, Greg Shatan <gregshatanipc at gmail.com>
wrote:

> What new ideas are you referring to?
>
> On Thu, Jul 30, 2015 at 7:45 PM, Malcolm Hutty <malcolm at linx.net> wrote:
>
>> Correcting typos is fine, but I believe the Chair announced that we are
>> past the point of introducing new ideas that haven't been agreed by the
>> working party.
>>
>>
>>
>> > On 31 Jul 2015, at 00:20, Greg Shatan <gregshatanipc at gmail.com> wrote:
>> >
>> > My suggested changes are marked in track changes on top of Becky's
>> changes.  Most were typos or wording changes to improve clarity.
>>
>
>
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