[CCWG-ACCT] 17 UTC deadline for final edits

Megan.Richards at ec.europa.eu Megan.Richards at ec.europa.eu
Fri Nov 13 15:40:25 UTC 2015


Thanks. As this will not only be seen/read by people from the ICANN community or those steeped in its details, I have tried to step back a bit and look with a more "objective view", which led me to wonder if it wouldn't be useful to clarify a bit the following points:

A) The thresholds for numbers of AC/SOs required (or not) for certain actions would be clearer if the total numbers that exist now were identified at the beginning of the summary ( and of each group) as this will give a better understanding of the relative weights of those thresholds or at each section in the text the numbers are put in context e.g. 3/6 2/5 etc. (This is more repetitive of course)
B) The distinctions between the cases that would be raised under independent review process vs requests for reconsideration run the same risk for non-cognoscenti I think. Perhaps a sentence or so more in each section might help to better clarify the distinctions.

Have of course held my tongue on details, typos, edits etc. and think that overall it presents a very clear view

Megan
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On 13 Nov 2015, at 11:46, Alice Jansen <alice.jansen at icann.org<mailto:alice.jansen at icann.org>> wrote:

Dear all,
As announced on your call #67, this is to kindly remind you that final edits on the attached draft Formal Update (circulated on 12 November) are needed by 17:00 UTC today.
As indicated on the call, no line edits will be taken into account. Co-Chairs are asking for content related comments.
Per the note below, any format, font and proofreading issues are being addressed by a professional writer.
Thank you,
Best regards
Alice
From: Bernard Turcotte <turcotte.bernard at gmail.com<mailto:turcotte.bernard at gmail.com>>
Date: Friday, November 13, 2015 12:04 AM
To: "accountability-cross-community at icann.org<mailto:accountability-cross-community at icann.org>" <accountability-cross-community at icann.org<mailto:accountability-cross-community at icann.org>>
Subject: CCWG - Draft Update document for CCWG call

All,

As per Mathieu's email of earlier today please find the draft Proposal Update document which will be discussed at the next CCWG meeting.

The document is going to professional formatting as we speak - so any issues of layout, fonts etc. will be addressed by a specialist.

This document also represents a consideration of all the comments received with respect to the previous version - not that all of these were accepted, but a majority were taken on.

We apologize for the lateness of the document, but as you will notice we have put significant efforts into recasting this per the comments.

Bernard Turcotte
ICANN Staff Support for the CCWG

for the CCWG Co-chairs.
<ShortProposalUpdate-2.0.pdf>
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