<html><head></head><body style="word-wrap: break-word; -webkit-nbsp-mode: space; -webkit-line-break: after-white-space; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-size: 14px; font-family: Calibri, sans-serif;"><div>Thank you Greg. Part of the professional formatting involves adding page numbers, paragraph numbers, etc. What we shared we you is just the shell that we compiled. </div><div><br></div><div>We’ve noted your correction for the reference on Chapter 6.1. Helpful catch. The draft will go through another round of proofreading, but this type of catch is truly appreciated. </div><div><br></div><div>Best, </div><div>Grace</div><div><br></div><span id="OLK_SRC_BODY_SECTION"><div style="font-family:Calibri; font-size:11pt; text-align:left; color:black; BORDER-BOTTOM: medium none; BORDER-LEFT: medium none; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0in; PADDING-LEFT: 0in; PADDING-RIGHT: 0in; BORDER-TOP: #b5c4df 1pt solid; BORDER-RIGHT: medium none; PADDING-TOP: 3pt"><span style="font-weight:bold">From: </span> <<a href="mailto:accountability-cross-community-bounces@icann.org">accountability-cross-community-bounces@icann.org</a>> on behalf of Greg Shatan <<a href="mailto:gregshatanipc@gmail.com">gregshatanipc@gmail.com</a>><br><span style="font-weight:bold">Date: </span> Sunday, August 2, 2015 at 3:37 PM<br><span style="font-weight:bold">To: </span> Hillary Jett <<a href="mailto:hillary.jett@icann.org">hillary.jett@icann.org</a>><br><span style="font-weight:bold">Cc: </span> Accountability Cross Community <<a href="mailto:accountability-cross-community@icann.org">accountability-cross-community@icann.org</a>><br><span style="font-weight:bold">Subject: </span> Re: [CCWG-ACCT] Final Compiled Version of 2nd Draft Proposal<br></div><div><br></div><div><meta http-equiv="Content-Type" content="text/html; charset=utf-8"><div><div dir="ltr"><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif">Two quick comments:</div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif"><br></div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif">1. I note that the pages are not numbered. This should be corrected before it is published.</div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif">2. On the first page of what is now Chapter 6.1, there is an incorrect cross-reference, which could lead to considerable confusion. (MS Word calls this page 43.)</div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif"><br></div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif">This is in the 4th paragraph on that page, which now reads:</div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif"><br></div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif"><p class="MsoNormal">It is important that before participating SOs and ACs make decisions regarding how to vote in exercising a community power, they discuss the matter among themselves and with each other. Section
<span style="background-color:rgb(255,255,0)">6.2 </span>below sets out the CCWG-Accountability’s proposal on how to implement a simple system to do this, based on experience with the work of the CCWG-Accountability itself.</p><p class="MsoNormal"><br></p><p class="MsoNormal">The cross-reference at the beginning of the second sentence should be to Section
<b>6.3</b>. (Section 6.2 is "Influence in the Community Mechanism"; Section 6.3 is "An ICANN Community Forum.")</p><p class="MsoNormal"><br></p><p class="MsoNormal">Thanks for the fixing this!</p><p class="MsoNormal"><br></p><p class="MsoNormal">Greg</p></div></div><div class="gmail_extra"><br><div class="gmail_quote">On Sun, Aug 2, 2015 at 2:57 PM, Hillary Jett <span dir="ltr">
<<a href="mailto:hillary.jett@icann.org" target="_blank">hillary.jett@icann.org</a>></span> wrote:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex"><div style="word-wrap:break-word;color:rgb(0,0,0);font-family:Helvetica,sans-serif"><div style="font-size:13px">Hi all,</div><div style="font-size:13px"><br></div><div style="font-size:13px">Please find attached a Final Compiled Version of the 2nd Draft Proposal. </div><div style="font-size:13px"><br></div><div><span style="font-size:15px"><b>Each individual chapter of this document can be found on the wiki, and this page <u>is the reference page</u> for the group on this 2nd Draft Proposal: </b><a href="https://community.icann.org/pages/viewpage.action?pageId=53783460" target="_blank"><b>https://community.icann.org/pages/viewpage.action?pageId=53783460</b></a></span></div><div style="font-size:13px"><br></div><div style="font-size:13px">This document is currently undergoing a professional design overhaul and will be published tomorrow as a part of the public comment launch. As a note, you will notice that numbering of chapters has been cleaned up.</div><div style="font-size:13px"><br></div><div style="font-size:13px">Thanks all,</div><div style="font-size:13px">Hillary</div><span class="HOEnZb"><font color="#888888"><div style="font-size:13px"><br></div><div style="font-size:13px"><div>-- </div><div><div><b>Hillary Jett</b></div><div>Communications Coordinator</div><div>Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers (ICANN)</div><div><br></div><div><div>Interested in the IANA Stewardship Transition? </div><div><span style="font-size:11px"><a href="https://www.icann.org/stewardship-accountability" target="_blank">LEARN MORE</a>. <a href="https://www.icann.org/stewardship-accountability#status" target="_blank">STAY UPDATED</a>. <a href="https://twitter.com/icann" target="_blank">FOLLOW</a>. <a href="https://www.icann.org/stewardship-accountability#involved" target="_blank">ENGAGE</a>.</span> </div></div><div><br></div><div>Mobile: <a href="tel:%2B1%C2%A0%28202%29%20674-3403" value="+12026743403" target="_blank">
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