In the comments I submitted, I proposed a number of specific textual <span></span>changes to address this.<div><br></div><div>I look forward to seeing the second draft. We are going to see a second draft, aren't we??? I hope.....<br><br>On Thursday, November 12, 2015, Niels ten Oever <<a href="mailto:lists@digitaldissidents.org">lists@digitaldissidents.org</a>> wrote:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex">-----BEGIN PGP SIGNED MESSAGE-----<br>
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On 11/10/2015 03:43 PM, Robin Gross wrote:<br>
> I agree with Dr. Tropina on the incorrect HR language in the<br>
> summary. It will lead to confusion that ICANN is signing up to<br>
> adhere to some protocols and that has never been part of the plan<br>
> of this group. That confusion will cause much larger problems in<br>
> the future. Let's fix that language as she suggests.<br>
><br>
> Thanks, Robin<br>
><br>
> On Nov 10, 2015, at 5:54 AM, Dr. Tatiana Tropina wrote:<br>
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>> Hello I already made a comment on the chat during CCWG call<br>
>> today, making it here again. I think the human rights language in<br>
>> the summary is a bit confusing. "Reinforcing Adherence to Human<br>
>> Rights Protocols" (pages 7, 8, 31) is not exactly what WP4<br>
>> proposed. The word "protocols" makes no sense in this context, it<br>
>> will be good either for diplomatic language or for IETF, but not<br>
>> for the CCWG document. As far as I am concerned, we are not<br>
>> suggesting to commit to any "protocols", furthermore, we even<br>
>> decided not to suggest to mention any instruments. Even within<br>
>> the context of international human rights law mentioning<br>
>> "protocols" doesn't make any sense. I believe just "human rights"<br>
>> or "internationally recognised human rights" would be much better<br>
>> wording. But not "protocols" because it is confusing. Best<br>
>> regards Tanya<br>
>><br>
>> On 09/11/15 22:42, Bernard Turcotte wrote:<br>
>>> All,<br>
>>><br>
>>> Please find attached the first full draft of the executive<br>
>>> summary which will be discussed on the call tomorrow.<br>
>>><br>
>>> Apologies for the delay in getting this out but people have<br>
>>> been working almost around the clock.<br>
>>><br>
>>> Bernard Turcotte Staff Support<br>
>>><br>
>>> for the co-chairs.<br>
>>><br>
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