<div dir="ltr"><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif">In the prior draft, there were square brackets around "to be provided by the root server operators." These were removed in this draft, creating ambiguity (at best). We need to put the brackets back, so it says:</div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif"><br></div><div class="gmail_default"><blockquote type="cite" style="font-size:12.8px"><font face="verdana, sans-serif"><font color="#0000ff">"Coordinates the operation and evolution of the DNS root server system. In this role, ICANN's mission is <b>[</b>to be provided by the root server operators<b>]</b>." <br></font><br>We might want to be even simpler about it and avoid all confusion (plus we may not want to give the impression that we will take the root server operators' language verbatim):<br><br><span style="font-size:small"><font color="#0000ff">"Coordinates the operation and evolution of the DNS root server system. In this role, ICANN's mission is <b>[</b>to be provided<b>]</b>." </font></span></font><br></blockquote><blockquote type="cite" style="font-size:12.8px"><font face="verdana, sans-serif">Greg</font></blockquote></div></div><div class="gmail_extra"><br><div class="gmail_quote">On Fri, Nov 13, 2015 at 11:46 AM, Drazek, Keith <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:kdrazek@verisign.com" target="_blank">kdrazek@verisign.com</a>></span> wrote:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex">
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<div>I have reviewed the latest draft (on my phone while sitting at the airport in Joao Pessoa) and find it to be a substantial improvement over the previous version. I think it is informative, accurate and I see no significant substantive issues or errors
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<div>I do have one clarifying question. On page 21, under Recommendation #5, Mission bullet #2, the language says, </div>
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<div>What do we mean by the word "provided" in this context? Are we waiting for language from the RSSAC, or do we mean "performed by" the root server operators. Or something different? Apologies but our intent is not clear to me. </div>
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<div>Thanks to all who have worked on this important document. </div>
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On Nov 13, 2015, at 11:42 AM, Alice Jansen <<a href="mailto:alice.jansen@icann.org" target="_blank">alice.jansen@icann.org</a>> wrote:<br>
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<div>As announced on your call #67, this is to kindly remind you that final edits on the attached draft Formal Update (circulated on 12 November) are needed by
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<div style="color:rgb(0,0,0)">As indicated on the call, no line edits will be taken into account. Co-Chairs are asking for content related comments.</div>
<div style="color:rgb(0,0,0)">Per the note below, any format, font and proofreading issues are being addressed by a professional writer.</div>
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<span style="font-weight:bold">Date: </span>Friday, November 13, 2015 12:04 AM<br>
<span style="font-weight:bold">To: </span>"<a href="mailto:accountability-cross-community@icann.org" target="_blank">accountability-cross-community@icann.org</a>" <<a href="mailto:accountability-cross-community@icann.org" target="_blank">accountability-cross-community@icann.org</a>><br>
<span style="font-weight:bold">Subject: </span>CCWG - Draft Update document for CCWG call<br>
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<div class="gmail_default" style="font-size:small">This document also represents a consideration of all the comments received with respect to the previous version - not that all of these were accepted, but a majority were taken on.</div>
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<div class="gmail_default" style="font-size:small">We apologize for the lateness of the document, but as you will notice we have put significant efforts into recasting this per the comments.</div>
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