<html><head><meta http-equiv="Content-Type" content="text/html charset=utf-8"></head><body style="word-wrap: break-word; -webkit-nbsp-mode: space; -webkit-line-break: after-white-space;" class="">Agreed and I’m surprised to see it has slipped from the language.<div class=""><br class=""></div><div class="">Thanks,</div><div class="">Robin</div><div class=""><br class=""><div><blockquote type="cite" class=""><div class="">On Nov 23, 2015, at 11:56 AM, Greg Shatan <<a href="mailto:gregshatanipc@gmail.com" class="">gregshatanipc@gmail.com</a>> wrote:</div><br class="Apple-interchange-newline"><div class=""><div dir="ltr" class=""><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif">These are all valuable comments, but I want to single one out in particular, because it makes a huge difference in the scope of the IRP:</div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif"><br class=""></div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif"><br class=""></div><div class="gmail_default"><blockquote style="margin:0px 0px 0px 0.8ex;border-left-width:1px;border-left-color:rgb(204,204,204);border-left-style:solid;padding-left:1ex" class="gmail_quote"><font face="verdana, sans-serif" class=""><font class="">p.46: (IRP) I recall Becky wanted the IRP to address action<u class=""> or inaction</u>. "</font><font class="">The standard of review shall be an objective examination as to whether the complained-of action [<span style="background-color:rgb(255,255,0)" class="">or inaction] </span>exceeds the scope </font><font class="">…"</font></font></blockquote><div class=""><br class=""></div><div class=""><font face="verdana, sans-serif" class="">It wasn't just Becky that wanted this (I think that phrasing is just a leftover from the prior life of this email). It was certainly my understanding that we were covering both action and inaction. It needs to be absolutely clear that this is the case.</font></div><div class=""><font face="verdana, sans-serif" class=""><br class=""></font></div><div class=""><font face="verdana, sans-serif" class="">Greg </font></div><div style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif" class=""><font face="Calibri,sans-serif" class=""><br class=""></font></div></div></div><div class="gmail_extra"><br class=""><div class="gmail_quote">On Mon, Nov 23, 2015 at 2:07 PM, Steve DelBianco <span dir="ltr" class=""><<a href="mailto:sdelbianco@netchoice.org" target="_blank" class="">sdelbianco@netchoice.org</a>></span> wrote:<br class=""><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex">
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<font face="Calibri" class=""><i class="">"Workable consensus reforms that enhance the role of the community and ICANN’s Mission should be consistent with ICANN’s interest as a corporate entity."</i></font></div>
<font face="Calibri" style="font-family: Calibri, sans-serif; font-size: 16px;" class="">It <font face="Calibri,sans-serif" class="">was in our 15-Nov </font></font><font face="Calibri,sans-serif" style="font-family: Calibri, sans-serif; font-size: 16px;" class="">summary,
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p. 16: should we add “ and Articles of Incorporation” to the 5th bullet, “Approving any modifications to Standard or Fundamental Bylaws”. Articles already say, "9. These Articles may be amended by the affirmative vote of at least two-thirds of the directors
of the Corporation. <span style="background-color:rgb(255,255,0)" class="">When the Corporation has members, any such amendment must be ratified by a two-thirds (2/3) majority of the members voting on any proposed amendment.</span>” Should we change the Articles
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p.18: numbered item 5 says “Sole Member Model” Should be Sole Designator Model.</div>
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<font class=""><font face="Calibri,sans-serif" class="">p.46: (IRP) I recall Becky wanted the IRP to address action<u class=""> or inaction</u>. "</font></font><font face="Calibri,sans-serif" class="">The standard of review shall be an objective examination as to whether the complained-of action
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<font class=""><font face="Calibri,sans-serif" class="">p.46: (IRP). Says "</font></font><font face="Calibri,sans-serif" class="">A community Independent Review Process would be completely subsidized by ICANN”. Would be clearer to say, “Legal costs for a</font><span style="font-family:Calibri,sans-serif" class=""> community
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recommends incorporating the reviews specified in the Affirmation of Commitments</font><font face="Calibri,sans-serif" class=""> </font><font face="Calibri,sans-serif" class="">…” More precise to say, “Based on Stress Test #14, </font><span style="font-family:Calibri,sans-serif" class="">CCWG-Accountability
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