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<div>+1. Clarification - and proper grammar - needed. <br>
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On Dec 8, 2015, at 10:03 AM, Matthew Shears <<a href="mailto:mshears@cdt.org">mshears@cdt.org</a>> wrote:<br>
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<div>Agree with David and Milton - clarity is key<br>
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<div class="moz-cite-prefix">On 08/12/2015 14:00, Mueller, Milton L wrote:<br>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif;color:#1F497D">It is a substantive issue. Please put the words that were agreed back in, as David suggests.
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif;color:#1F497D">Unambiguous mission statement is important<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p>DNS is already a starting reference point and there is a colon (:) after policies then you have item "a" which talks about security and/or stability.....<o:p></o:p></p>
<p>So it seem in order to me. Nevertheless the professional proof reader may want to have a look.<o:p></o:p></p>
<p>Regards<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">On Dec 8, 2015 2:45 AM, "David Post" <<a moz-do-not-send="true" href="mailto:david.g.post@gmail.com">david.g.post@gmail.com</a>> wrote:.<br>
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ICANN's Mission, "in its role of coordinat[ing] the allocation and assignment of names in the root zone of the Domain Name System ("DNS")," is to<br>
"coordinate the development and implementation of policies:<br>
[a] For which uniform or coordinated resolution is reasonably necessary to facilitate the openness, interoperability, resilience, security and/or stability; and<br>
[b] That are developed through a bottom-up, consensus-based multi-stakeholder process and designed to ensure the stable and secure operation of the Internet's unique names systems."<br>
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I believe that the words "of the DNS" should follow "security and/or stability" .... That's correct, no? [otherwise it doesn't make sense -- the "openness" etc. of what?]<br>
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