[atrt2] Appendix C - SSR Review Implementation - FOR YOUR REVIEW

[David Conrad]

I agree with Olivier's proposed wording change.  As I'm unsure who is holding the pen on the current document (only knowing it isn't me :)), I'll let whoever does hold the pen make the modifications (unless someone objects).

Regards,
-drc

On Dec 19, 2013, at 3:40 PM, Olivier MJ Crepin-Leblond <ocl at gih.com> wrote:

> 
> Signed PGP part
> Dear David, Larisa,
> 
> thanks for your follow-up in this.
> I have read through the whole document again & am happy with the changes
> & the correction of the typographical/formatting error in the ALAC's note.
> 
> My comment on Recommendation 27 is quite simple. Currently, it reads:
> 
> "ATRT2 Assessment of Recommendation Effectiveness
> 
> Based on the comments referenced above and similar comments both in
> other public comments and relayed during the ICANN Durban meeting, there
> may be some question as to whether the Westlake Governance DNS Risk
> Framework is ?comprehensive within the scope of ICANN?s SSR remit and
> limited missions? however it must be acknowledged that comprehensiveness
> is a matter of opinion and those opinions appear to vary significantly."
> 
> I have a concern that we're already making no Recommendations of our
> own, thus all of the text is tagged as "observations" - which is weak -
> and the language used in this particular paragraph is particularly weak.
> I suggest strengthening the message as:
> 
> "ATRT2 Assessment of Recommendation Effectiveness
> 
> Based on the comments referenced above and similar comments both in
> other public comments and relayed during the ICANN Durban meeting, there
> is some question as to whether the Westlake Governance DNS Risk
> Framework is "comprehensive within the scope of ICANN's SSR remit and
> limited missions". However, comprehensiveness is a matter of opinion and
> those opinions vary significantly, which is cause for concern."
> 
> --- end of quote ---
> 
> I hope that this stands a better chance for the Board to check whether
> to act on this observation, cross-check the scope of ICANN's SSR remit
> and check if the Westlake report actually fills that remit.
> 
> Kind regards,
> 
> Olivier
> 
> 
> On 19/12/2013 17:35, David Conrad wrote:
> > Larisa,
> >
> > The edits look fine to me, however I gather Olivier has some concern
> regarding the write up of SSR Rec 27:
> >
> > "Recommendation 27 review is too complacent."
> >
> > as well as a view that the commentary for that recommendation does not
> reflect the ALAC statement.  I'm happy to revise, but am unsure how to
> address his concerns without additional information.
> >
> > Regards,
> > -drc
> >
> > On Dec 19, 2013, at 8:25 AM, Larisa B. Gurnick
> <larisa.gurnick at icann.org <mailto:larisa.gurnick at icann.org>> wrote:
> >
> >> David,
> >>
> >> Please review the proposed edits to Appendix C ? SSR Review
> Implementation and provide staff with your final edits by 16 UTC on
> Friday, 20 December.
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> Thank you,
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> */Larisa B. Gurnick/*
> >>
> >> Consultant/Senior Director, Organizational Reviews
> >>
> >> Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers (ICANN)
> >>
> >> larisa.gurnick at icann.org <mailto:larisa.gurnick at icann.org>
> >>
> >> 310 383-8995
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> <Appendix C - SSR Assessment 19 Dec.docx>
> >
> >
> >
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> --
> Olivier MJ Crépin-Leblond, PhD
> http://www.gih.com/ocl.html
> 
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