[atrt2] ATRT2 Final Report - Draft #3 LATEST

Alan Greenberg alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca
Tue Dec 24 02:29:09 UTC 2013

See embedded.

Also, there is a reference at the end of your 
note to "implantation". Don't know where it comes 
from, but presume it should be implementation.

At 23/12/2013 06:35 PM, Larisa B. Gurnick wrote:
>Dear ATRT2,
>Attached is the latest version of the ATRT2 
>Report, along with separate documents for 
>Appendices B- E (Appendix A is the ICC report). 
>All changes have been incorporated and Table of 
>Contents has been updated.  These are the master 
>files and should be used if you plan to make any 
>further changes to the report prior to 
>submitting it to the Board.  Please copy me, 
>Denise and Alice when you submit your Final Report to the Board.
>Staff flagged several items (previously included 
>as notes in the document) for you to consider as 
>you finalize the report – please see the listing below.
>As a reminder, ICANN will be closed for the 
>holidays from noon on 24 December through 1 
>January.  Staff will be available to assist with 
>any last minute edits upon return on 2 
>January.  Staff will submit the final report for 
>translation  and coordinate the posting on the 
>web site as soon as ATRT2 confirms the Final 
>Report documents after the holidays.
>Happy Holidays,
>Items for ATRT2 consideration prior to finalizing the report:
>1.       Recommendation #4 – Paul indicated that 
>the Review Team should develop a footnote 
>explaining change from prior language, i.e. only 
>mention policy development and implementation, 
>not administrative matters.  Executive Summary  and body of the report.
>2.       Recommendation #6  Confirm that the 
>following should be deleted:  “Increase GAC 
>early involvement in the various ICANN policy 
>processes (tied to ATRT 1 Recommendation 
>12).  Recommendation was merged and concepts 
>included in the recommendations related to 
>cross-community development 
>processes.”  Executive Summary and body of the report.

I cannot locate that line, so presume it was already deleted.

In any case, I can see no reason to keep it. If 
we really want a link, it could be worded 
"Another GAC-related recommendation can be found at Recommendation 10.2".

However, I see no real need for that.

>3.      Report Section 1;  Findings of 
>ATRT1:  “In the course of its deliberations, 
>ATRT1 found that the Nominating Committee 
>(NomCom) had failed to implement previous recommendations from, [S1]
>4.       In several sections of the report, 
>references to ATRT1 recommendations have been 
>footnoted. This has not been done consistently throughout the report.
>5.      Report Section 5; Findings of ATRT1 - capacity[S2] .
>6.       Report Section Headings – Alan made a 
>change to Report Section 13, which was 
>incorporated.  He took out the parenthetical 
>reference; yet other Report Sections still have 
>it and earlier, there was an agreement to 
>include these references for further 
>clarity.  ATRT2 should make a decision to address this consistently.

What I removed was factually incorrect - it 
referred to earlier versions which were focused on the GNSO PDP.

What you have for sections 14 and 15 is:

Report Section 14. AoC REVIEW PROCESS 
EFFECTIVENESS:  ATRT2 Recommendation 11 (New 
Recommendation on Effectiveness of the Review Process)

TRANSPARENCY:  ATRT2 Recommendation #12 (New 
Recommendation on Finance Accountability and Transparency)

The parenthetical seems rather redundant to me, 
but if you want one for Section 13, it should be:

Report Section 13. CROSS-COMMUNITY 
DELIBERATIONS:  ATRT2 Recommendation #10 (New 
Recommendation on Cross-community Deliberations)

>7.       P.54 – Summary of other relevant 
>information – Staff has previously submitted a 
>correction:  “Correction: Page 45 of the Draft 
>Report:  Reconsideration review – on 13-3, the 
>Board, through the NGPC, actually accepted 
>reconsideration of the issue, though the 
>ultimate decision was that the action should not 
>be overturned.  This is different from the Board 
>denying reconsideration, which is what happened in the other instances cited.”
>8.      Appendix E – p. E-4; Metrics and 
>criteria for measuring progress; last sentence - 
>ATRT2 requested that it be able to interact with 
>One World Trust directly so that ATRT2 could 
>reflect the need for metrics in its Final Report 
>in a coordinated way.     [LBG3]
>Larisa B. Gurnick
>Consultant/Senior Director, Organizational Reviews
>Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers (ICANN)
><mailto:larisa.gurnick at icann.org>larisa.gurnick at icann.org
>310 383-8995
>  [S1]PD7 asks do we know what entity made this 
> recommendation? Would need  citations  LG 
> response: Not sure – could be the structural review mandated by the bylaws.
>  [S2]PD19 says reference explanatory text on 
> why ATRT2 is only focusing on policy development and implantation?
>  [LBG3]Staff suggestion: update the comment 
> based on the draft report that has been shared confidentially with the ATRT2.
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