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Dear Alan,<br>
<br>
I'm ok with the document apart from formatting (justified is better)
and also there does not appear to be any sections describing
proposed **deliverables* nor access to the Consultant Team when the
report is published. Do they send in the report by email? Do they
travel to an ICANN meeting in person to present it? These details
change the cost.<br>
Kind regards,<br>
<br>
Olivier<br>
<br>
<br>
<div class="moz-cite-prefix">On 01/07/2013 04:38, Alan Greenberg
wrote:<br>
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Thanks to Avri for incorporating the suggestions to date. I think
that
all have been included except for Demi's last suggestion of adding
the
task of identifying comparable MS processes. I tried adding that,
but it
made for a very awkward sentence, and it is already implied, since
the
comparison cannot be done without first identifying what to
compare to
(thanks to Avri for pointing that out).<br>
<br>
I did some punctuation cleanup, and have one other suggestion for
a
change, removing the word "encouraging" from "...whether
the PDP process could be strengthened by encouraging the
submission of
views and advice from the GAC whether the PDP process could be
strengthened by encouraging the submission of views and advice
from the
GAC..." since it is not the encouraging that would not change
anything, but the actual submission. That change is redlined in
the
version attached.<br>
<br>
Larisa has also made some administrative changes.<br>
<br>
Unless I hear anything further (about that last changes or
anything else
in the RFP), I will send give staff the go-ahead to issue the RFP
at
16:00 UTC on Monday (9 am PST and 2 hours after the end of our
call with
the CSG). <br>
<br>
Alan<br>
<br>
At 30/06/2013 05:51 PM, Avri Doria wrote:<br>
<blockquote type="cite" class="cite" cite=""><font size="2">I move
one bullet,
but could not come up with wording for his Identify clause. <br>
Seems like one would have to identify them before benchmarking
against
them.<br>
<br>
avri<br>
<br>
<br>
<br>
<br>
On 30 Jun 2013, at 12:41, Avri Doria wrote:<br>
<br>
> Hi,<br>
> <br>
> Anyone want to take them on?<br>
> <br>
> If so, may I pass the editor token to you?<br>
> <br>
> avri<br>
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