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Dear Larisa,<br>
<br>
apologies for not coming back to you earlier - I was travelling
again with meetings in a 3rd country & was therefore offline for
the past 18 hours.<br>
<br>
The notes which you quoted in your message are old and I believe
have all been incorporated in the latest version of the document
that was distributed.<br>
<br>
The notes I was referring to on the call are attached.<br>
<br>
Summarising:<br>
<br>
1. I am asking about points of view on Raimundo Beca's comments -
but received no feedback from anyone on this.<br>
2. I pointed out to a comment from Chuck Gomes et al. which I do not
think was addressed.<br>
3. The note suggestion made by public comment contributors re: use
of "equitable participation" which might be an unachievable goal and
a suggestion to have "equitable opportunity to participate"<br>
4. a question about 10.4 (which was also from comments received
during the PC -- the Board over-ruling the GNSO PDP process?<br>
5. My (then) suggestions for strengthening Recommendation 8 - please
note that I believe this has been superceded by the friendly
amendment from Lise & Fiona Asonga (as discussed on the call)<br>
6. noting the missing of bullets on P.42 "Assessment of
Recommendation Effectiveness"<br>
7. Noting that SSR-RT implementation review page C-39 is messed up
& have eaten up part of the ALAC response/comment.<br>
8. My concern re: the overall conclusion of SSR-RT // although I do
NOT have replacement text for this because ultimately since the
SSR-RT section is (a) an appendix and (b) does not contain any
recommendations, I doubt anyone will act on it.<br>
9. My overall concern re: the emphasis on Recommendations at the
cost of Observations which I aired on the recent call and which
Brian promised to work something out for.<br>
<br>
Thanks,<br>
<br>
Olivier<br>
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<div class="moz-cite-prefix">On 17/12/2013 23:41, Larisa B. Gurnick
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style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri","sans-serif";color:#1F497D">Please
clarify if this is the communication you were referring to
in regards to your edits to the body of the report and the
Appendices? It would be helpful if you could indicate
specifically what changes you would like staff to include in
the most recent version of the report. If you were
referencing a more recent communication, then I apologize
for the confusion and omission and look forward to getting
your clarification as soon as feasible.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span
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you,<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<a class="moz-txt-link-abbreviated" href="mailto:atrt2-bounces@icann.org">atrt2-bounces@icann.org</a> [<a class="moz-txt-link-freetext" href="mailto:atrt2-bounces@icann.org">mailto:atrt2-bounces@icann.org</a>]
<b>On Behalf Of </b>Olivier MJ Crepin-Leblond<br>
<b>Sent:</b> Friday, October 11, 2013 4:13 PM<br>
<b>To:</b> Brian Cute<br>
<b>Cc:</b> <a class="moz-txt-link-abbreviated" href="mailto:atrt2@icann.org">atrt2@icann.org</a> (<a class="moz-txt-link-abbreviated" href="mailto:atrt2@icann.org">atrt2@icann.org</a>)<br>
<b>Subject:</b> Re: [atrt2] LAST CHANCE FOR EDITS!<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:12.0pt">Dear Brian,<br>
<br>
as I explained in my earlier message, I was involved in a car
accident yesterday, with no injury but which took most of my
time to finalise my comments. I do apologise. I sent you an
incomplete review of the document an hour ago. All in all, I
managed to re-read the whole document again including it's 2nd
half & have made a few more observations, all included in
the attached file.<br>
<br>
On the whole, I am pleased with the *substance* of the draft.
I have also read the *final* copy which you have sent to
Larisa, Charla & Alice. My over-arching concern, which I
did express in DC but which does not appear to have been
caught, whilst I read the final master, is that the *new
recommendations* which have come as a result of ATRT1
recommendation reviews are not clearly identifiable.<br>
<br>
Also, headers for the ATRT1 recommendations are inconsistent,
sometimes called ATRT1 recommendation X, sometimes called
"Recommendation X". And then some headers, even in the final
copy, say "Assessment of ATRT1 Recommendation 18, 19, 22" and
another one "Assessment of ATRT2 Recommendation... etc."
That's probably erroneous... and this makes for confusing
reading.<br>
<br>
I hope that Larisa & her Team will be able to fix this.<br>
<br>
Kind regards,<br>
<br>
Olivier<br>
<br>
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<p class="MsoNormal">On 10/10/2013 23:56, Brian Cute wrote:<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">Attached is the latest draft of the
Report and Recommendations. Please carefully note the
following:<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">1. Provide only SUBSTANTIVE AND
CRITICAL edits you may have on the SUBSTANCE of the draft
within 24 hours, or by 10:00p.m. UTC tomorrow.<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">2. Ignore edits concerning numbering,
missing citations, spelling etc. Paul and I will continue
over the next 24 hours to clean up the document so clean,
correctly numbered version will go out for public comment.
We will take any substantive and critical edits provided
by 10:00p.m. UTC tomorrow and work them into the document.
Our plan is to send the document to ICANN staff by
11:00p.m. UTC tomorrow to begin the translation process.<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">3. The Report will indicate that it is
a draft that is subject to change based on Community input
and continuing assessment by ATRT2 before the Final Report
and Recommendations issue.<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">Thanks to all.<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">Regards,<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">Brian<o:p></o:p></p>
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