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Dear David, Larisa,<br>
<br>
thanks for your follow-up in this.<br>
I have read through the whole document again & am happy with the
changes & the correction of the typographical/formatting error
in the ALAC's note.<br>
<br>
My comment on Recommendation 27 is quite simple. Currently, it
reads:<br>
<br>
"ATRT2 Assessment of Recommendation Effectiveness<br>
<br>
Based on the comments referenced above and similar comments both in
other public comments and relayed during the ICANN Durban meeting,
there may be some question as to whether the Westlake Governance DNS
Risk Framework is ?comprehensive within the scope of ICANN?s SSR
remit and limited missions? however it must be acknowledged that
comprehensiveness is a matter of opinion and those opinions appear
to vary significantly."<br>
<br>
I have a concern that we're already making no Recommendations of our
own, thus all of the text is tagged as "observations" - which is
weak - and the language used in this particular paragraph is
particularly weak. I suggest strengthening the message as:<br>
<br>
"ATRT2 Assessment of Recommendation Effectiveness<br>
<br>
Based on the comments referenced above and similar comments both in
other public comments and relayed during the ICANN Durban meeting,
there is some question as to whether the Westlake Governance DNS
Risk Framework is "comprehensive within the scope of ICANN's SSR
remit and limited missions". However, comprehensiveness is a matter
of opinion and those opinions vary significantly, which is cause for
concern."<br>
<br>
- --- end of quote ---<br>
<br>
I hope that this stands a better chance for the Board to check
whether to act on this observation, cross-check the scope of ICANN's
SSR remit and check if the Westlake report actually fills that
remit.<br>
<br>
Kind regards,<br>
<br>
Olivier<br>
<br>
<br>
On 19/12/2013 17:35, David Conrad wrote:<br>
<span style="white-space: pre;">> Larisa,<br>
><br>
> The edits look fine to me, however I gather Olivier has some
concern regarding the write up of SSR Rec 27:<br>
><br>
> "Recommendation 27 review is too complacent."<br>
><br>
> as well as a view that the commentary for that recommendation
does not reflect the ALAC statement. I'm happy to revise, but am
unsure how to address his concerns without additional information.<br>
><br>
> Regards,<br>
> -drc<br>
><br>
> On Dec 19, 2013, at 8:25 AM, Larisa B. Gurnick
<<a class="moz-txt-link-abbreviated" href="mailto:larisa.gurnick@icann.org">larisa.gurnick@icann.org</a>
<a class="moz-txt-link-rfc2396E" href="mailto:larisa.gurnick@icann.org"><mailto:larisa.gurnick@icann.org></a>> wrote:<br>
><br>
>> David,<br>
>><br>
>> Please review the proposed edits to Appendix C ? SSR
Review Implementation and provide staff with your final edits by
16 UTC on Friday, 20 December.<br>
>><br>
>> <br>
>><br>
>> Thank you,<br>
>><br>
>> <br>
>><br>
>> */Larisa B. Gurnick/*<br>
>><br>
>> Consultant/Senior Director, Organizational Reviews<br>
>><br>
>> Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers
(ICANN)<br>
>><br>
>> <a class="moz-txt-link-abbreviated" href="mailto:larisa.gurnick@icann.org">larisa.gurnick@icann.org</a>
<a class="moz-txt-link-rfc2396E" href="mailto:larisa.gurnick@icann.org"><mailto:larisa.gurnick@icann.org></a><br>
>><br>
>> 310 383-8995<br>
>><br>
>> <br>
>><br>
>> <Appendix C - SSR Assessment 19 Dec.docx><br>
><br>
><br>
><br>
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- -- <br>
Olivier MJ Crépin-Leblond, PhD<br>
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