<div dir="ltr">Hi Niels and all, <div><br></div><div>Congratulations to Niels and the team working on the visualisation. It is a great work and I find the infographic extremely informative. I have just a few observations:</div><div><br></div><div>- The line that goes from the UDHR to second generation and then to particular instruments is not clear, because some of the instruments, like the ICCPR are part of the first generation of HR, while the ICESCR is indeed document that consolidates second generation rights. We need a different breakout if we want to speak of the generations. </div><div>- On the human rights principles section, maybe it would be useful to mention the distinction from the responsibility to protect and respect, which is something mentioned in several occasions in our discussions in ICANN. </div><div>- Glossary: a) In INGOs there is a space missing and a typo in the word organisation. b) Add " DANE" to the glossary. c) Put the glossary in alphabetic order.</div><div>- FoE stream: --> new gTLD program --> new gTLD subsequent round (WG). The WG is looking at a wide scope of issues, not only FoE and the title of the WG (new gTLD subsequent round) in column 3 is not explanatory of any particular FoE issue. </div><div>- A suggestion came from CoE in the last ICANN meeting that we should rearrange the order in which we list the rights, maybe mirroring the order that they appear in the UDHR. I think it is a valuable suggestion. In any case, I would not start the list with due process, maybe it is good to start with a human right that is more widely " accepted" and understood in the ICANN space. </div><div>- Some of the ICANN policies of processes are actually active WGs. When this is the case, it would be good to indicate that clearly ex: new gTLD subsequent procedures WG, Rights protection mechanisms in all gTLDs WG, etc...</div><div><br></div><div>Reacting to Kathy's suggestion, I believe we should strictly follow the name of the policy or WG we are talking about. So, yes, if they have "Review" in the title, I would retain this word. But I would not add words like "balanced" if they are not in the official title. </div><div><br></div><div>Once again, great job and looking forward to the discussion on the visualisation in Helsinki!</div><div><br></div><div>Best wishes,</div><div>Marilia</div></div><div class="gmail_extra"><br><div class="gmail_quote">On Fri, Jun 10, 2016 at 1:48 PM, Kathy Kleiman <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:kathy@kathykleiman.com" target="_blank">kathy@kathykleiman.com</a>></span> wrote:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex">
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<p>Hi Niels and All,</p>
<p>The Rights Protection Mechanism listing seem a little more
directive than the other phrases -- and could be read to urge
specific positions rather than just listing the ICANN proceedings
that are looking at the issues. Can we be a bit more neutral in
our phrasing? I would recommend: <br>
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<p>- Review of appropriate protections for IGOs/INGOs in gTLDs
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- Review of balanced curative rights protections in IGO/INGOs in
gTLDs
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- Review of all rights protection mechanisms currently in gTLDs
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- Review of balanced rights protection mechanisms for future new
gTLD rounds
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<p>This will avoid misinterpretation... tx you! <br>
Best regards, Kathy
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<pre>Dear all,
I have integrated your comments and suggestions as well as I could and I
think we have a very nice info-graphic right now that we can present in
Helsinki.
So I would like to do a last call to see whether you all can live with this.
Of course this will remain a working document, but it would be great if
we can show this in Helsinki as work of the CCWP HR.
Looking forward to hear your comments, questions and/or suggestions.
Best,
Niels
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