<div dir="ltr"><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif">In this email, my responses to the comments.</div><div class="gmail_quote">---------- Forwarded message ----------<br>From: <b class="gmail_sendername">Greg Shatan</b> <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:gregshatanipc@gmail.com">gregshatanipc@gmail.com</a>></span><br>Date: Sun, Aug 7, 2016 at 6:07 PM<br>Subject: Re: FW: Revised Community Agreement Draft: 08-05-2016<br>To: Kavouss Arasteh <<a href="mailto:kavouss.arasteh@gmail.com">kavouss.arasteh@gmail.com</a>><br>Cc: Seun Ojedeji <<a href="mailto:seun.ojedeji@gmail.com">seun.ojedeji@gmail.com</a>>, Andrew Sullivan <<a href="mailto:ajs@anvilwalrusden.com">ajs@anvilwalrusden.com</a>>, "<a href="mailto:cwg-stewardship@icann.org">cwg-stewardship@icann.org</a>" <<a href="mailto:cwg-stewardship@icann.org">cwg-stewardship@icann.org</a>><br><br><br><div dir="ltr"><div style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif">All,</div><div style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif"><br></div><div style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif">Please see my responses (in "balloon" comments) to Kavouss's comments.</div><span class="HOEnZb"><font color="#888888"><div style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif"><br></div><div style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif">Greg</div></font></span></div><div class="HOEnZb"><div class="h5"><div class="gmail_extra"><br><div class="gmail_quote">On Sun, Aug 7, 2016 at 4:37 PM, Kavouss Arasteh <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:kavouss.arasteh@gmail.com" target="_blank">kavouss.arasteh@gmail.com</a>></span> wrote:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex"><div dir="ltr"><div>Dear All,</div><div>No matter who made the changes, I am commenting on the text not on the author's identity.</div><div>I have had to convert the PDF in word and have done my verifications and attached my comments</div><div>There are serious problems in some of the terms.</div><div>I have indicated all in terms of deletion with reasons and/or with comments in round bracket.</div><div>Regartds</div><span><font color="#888888"><div>Kavouss </div></font></span></div><div><div><div class="gmail_extra"><br><div class="gmail_quote">2016-08-07 20:15 GMT+02:00 Greg Shatan <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:gregshatanipc@gmail.com" target="_blank">gregshatanipc@gmail.com</a>></span>:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex">The changes were not made by me. The changes were made by the CWG's counsel and the IETF Trust's counsel working collaboratively, which came after discussion of the IANA IPR collaborative group (including reps of all the communities and the Trust).<div><br></div><div>I don't have the redline in Word. I sent to the list everything that was initially sent by the IETF Trust's counsel to CWG's counsel to the Client Committee list.<span><font color="#888888"><span></span></font></span></div><span><font color="#888888"><div><br></div></font></span><div><span><font color="#888888">Greg</font></span><div><div><br><br>On Sunday, August 7, 2016, Kavouss Arasteh <<a href="mailto:kavouss.arasteh@gmail.com" target="_blank">kavouss.arasteh@gmail.com</a>> wrote:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0px 0px 0px 0.8ex;padding-left:1ex;border-left-color:rgb(204,204,204);border-left-width:1px;border-left-style:solid"><div dir="ltr"><div>Dear ALL</div><div><br></div><div>I HAVE no comments on the initial text before being changed</div><div>Regards</div><div>Kavouss </div></div><div class="gmail_extra"><br><div class="gmail_quote">2016-08-07 18:04 GMT+02:00 Kavouss Arasteh <span dir="ltr"><<a>kavouss.arasteh@gmail.com</a>></span>:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0px 0px 0px 0.8ex;padding-left:1ex;border-left-color:rgb(204,204,204);border-left-width:1px;border-left-style:solid"><div dir="ltr"><div>Seun</div><div>NO</div><div>PLS DO NOT MAKE MY JOB HARD..</div><div>WHY NOT A RED MARK WORD VERSION </div><div>Regards</div><span><font color="#888888"><div>Kavouss </div><div><br></div></font></span></div><div><div><div class="gmail_extra"><br><div class="gmail_quote">2016-08-07 17:42 GMT+02:00 Seun Ojedeji <span dir="ltr"><<a>seun.ojedeji@gmail.com</a>></span>:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0px 0px 0px 0.8ex;padding-left:1ex;border-left-color:rgb(204,204,204);border-left-width:1px;border-left-style:solid"><p dir="ltr">Hello Kavous,</p>
<p dir="ltr">An option could be that you look at the PDF and make your comment on the word version(though you can make comment on the pdf as well)</p>
<p dir="ltr">Another option is if you (or someone) has the previous clean version then one can produce a redline off the two clean versions.</p><span>
<p dir="ltr">Regards</p>
<p dir="ltr">Sent from my LG G4<br>
Kindly excuse brevity and typos</p>
</span><div><div><div class="gmail_extra"><br><div class="gmail_quote">On 7 Aug 2016 4:37 p.m., "Kavouss Arasteh" <<a>kavouss.arasteh@gmail.com</a>> wrote:<br type="attribution"><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0px 0px 0px 0.8ex;padding-left:1ex;border-left-color:rgb(204,204,204);border-left-width:1px;border-left-style:solid"><div dir="ltr"><div>Dear Andrew,</div><div>Tks again for your kind reply.</div><div>Please send me a red mark Word Version and I Will reply today.</div><div>I HAVE SOME CONCERS ON SOME OF THE CHANGED MADE BY GREC</div><div>Regards</div><div>Kavouss </div><div><br></div></div><div class="gmail_extra"><br><div class="gmail_quote">2016-08-07 17:28 GMT+02:00 Andrew Sullivan <span dir="ltr"><<a>ajs@anvilwalrusden.com</a>></span>:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0px 0px 0px 0.8ex;padding-left:1ex;border-left-color:rgb(204,204,204);border-left-width:1px;border-left-style:solid">I don't know whetheer you will get that before tomorrow, and that is<br>
really rather late. Can you at least say what your concerns are?<br>
There really isn't a lot of time: this needs to go to public comment<br>
on Thursday. An additional day to wait for the comments would be bad.<br>
<br>
Best regards,<br>
<br>
A<br>
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On Sun, Aug 07, 2016 at 05:14:50PM +0200, Kavouss Arasteh wrote:<br>
> Seun,<br>
> I know that a word version was included but the Word Version is a clean<br>
> Text and it is difficult to identify the changes .I wish to see what was<br>
> the changes introduced by Greg<br>
> I still need the red mark text in WORD VERSION.<br>
> Regards<br>
> Kavouss<br>
><br>
> 2016-08-07 14:09 GMT+02:00 Seun Ojedeji <<a>seun.ojedeji@gmail.com</a>>:<br>
><br>
> > A word version was included in Greg's mail<br>
> ><br>
> > Regards<br>
> ><br>
> > Sent from my LG G4<br>
> > Kindly excuse brevity and typos<br>
> ><br>
> > On 7 Aug 2016 10:36 a.m., "Kavouss Arasteh" <<a>kavouss.arasteh@gmail.com</a>><br>
> > wrote:<br>
> ><br>
> >> Grec,<br>
> >> Thank you very much for the amendments. I do not agree with some of them<br>
> >> In order to enable me to provide my counter comments to you, pls provide<br>
> >> a word version of your amendment as soon as convinient<br>
> >> Regards<br>
> >> Kavouss<br>
> >><br>
> >><br>
> >> 2016-08-07 0:22 GMT+02:00 Greg Shatan <<a>gregshatanipc@gmail.com</a>>:<br>
> >><br>
> >>> CWG,<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> I am forwarding a revised draft of the proposed Community Agreement<br>
> >>> relating to the IANA IPR. In addition to any other comments you may have,<br>
> >>> I draw your attention to the two specific items in the email below: (1)<br>
> >>> identifying an entity to sign for the names community, and (2) providing a<br>
> >>> brief description of the IANA Services used by the names community (<br>
</div></div>> >>> *see* Exhibit A for descriptions provided by the other communities).<br>
<div><div>> >>><br>
> >>> This will be the subject of further refinement by the IPR collaborative<br>
> >>> group early in the week, with the goal of initiating a public comment<br>
> >>> period as soon as possible after the CWG-IANA meeting on Thursday.<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> Greg<br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>> ---------- Forwarded message ----------<br>
> >>> From: Hofheimer, Joshua T. <<a>jhofheimer@sidley.com</a>><br>
> >>> Date: Sat, Aug 6, 2016 at 4:55 PM<br>
> >>> Subject: [client com] FW: Revised Community Agreement Draft: 08-05-2016<br>
> >>> To: Client <<a>cwg-client@icann.org</a>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>> Dear Client Committee,<br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>> Attached please find a revised draft of the proposed Community Agreement<br>
> >>> for your review and comment. This is an iterative version prepared jointly<br>
> >>> by counsel (Sidley) to the CWG and counsel to the IETF Trust to reflect the<br>
> >>> 7-point discussion items. To be clear, it is still a work in progress, but<br>
> >>> we believe ready for the CWG to have an opportunity for review.<br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>> Two important issues to highlight:<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> 1) the Names Community needs to determine who will be the signatory<br>
> >>> party, acting on behalf of the Names Community, to the Community<br>
> >>> Agreement. For your information, the attached draft has the organizations<br>
> >>> put forward to represent the Numbers and Protocols Communities; and<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> 2) we need a brief description of the IANA services to be provided on<br>
> >>> behalf of the Names Community. The following high-level description was<br>
> >>> included in a draft of the Naming Functions Agreement. If this is<br>
> >>> acceptable for including here is well, please advise (or we ask the Client<br>
> >>> Committee to provide a sufficient description):<br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
</div></div>> >>> The “*IANA Naming Function*” is comprised of:<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> (a) Management of the DNS Root Zone (“*Root Zone Management*<br>
<span>> >>> ”);<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> (b) Management of the .INT top-level domain;<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> (c) Maintenance of a repository of internationalized<br>
> >>> domain name tables and label generation rule sets; and<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> (d) Provision of other services related to the management<br>
> >>> of .INT top-level domains, at ICANN’s reasonable request and at ICANN’s<br>
> >>> expense.<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> Please provide any comment or feedback as soon as practical, as we are<br>
> >>> trying to finalize the draft for approval by the various stakeholders and<br>
> >>> release for public comment by Thursday.<br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>> Thank you in advance.<br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>> Cheers,<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> Josh<br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
</span>> >>> *Joshua Hofheimer*<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> *Sidley Austin LLP*<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> *<a>jhofheimer@sidley.com</a> <<a>jhofheimer@sidley.com</a>>*<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> *<a href="tel:%28213%29%20896-6061" value="+12138966061" target="_blank">(213) 896-6061</a> <%28213%29%20896-6061> (LA direct)*<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> *<a href="tel:%28650%29%20565-7561" value="+16505657561" target="_blank">(650) 565-7561</a> <%28650%29%20565-7561> (Palo Alto direct)*<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> *<a href="tel:%28323%29%20708-2405" value="+13237082405" target="_blank">(323) 708-2405</a> <%28323%29%20708-2405> (cell)*<br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>> *From:* <a>iana-ipr-bounces@nro.net</a> [mailto:<a>iana-ipr-bounces@nro.n<wbr>et</a>] *On<br>
> >>> Behalf Of *Jorge Contreras<br>
> >>> *Sent:* Friday, August 05, 2016 10:01 AM<br>
> >>> *To:* <a>iana-ipr@nro.net</a><br>
> >>> *Subject:* [Iana-ipr] Revised Community Agreement Draft: 08-05-2016<br>
<div><div>> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>> All – attached is a draft of the Community Agreement that Josh and I<br>
> >>> have collaborated on over the past two days. We believe that it reflects<br>
> >>> the current requirements of the parties, and submit it for your review and<br>
> >>> discussion.<br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>> A clean version, as well as a marked version against the draft of<br>
> >>> 07-30-16 (in PDF format) are attached.<br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>> Please note a few items that still need to be completed, including the<br>
> >>> description of the IANA Names Service, the identities of the CCG<br>
> >>> representatives, etc.<br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>> Best regards,<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> Jorge<br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>> Jorge L. Contreras<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> Contreras Legal Strategy LLC<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> 1711 Massachusetts Ave. NW, No. 710<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> Washington, DC 20036<br>
> >>><br>
> >>> <a>contreraslegal@att.net</a><br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
> >>><br>
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