[CWG-DT-Stewardship] For your review - latest version of charter & notes from meeting

[Gomes, Chuck]

I added some responses to Avri's comments as well as some new edits for consideration and a few new personal comments that are all highlighted in the attached redline version.  I also identified sections and/or comments that I think need discussion by the full drafting by using green font.  Essentially that means that all comments need to be discussed along with the associated charter text.  I encourage others to do the same for other sections of the draft charter that they think the full DT should discuss and insert a comment for each one.

Chuck

-----Original Message-----
From: cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces at icann.org [mailto:cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces at icann.org] On Behalf Of Avri Doria
Sent: Sunday, July 27, 2014 4:54 AM
To: cwg-dt-stewardship at icann.org
Subject: Re: [CWG-DT-Stewardship] For your review - latest version of charter & notes from meeting

Hi,

Some additional edits and suggestions based on discussion in the NCSG.

avri

On 26-Jul-14 01:25, Grace Abuhamad wrote:
> Hi all,
> 
> Attached are two latest versions of the charter. I removed Allan's 
> notes as he requested. One version has redlined changes, the other is 
> clean with just comments.
> 
> Talk to you all on Monday,
> Grace
> 
> On 7/24/14 3:49 PM, "Allan MacGillivray" <allan.macgillivray at cira.ca>
> wrote:
> 
>> At the IETF BoF meeting this morning in Toronto, the IETF agreed to 
>> establish a working group on IANA transition.  Alissa Cooper made a 
>> presentation (available at 
>> http://www.ietf.org/proceedings/90/slides/slides-90-ianaplan-1.pptx ) 
>> which contains (page 11) a revised timeline for the ICG's work.  
>> While it remains even 'draftier' than their charter, it nevertheless 
>> reflects some discussion that the ICG has apparently had since their meeting last week.
>> You will  note that in this timeline, they are no longer seeking a 
>> submission from  each community by the end of the year, but rather by 
>> Feb. 2, just before ICANN Marrakech.  But the end date has been moved 
>> to June to reflect the likelihood that the NTIA will have to run its 
>> own domestic consultation process, which would likely include some 
>> form of US Congressional scrutiny.
>>
>> Marika - could I ask you to remove the notes from me in the next 
>> version of the draft charter?
>>
>> Thanks
>>
>> Allan
>>
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces at icann.org
>> [mailto:cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces at icann.org] On Behalf Of Marika 
>> Konings
>> Sent: July-24-14 6:47 AM
>> To: Avri Doria; cwg-dt-stewardship at icann.org
>> Subject: Re: [CWG-DT-Stewardship] For your review - latest version of 
>> charter & notes from meeting
>>
>> As the document still came up with the Academy WG name, I've taken 
>> the liberty to re-save the document under its original title, removed 
>> the comments that Chuck said could be removed and deleted the 
>> sentence 'and sub-working groups' to avoid any confusion over whether 
>> additional members would need to be appointed to sub-working groups. 
>> Please use this version to make any further comments / edits.
>>
>> Best regards,
>>
>> Marika
>>
>> On 22/07/14 16:41, "Avri Doria" <avri at acm.org> wrote:
>>
>>>
>>>
>>> On 22-Jul-14 09:40, Gomes, Chuck wrote:
>>>> Avri - Your name for the file indicates that you may have been 
>>>> working on the Academy WG around the same time.  :)
>>>
>>> actually just fumble fingering where i do a 'save as' and 
>>> accidentally press the wrong name.  the academy Wg file is from 2012.
>>>
>>> i have attached a copy with the correct file name, just for filing sake.
>>>
>>> thanks for noticing.
>>>
>>> avri
>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> All good contributions Avri.
>>>
>>> thanks
>>>
>>>>
>>>> I really like Avri's suggestion on the linkage between the 
>>>> Accountability effort and the IANA transition; see comment Ad10R9 
>>>> on page 3.
>>>>
>>>> I think she raises a very important question in comment Ad18R17 on 
>>>> page 4 :" Why would subgroups have different membership?"
>>>>
>>>> I definitely think "we should avoid voting" as she says in comment
>>>> Ad26R25 on page 5.
>>>>
>>>> On a different note, I suggest deleting the following comments from
>>>> me:  CG1 and CG16.
>>>>
>>>> Chuck
>>>>
>>>> Avri - Your name for the file indicates that you may have been 
>>>> working on the Academy WG around the same time.  :)
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> -----Original Message----- From: 
>>>> cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces at icann.org
>>>> [mailto:cwg-dt-stewardship-bounces at icann.org] On Behalf Of Avri 
>>>> Doria
>>>> Sent: Monday, July 21, 2014 11:28 PM To:
>>>> cwg-dt-stewardship at icann.org Subject: Re: [CWG-DT-Stewardship] For 
>>>> your review - latest version of charter & notes from meeting
>>>>
>>>> Hi,
>>>>
>>>> I have added a few more comments.
>>>>
>>>> avri
>>>>
>>
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