[CWG-Stewardship] For your review - version V3.3

[Greg Shatan]

I agree with Alissa that this needs to be clarified.  Some of the lack of
clarity is due to concern about having a proposal that goes beyond naming
functions.  This has resulted in some odd phrasings and odd proposals.

In my view, splitting the IANA personnel and assets so this is a
"names-only" proposal is unrealistic and unnecessary. Because we are within
ICANN, we have a different relationship to the IANA Functions group.  We
should make it clear that the whole ball of wax would move to PTI, and put
that out for public comment.  We should flag this specifically for the
CRISP and IANAPLAN group.

Greg

On Tue, Apr 21, 2015 at 11:58 AM, Greg Shatan <gregshatanipc at gmail.com>
wrote:

> In this instance, I agree with Christopher.  I believe both statements are
> accurate (though the first is less than mellifluous in its phrasing).
>
> Greg Shatan
>
> On Tue, Apr 21, 2015 at 11:36 AM, CW Lists <lists at christopherwilkinson.eu>
> wrote:
>
>> I prefer the existing text, unchanged.
>>
>> CW
>>
>>
>> On 21 Apr 2015, at 16:47, Brenden Kuerbis <bnkuerbi at syr.edu> wrote:
>>
>> Hi Marika,
>>
>> The first bullet in Section III.A says:
>>
>> ICANN, through an affiliate controlled by ICANN, to continue as the IANA
>>> Functions Operator for the Naming Related Services through the creation of
>>> a separate legal entity, Post-Transition IANA (PTI).
>>
>>
>> Section III.A.i.a, which is text provided by Sidley in consultation with
>> the CWG, says:
>>
>> A contract would be entered between PTI and ICANN, which would give PTI
>>> the rights and obligations as the IANA Functions Operator.
>>
>>
>>
>> I believe the latter statement is correct, and the prior bullet is
>> inconsistent with it (or at least very unclear). Perhaps Sidley could
>> provide more accurate text for the bullet in Section III.A, or I would
>> suggest:
>>
>>
>>>    - Creation of a legally separated affiliate, Post-Transition IANA
>>>    (PTI), to provide the IANA functions.
>>>
>>>
>> This would be followed by the existing bullets:
>>
>>
>>>    - Establishment of service level agreement between ICANN and PTI,
>>>    the IANA Functions Operator for the Naming Related Services.
>>>    - Changes proposed to root zone environment and relationship with
>>>    root zone maintainer.
>>>
>>>
>>
>>
>>
>> -- Brenden
>>
>> On Mon, Apr 20, 2015 at 2:50 PM, Marika Konings <marika.konings at icann.org
>> > wrote:
>>
>>>  Dear All,
>>>
>>>  Please find attached an updated draft which now incorporates, amongst
>>> others, a summary for section III, DT X, information from the legal memo,
>>> updates as a result of comments received and proposed text for section
>>> IIIB. Note that we’ve also reorganised the annexes to match the flow of the
>>> document.
>>>
>>>  *Please note that that there a number of comments that have been
>>> flagged that need further consideration by the different DTs. We would like
>>> to encourage the leads of the DTs to pick up on the items that have been
>>> flagged for review and provide feedback on those items to the CWG mailing
>>> list as soon as possible.*
>>>
>>>  Also, note that we’ve incorporated those edits and/or comments that we
>>> considered corrections and/or clarifications of existing content as well as
>>> responses to some of the Sidley comments. If you do not agree with those
>>> responses or updates or are of the view that these are more than
>>> corrections and/or clarifications, please flag those accordingly.
>>>
>>>  You are encouraged to flag any items that you think warrant CWG
>>> consideration by Tuesday 20 April at 16.00 UTC at the latest. Other minor
>>> edits and/or clarifications can be submitted until Tuesday 20 April 23.59
>>> UTC.
>>>
>>>  For your convenience I’ve attached a redline and clean version both in
>>> Word as well as pdf.
>>>
>>>  Thanks again for all your feedback!
>>>
>>>  Marika
>>>
>>
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