[Gnso-newgtld-wg-wt5] Initial Report - final version for publication

[Greg Shatan]

Martin and Co-Leads,

Thank you - much appreciated!

Greg

On Tue, Dec 4, 2018 at 4:22 PM Martin Sutton <martin at brandregistrygroup.org>
wrote:

> Greg,
>
> Thank you for your suggestion. As this is not a substantive edit we are
> happy to make this final change before the report is issued.
>
> Kind regards,
>
> WT5 Co-Leads
>
> Sent from my iPad
>
> On 4 Dec 2018, at 17:51, Greg Shatan <gregshatanipc at gmail.com> wrote:
>
> Staff and all,
>
> The addition of the word “perceived” in the second edit is inappropriate,
> adds a note of skepticism, and changes the meaning of the sentence.
>
> *This needs to be removed before publication.  *
>
> Alternatively, we can add words like “perceived”, “claimed” and “alleged”
> liberally throughout the rest of the document.  I think the first option is
> easier to deal with.  Thank you.
>
> Best regards,
>
> Greg
>
> On Tue, Dec 4, 2018 at 12:36 PM Emily Barabas <emily.barabas at icann.org>
> wrote:
>
>> Dear Work Track 5 members,
>>
>>
>>
>> Thank you for your final input on the Initial Report. Working closely
>> with the four co-leaders, staff has incorporated the following final edits
>> based on the additional comments received:
>>
>>
>>
>>    - Page 13, final paragraph of sub-section b: Since the purpose of
>>    this sub-section is to describe, in as accurate and neutral a manner as
>>    possible, what happened in the 2012 round, the text now reads: "There were
>>    varying outcomes; Some of these TLDs were permitted to move forward, some
>>    were only permitted where an arrangement could be reached with the
>>    geographic territory in question, and others were either not allowed to
>>    proceed or are still the subject of dispute."
>>    - Page 37, the sentence “Some of the problems and negative
>>    experiences that some Work Track members identified from the 2012 round
>>    include the following” has been changed to “Some Work Track members
>>    identified perceived problems / negative experiences from the 2012 round.”
>>    This edit follows comments that the sentence was phrased in an awkward
>>    manner and concern that it is redundant to use the terms “problems” and
>>    “negative experiences” in the same sentence. The edit seeks to address the
>>    underlying concern while acknowledging that these terms are related but
>>    have different meanings, and that Work Track members have used both terms
>>    to describe items in the list that follows.
>>
>>
>>
>> Attached you will find the final version of the Initial Report that will
>> be published for public comment shortly. You will also find the text of the
>> announcement that will be posted for this public comment period.
>> Congratulations to all Work Track members for your hard work to reach this
>> milestone!
>>
>>
>>
>> Kind regards,
>>
>> Emily
>>
>>
>>
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>>
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