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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;color:#1F497D">Hi all, <o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;color:#1F497D">With regard to <b>
Section 3 – Coordination with other efforts: </b>a</span><span style="color:#1F497D">s drafted it seems to me that if we have already identified a particular workstream then it might appear to the recipient that nothing further is required, whereas presumably
we do want recipients to give feedback – is that correct? If so, I thought the following amendment or something similar might be in order:
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;color:#1F497D"><o:p> </o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal">“We ask that you consider <span style="color:red">and clarify the extent to which the above-identified efforts, or any additional efforts within the community, should be considered by this PDP WG
</span><s>if there are additional efforts within the community that this PDP WG should consider</s> during its deliberations.”<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><b><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Tahoma","sans-serif"">From:</span></b><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Tahoma","sans-serif""> gnso-newgtld-wg-bounces@icann.org [mailto:gnso-newgtld-wg-bounces@icann.org]
<b>On Behalf Of </b>Steve Chan<br>
<b>Sent:</b> 03 June 2016 06:28<br>
<b>To:</b> gnso-newgtld-wg@icann.org<br>
<b>Subject:</b> [Gnso-newgtld-wg] - Draft Community Comment 1<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:11.0pt">Dear WG Members,<o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:11.0pt"><o:p> </o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:11.0pt">As agreed on the WG’s call on 1 June, staff has attempted to incorporate the feedback received on the call, as well as attempting to “normalize” the text so that it’s written from a single voice.
The starting point was an export of the draft contained in the Google Doc (<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Gh8ugZAomD2AGNymmVRgKGP9TA2KQ7BkQbrRAEvsrxs/edit?usp=sharing)">https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Gh8ugZAomD2AGNymmVRgKGP9TA2KQ7BkQbrRAEvsrxs/edit?usp=sharing)</a>
to a Word document, which was then redlined with proposed changes. I’ve also included a clean document for your ease of reading.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:11.0pt"><o:p> </o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:11.0pt">In the interest of providing as much time as possible for WG members to consider this latest draft ahead of the next WG call on Monday, 6 June, staff and the co-chairs agreed to share this document
without a full review by the co-chairs, though limited discussion was held to discuss the expected changes. As a result, the co-chairs may contribute to suggested changes on the list, alongside WG members.
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<p class="MsoNormal"><b><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:11.0pt">As a reminder, the intent is for WG members to suggest edits on the list ahead of the 6 June meeting, come to agreement on a final version at the conclusion of that meeting, and send to the
SO/AC/SG/Cs shortly thereafter.<o:p></o:p></span></b></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:11.0pt">Please let me know if you have any questions or concerns.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:11.0pt">Best,<o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:11.0pt">Steve<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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