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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;color:#1F497D">With the caveat that I may have missed something (and, in that case, my comments on the transcript take precedence), attached and copied below is a chart of my redline comments.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:9.0pt">2.2.2.2.e.1 (Clarity of Application Process)<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:9.0pt">Change question to: Is ICANN organization capable of scaling to handle application volume and, if not, what would have to happen in order for ICANN organization to scale?<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:9.0pt">Add as last sentence to bullet: If so, which categories
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:9.0pt">2.2.4.f (Different TLD Types)<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:9.0pt">2.2.6.f (Accreditation Programs)<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><b><span style="font-size:11.0pt">From:</span></b><span style="font-size:11.0pt"> Gnso-newgtld-wg [mailto:gnso-newgtld-wg-bounces@icann.org]
<b>On Behalf Of </b>Steve Chan<br>
<b>Sent:</b> Wednesday, June 20, 2018 12:30 AM<br>
<b>To:</b> gnso-newgtld-wg@icann.org<br>
<b>Subject:</b> [Gnso-newgtld-wg] - Initial Report Excerpts Red-lines and Updated Preamble<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:10.0pt">Dear WG Members,<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:10.0pt">As noted by Jeff a short while ago, the red-lined excerpts have all been made available on the Wiki here:
<a href="https://community.icann.org/x/NwUhB">https://community.icann.org/x/NwUhB</a>. On this page, you will a full set of red-lined excerpts, all sections in a single document. You will also find extracts of each section as well. All of these documents are
available in Word and PDF.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:10.0pt">Included as well on this page is the latest version of the remaining elements of the Initial Report, which includes edits suggested by WG members to the Preamble. The next steps from the staff side are to
complete some of the remaining elements in the Initial Report, as well as to begin integrating the excerpts into the report.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:10.0pt">If you have any questions, please do let us know.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:10.0pt">Best,<o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:10.0pt">Steve, Emily, and Julie<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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