[Internal-cg] RFP - publishable draft?

[Kavouss Arasteh]

Dear Milton,
Thank you very much for your kind response .You are among the most
knowledgeable and competent as far as I understand the exchange of message.
Pls kindly note that the term LIGHT before coordination, weakenes our
actions .It could be interpreted that the coordination actions that we
undertake is not sufficiently serious as it is qualified by the adjective
LIGHT.

Would it cause any difficulty that we delete that and just refer to
coordination without any qualification.
Regards
Kavouss


2014-08-29 15:54 GMT+02:00 Milton L Mueller <mueller at syr.edu>:

>  My opinions regarding Kavouss’s proposed changes:
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> Would prefer to keep “light” in there.
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> OK to remove the word “only” from the paragraph on Comments
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> OK to replace “direct” with “forward”
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> OK to replace “encourages” with “urges”
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> Milton L Mueller
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> Laura J and L. Douglas Meredith Professor
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> Syracuse University School of Information Studies
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> http://faculty.ischool.syr.edu/mueller/
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> *From:* internal-cg-bounces at icann.org [mailto:
> internal-cg-bounces at icann.org] *On Behalf Of *Martin Boyle
> *Sent:* Friday, August 29, 2014 8:46 AM
> *To:* Kavouss Arasteh; Daniel Karrenberg
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> *Cc:* Coordination Group
> *Subject:* Re: [Internal-cg] RFP - publishable draft?
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> Thanks Alissa for your work on this.  I’m sure we could continue
> word-smithing this for a long time, and I’m happy to go.
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> Kavouss’s comment on light:  I like the term as it reminds everyone that
> we are not planning to play the autocrats.  But if non-native English
> speakers find the meaning obscure I’m ok without.
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> Cheers
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> Martin
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> *From:* internal-cg-bounces at icann.org [
> mailto:internal-cg-bounces at icann.org <internal-cg-bounces at icann.org>] *On
> Behalf Of *Kavouss Arasteh
> *Sent:* 29 August 2014 13:32
> *To:* Daniel Karrenberg
> *Cc:* Coordination Group
> *Subject:* Re: [Internal-cg] RFP - publishable draft?
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> Dear Alissa,
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> Dear All,
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> I suggest some small amendments to make various parts of the text
> consistent with each other
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> See attachment
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> Kavouss  the l
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> 2014-08-29 13:37 GMT+02:00 Daniel Karrenberg <daniel.karrenberg at ripe.net>:
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> On 28.08.14 23:36 , Alissa Cooper wrote:
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> > Are there any objections to publishing this as a draft (and having the
> > secretariat host it on our web site and make an announcement about its
> > existence) by Sept 1?
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> I support publishing this as a daft with Elise's corrections.
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> Daniel
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