[Internal-cg] [ianatransition] Comments on Draft charter for the IANA Stewardship Transition Coordination Group

[Milton L Mueller]

I would oppose most of the proposed changes in the preamble, where we define the deliverable of the group. 
The changes in the first sentence are mere word-smithing and a matter of style and I prefer to directness of the original version. 
All but one of the other proposed changes in the first paragraph seem ill-advised to me. The IANA functions are being transferred to some set of actors in the Internet community; our job is to ensure that the proposal makes those actors accountable to the global MS community (whatever that is) but not to transfer them to the global MS comm as such. Thus, I prefer "Internet community" to "global MS community." Further, "global MS community" is a mouthful and a bit of jargon to an ordinary person; let's just say what we mean. 

I do agree that the final proposal we submit should include dissenting views. But given that our job is to assist in and compile an executable proposal it makes no sense to include any and all proposals that were either not workable nor not supported. 

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Subject: [ianatransition] Comments on Draft charter for the IANA Stewardship Transition Coordination Group

Please find attached my comments on the Draft charter for the IANA Stewardship Transition Coordination Group and some proposed revisions.

Best,
Richard Hill