[Internal-cg] ICG FAQ ..

[Manal Ismail]

Many thanks Daniel ..
I've changed "ICG members are also requested to reach out" into "ICG members are reaching out" ..
Hope this is ok .. Will try to go through the document .. 

Kind Regards
--Manal 

-----Original Message-----
From: Daniel Karrenberg [mailto:daniel.karrenberg at ripe.net] 
Sent: Tuesday, September 30, 2014 8:00 AM
To: Milton L Mueller; Manal Ismail; internal-cg at icann.org
Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] ICG FAQ ..

On 30.09.14 3:12 , Milton L Mueller wrote:
> Manal et al
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> Good start.
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> I would propose the following modifications.
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> Add a new           question between #9 and #10, which I here label 9 ½ :
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> *9 ½ Can I submit my own proposal for how the IANA transition should
> take place? ***
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> You can, but the ICG is not authorized to pick and choose among
> competing proposals. That would centralize the authority over the IANA
> transition in ICG's hands, and the general preference is for a bottom
> up, consensual process. If you submit a proposal directly to the ICG
> without participating in the processes convened by the operational
> communities, all the ICG can do is forward that proposal to the relevant
> OCs. If you think your ideas have been ignored or not fairly treated in
> the OC proposal development process, you can express this view directly
> to the ICG or in the public comment period. But the ICG cannot give
> these objections any weight if the person made no effort to participate
> in the operational community-convened process.
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> On *Question 14*, I found the answer not very meaningful. I would
> propose the following alternative language:
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> ICG is closely following ICANN Accountability Process
> <https://community.icann.org/category/accountability>. After receiving
> consensus proposals from the operational communities, ICG will conduct
> an analysis of their overall implications for ICANN accountability. If
> there are gaps or problems, ICG will check to see whether these gaps are
> filled by the results of the ICANN enhanced accountability process. If
> they are not, ICG will return the proposals to the relevant operational
> community(ies) for amendment.
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> On *Question 15*, "How is ICG reaching out?"  I would delete the
> language "ICG members have participated in the IANA stewardship
> transition session
> <http://london50.icann.org/en/schedule/thu-iana-stewardship-transition>held
> at the ICANN 50 meeting in London, and  
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> If someone asks that question now they don't care what we did 3-4 months
> ago. They want to know what we are doing now.
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+1 on the suggestions

Also eliminate passive forms as much as possible and look to eliminate
expressing intentions where possible, e.g. change "ICG members are
requested" into "ICG members will".

Good work!

Daniel