[Internal-cg] Blog post

Milton L Mueller mueller at syr.edu
Mon Jan 19 16:13:51 UTC 2015


Blog looks fine to me. I would however advise you to find another adjective than "fulsome" to describe the debate. 
The primary meaning of this term is "extravagant, excessive, overdone," etc. We wouldn't want to say that about the IANA transition debate, now would we?

> -----Original Message-----
> From: internal-cg-bounces at icann.org [mailto:internal-cg-
> bounces at icann.org] On Behalf Of Lynn St.Amour
> Sent: Monday, January 19, 2015 9:06 AM
> To: Alissa Cooper
> Cc: ICG
> Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] Blog post
> 
> Hi Alissa,
> 
> very good article.  My comments were so few that I simply included
> them here and did not update the document itself.  They are of course
> only suggestions as this is your blog...
> 
> - 1st para - suggest replacing "community consensus" with "the
> consensus of their communities"  to make it even more clear that
> these processes live in the respective communities.
> 
> - 5th para. - nit. for completeness: add NTIA to Larry's title.
> 
> - 3rd para. from the end -  current sentence reads: "Thus, the assembly
> and finalization process has many built-in checks to ensure that the
> final plan is of the highest quality, addresses feedback from anyone
> who chooses to provide it, and represents community consensus."
> Suggest deleting: "from anyone who chooses to provide it" as this
> could be confusing (or over inviting)
> 
> - Penultimate para. -   consider replacing "askance" with "with surprise"
> -- surely these types of M/S processes are no longer so foreign, even if
> not universally applauded :-).
> 
> Again, the blog is very good.
> 
> Thanks much for doing this.
> 
> Lynn
> 
> 
> 
> On Jan 16, 2015, at 12:49 AM, Alissa Cooper <alissa at cooperw.in>
> wrote:
> 
> > Last week we had some mailing list discussion about a blog post I
> could write to provide an update about timing, next steps, and our
> perspective of the process to date. Attached and in Dropbox
> <https://www.dropbox.com/home/CoordinationGroup/January%202
> 015%20blog%20post> is a draft. Please send feedback to the list. It
> would be great to get this posted early next week.
> >
> > Given the blog format, I took a few liberties with the language and
> tone - there is a little (attempted) humor in there.
> >
> > Alissa
> >
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