<div dir="ltr"><div>TOP URGENT</div><div>Martin,</div><div>Alissa</div><div>Please and please provide an editorially updated doc. possibly with new reference called Draft for Conference call from Alissa by styopping any further perfection of text just few hours before Conference call</div><div>Regards</div><div>Kavouss </div><div><br></div></div><div class="gmail_extra"><br><div class="gmail_quote">2014-09-17 12:20 GMT+02:00 Martin Boyle <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:Martin.Boyle@nominet.org.uk" target="_blank">Martin.Boyle@nominet.org.uk</a>></span>:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex">
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">Thanks Manal: as you say, these are all quite forward drafting changes and do make the text much clearer, without altering the intentions of the text. I’m a great fan of saying things as clearly as we can,
so I’d be happy with adopting all of these proposals while not re-opening the text to further discussion.<u></u><u></u></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">Thanks<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<b><span lang="EN-US" style="font-family:"Tahoma","sans-serif";font-size:10pt">From:</span></b><span lang="EN-US" style="font-family:"Tahoma","sans-serif";font-size:10pt"> <a href="mailto:internal-cg-bounces@icann.org" target="_blank">internal-cg-bounces@icann.org</a> [mailto:<a href="mailto:internal-cg-bounces@icann.org" target="_blank">internal-cg-bounces@icann.org</a>]
<b>On Behalf Of </b>Manal Ismail<br>
<b>Sent:</b> 17 September 2014 11:35<br>
<b>To:</b> Alissa Cooper; joseph alhadeff; <a href="mailto:internal-cg@icann.org" target="_blank">internal-cg@icann.org</a></span><div><div class="h5"><br>
<b>Subject:</b> Re: [Internal-cg] Consensus document - for discussion Sept 17<u></u><u></u></div></div><p></p>
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<span lang="EN-US" style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">Many thanks Alissa and all who have contributed to this document ..<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<span lang="EN-US" style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">I'm sending my editorial remarks below following your suggestion ..
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<span lang="EN-US" style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">It's worth noting that I'm flexible to revert to the original language wherever deemed more appropriate ..<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<span lang="EN-US" style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">Page 1:<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<u></u><span lang="EN-US" style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"><span>-<span style="font:7pt/normal "Times New Roman";font-size-adjust:none;font-stretch:normal">
</span></span></span><u></u><span lang="EN-US" style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">4<sup>th</sup> paragraph under 2. : replace capital 'M' of 'ICG Members' with small 'm' for consistency<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<u></u><span lang="EN-US" style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"><span>-<span style="font:7pt/normal "Times New Roman";font-size-adjust:none;font-stretch:normal">
</span></span></span><u></u><span lang="EN-US" style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">I've tried the url at the footnote and it did not work (might be my problem but worth someone else checking) ..<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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</span></span></span><u></u><span lang="EN-US" style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">3<sup>rd</sup> paragraph under 3. :
</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-family:"Times New Roman","serif";font-size:12pt">For cases
<s>for which</s> <span style="color:red">where</span> it has been previously agreed that a decision is to be made at a given meeting and one or more members are not
<s> in a position to attend</s> <span style="color:red">present at</span> that meeting, these members may provide their views to the ICG in advance in order that those views be considered at the scheduled meeting<s> for decision making</s>. Should the decision
made not meet the <s>requirements </s><span style="color:red">views</span> of those absent, there should be another attempt to find a suitable compromise. Absent members<s>
</s> should be invited to provide the ICG with a written statement of their concerns for inclusion in the report /conclusions of the ICG.</span><span lang="EN-US" style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"><u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<u></u><span lang="EN-US" style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"><span>-<span style="font:7pt/normal "Times New Roman";font-size-adjust:none;font-stretch:normal">
</span></span></span><u></u><span lang="EN-US" style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">4<sup>th</sup> paragraph under 3. : I suggest the deletion of this paragraph as, to me, it is completely redundant to paragraph 3 above .. if it was decided to remain, there's a missing
full-stop at the end of the paragraph ..<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<span lang="EN-US" style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">I do not dare to suggest any changes on the following pages
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<span lang="EN-US" style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">Hope you find the above straight forward non-substantial changes ..
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<span lang="EN-US" style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">Kind Regards<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<span lang="EN-US" style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">--Manal<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<b><span lang="EN-US" style="font-family:"Tahoma","sans-serif";font-size:10pt">From:</span></b><span lang="EN-US" style="font-family:"Tahoma","sans-serif";font-size:10pt">
<a href="mailto:internal-cg-bounces@icann.org" target="_blank">internal-cg-bounces@icann.org</a> [<a href="mailto:internal-cg-bounces@icann.org" target="_blank">mailto:internal-cg-bounces@icann.org</a>]
<b>On Behalf Of </b>Alissa Cooper<br>
<b>Sent:</b> Wednesday, September 17, 2014 2:40 AM<br>
<b>To:</b> joseph alhadeff; <a href="mailto:internal-cg@icann.org" target="_blank">internal-cg@icann.org</a><br>
<b>Subject:</b> Re: [Internal-cg] Consensus document - for discussion Sept 17<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US" style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt">Attached and in Dropbox are the versions we will use on the call on Sept 17:<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US" style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt">ICG Guidelines for the Decision Making-v12-MU-ALC-JA-ALC.docx<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US" style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt">All of the changes since v12-MU-ALC are editorial (mostly typo fixes and white space deletions), except one: on page 1, I added the text suggested by Joe about public
comment periods. The editorial fixes include the suggestions made by Joe, Wolf-Ulrich, Kavouss, and Milton (off-list).<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US" style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt">If people spot further editorial issues prior to the call, please send them in email to the mailing list, rather than editing the document directly, and I will incorporate
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US" style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt">Thanks,<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US" style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt">On 9/16/14, 5:14 AM, "joseph alhadeff" <<a href="mailto:joseph.alhadeff@oracle.com" target="_blank">joseph.alhadeff@oracle.com</a>> wrote:<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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The draft is acceptable as is - thanks for your work on editing... I have proposed a few non-substantive edits to improve understanding - for example use of public comment forum may be read not to include written comments, propose replacing forum with consultation,
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One possible addition might be a reaffirmation of our commitment to consultation which should be differentiated from our 7 day period for decisions... Possible language which could be added to making decisions could be:<br>
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</span><span lang="EN-US" style="color:black">ICG will make all reasonable efforts to enable member stakeholder communities to have appropriate time to consult with their members on issues on which the ICG will make substantive decisions. Where appropriate
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<span lang="EN-US" style="color:black;font-size:10.5pt">On 9/16/2014 4:40 AM, Kavouss Arasteh wrote:<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<span lang="EN-US" style="color:black;font-size:10.5pt">I have read your edited text which seems to cover most or almost every points.<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<span lang="EN-US" style="color:black;font-size:10.5pt">Please let me to ck it again and come back to you
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