<div dir="ltr"><div>Dear All,</div><div>I strongly suggest we avoid to make any perfection to the text.</div><div>We just take what we have agreed .</div><div>We engage in such a liberty to further improve the language in anstylic fashion we may have a situation to be faced with unintended consequences.</div><div>I therefore humbly suggest not to make any improvement rather to detect any editorial and purely editorial amendment</div><div>Regards</div><div>Kavouss </div></div><div class="gmail_extra"><br><div class="gmail_quote">2014-09-17 12:34 GMT+02:00 Manal Ismail <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:manal@tra.gov.eg" target="_blank">manal@tra.gov.eg</a>></span>:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex">
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">Many thanks Alissa and all who have
contributed to this document ..<u></u><u></u></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">I'm sending my editorial remarks below following
your suggestion .. <u></u><u></u></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">It's worth noting that I'm flexible to
revert to the original language wherever deemed more appropriate ..<u></u><u></u></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"><u></u> <u></u></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">Page 1:<u></u><u></u></span></p>
<p style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><u></u><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"><span>-<span style="font:7pt/normal "Times New Roman";font-size-adjust:none;font-stretch:normal">
</span></span></span><u></u><span dir="LTR"></span><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">4<sup>th</sup>
paragraph under 2. : replace capital 'M' of 'ICG Members' with small 'm' for
consistency<u></u><u></u></span></p>
<p style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"><u></u> <u></u></span></p>
<p style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><u></u><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"><span>-<span style="font:7pt/normal "Times New Roman";font-size-adjust:none;font-stretch:normal">
</span></span></span><u></u><span dir="LTR"></span><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">I've
tried the url at the footnote and it did not work (might be my problem but worth
someone else checking) ..<u></u><u></u></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"><u></u> <u></u></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">Page 2:<u></u><u></u></span></p>
<p style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><u></u><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"><span>-<span style="font:7pt/normal "Times New Roman";font-size-adjust:none;font-stretch:normal">
</span></span></span><u></u><span dir="LTR"></span><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">3<sup>rd</sup>
paragraph under 3. : </span><span style="font-family:"Times New Roman","serif";font-size:12pt">For
cases <s>for which</s> <span style="color:red">where</span> it has been
previously agreed that a decision is to be made at a given meeting and one or
more members are not <s> in a position to attend</s> <span style="color:red">present
at</span> that meeting, these members may provide their views to the ICG in
advance in order that those views be considered at the scheduled meeting<s> for
decision making</s>. Should the decision made not meet the <s>requirements </s><span style="color:red">views</span> of those absent, there should be another attempt
to find a suitable compromise. Absent members<s> </s> should be invited to
provide the ICG with a written statement of their concerns for inclusion in the
report /conclusions of the ICG.</span><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"><u></u><u></u></span></p>
<p style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"><u></u> <u></u></span></p>
<p style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><u></u><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"><span>-<span style="font:7pt/normal "Times New Roman";font-size-adjust:none;font-stretch:normal">
</span></span></span><u></u><span dir="LTR"></span><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">4<sup>th</sup>
paragraph under 3. : I suggest the deletion of this paragraph as, to me, it is
completely redundant to paragraph 3 above .. if it was decided to remain,
there's a missing full-stop at the end of the paragraph ..<u></u><u></u></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"><u></u> <u></u></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">I do not dare to suggest any changes on the
following pages </span><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125);font-family:Wingdings">J</span><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"> ..<u></u><u></u></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"><u></u> <u></u></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">Hope you find the above straight forward
non-substantial changes .. <u></u><u></u></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"><u></u> <u></u></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">Kind Regards<u></u><u></u></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)">--Manal<u></u><u></u></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:rgb(31,73,125)"><u></u> <u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><b><span style="font-family:"Tahoma","sans-serif";font-size:10pt">From:</span></b><span style="font-family:"Tahoma","sans-serif";font-size:10pt">
<a href="mailto:internal-cg-bounces@icann.org" target="_blank">internal-cg-bounces@icann.org</a> [mailto:<a href="mailto:internal-cg-bounces@icann.org" target="_blank">internal-cg-bounces@icann.org</a>] <b>On
Behalf Of </b>Alissa Cooper<br>
<b>Sent:</b> Wednesday, September 17, 2014 2:40 AM<br>
<b>To:</b> joseph alhadeff; <a href="mailto:internal-cg@icann.org" target="_blank">internal-cg@icann.org</a><span><br>
<b>Subject:</b> Re: [Internal-cg] Consensus document - for discussion Sept 17<u></u><u></u></span></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt">All,<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt">Attached
and in Dropbox are the versions we will use on the call on Sept 17:<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt"><u></u> <u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt">ICG
Guidelines for the Decision Making-v12-MU-ALC-JA-ALC.docx<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt">ICG
Guidelines for the Decision Making-v12-MU-ALC-JA-ALC-clean.docx<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt"><u></u> <u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt">All
of the changes since v12-MU-ALC are editorial (mostly typo fixes and white
space deletions), except one: on page 1, I added the text suggested by Joe
about public comment periods. The editorial fixes include the suggestions made
by Joe, Wolf-Ulrich, Kavouss, and Milton (off-list).<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt"><u></u> <u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt">If
people spot further editorial issues prior to the call, please send them in
email to the mailing list, rather than editing the document directly, and I
will incorporate them prior to the call.<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt"><u></u> <u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt">Thanks,<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt">Alissa<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt"><u></u> <u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="color:black;line-height:115%;font-size:10.5pt">On
9/16/14, 5:14 AM, "joseph alhadeff" <<a href="mailto:joseph.alhadeff@oracle.com" target="_blank">joseph.alhadeff@oracle.com</a>>
wrote:<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:12pt"><span style="color:black;font-size:10.5pt">Alissa, Colleagues:<br>
<br>
The draft is acceptable as is - thanks for your work on editing... I have
proposed a few non-substantive edits to improve understanding - for example use
of public comment forum may be read not to include written comments, propose
replacing forum with consultation, etc.<br>
<br>
One possible addition might be a reaffirmation of our commitment to
consultation which should be differentiated from our 7 day period for
decisions... Possible language which could be added to making decisions
could be:<br>
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</span><span style="color:black">ICG will make all reasonable efforts to
enable member stakeholder communities to have appropriate time to consult with
their members on issues on which the ICG will make substantive decisions.
Where appropriate and practicable, public comment periods will also be provided</span><span style="color:black;font-size:10.5pt"> .<br>
<br>
Joe<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:black;font-size:10.5pt">On 9/16/2014 4:40 AM,
Kavouss Arasteh wrote:<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:black;font-size:10.5pt">I am at another meeting <u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:black;font-size:10.5pt">I have read your
edited text which seems to cover most or almost every points.<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:black;font-size:10.5pt">Please let me to ck it again
and come back to you <u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:normal;margin-bottom:0pt"><span style="color:black;font-size:10.5pt">Kavouss <u></u><u></u></span></p>
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