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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif;color:#1F497D">I just made one edit and added three comments. The result is uploaded to Dropbox.
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif;color:#1F497D">Pertaining to 1.a. Changed “How the proposal obtained consensus” to “Whether the proposal obtained consensus.” Waiting for all the IETF people to wail…<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif;color:#1F497D">Pertaining to 2.b. Weighing in on Joes attempt to add text, mainly noting that I don’t understand what he is proposing to add.
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif;color:#1F497D">Pertaining to 6.e. Questioning why ICANN needs to send an endorsement/nonendorsement letter with its transmittal of the final proposal to NTIA.
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<p class="MsoNormal"><b><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif">From:</span></b><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif"> internal-cg-bounces@icann.org [mailto:internal-cg-bounces@icann.org]
<b>On Behalf Of </b>Alissa Cooper<br>
<b>Sent:</b> Monday, December 8, 2014 10:45 AM<br>
<b>To:</b> ICG<br>
<b>Subject:</b> [Internal-cg] Please review: proposal finalization process<br>
<b>Importance:</b> High<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">Please take a look at the proposal finalization process document and the thread below. We really need to wrap this up, hopefully on this week’s call or shortly thereafter.<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">Thanks,<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">Alissa<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">Begin forwarded message:<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><b><span style="font-family:"Helvetica",sans-serif">From: </span>
</b><span style="font-family:"Helvetica",sans-serif">Alissa Cooper <<a href="mailto:alissa@cooperw.in">alissa@cooperw.in</a>></span><o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><b><span style="font-family:"Helvetica",sans-serif">Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] Proposal finalization process v3</span></b><o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><b><span style="font-family:"Helvetica",sans-serif">Date: </span>
</b><span style="font-family:"Helvetica",sans-serif">December 1, 2014 at 3:37:31 PM PST</span><o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><b><span style="font-family:"Helvetica",sans-serif">To: </span>
</b><span style="font-family:"Helvetica",sans-serif">Paul Wilson <<a href="mailto:pwilson@apnic.net">pwilson@apnic.net</a>></span><o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><b><span style="font-family:"Helvetica",sans-serif">Cc: </span>
</b><span style="font-family:"Helvetica",sans-serif">ICG <<a href="mailto:internal-cg@icann.org">internal-cg@icann.org</a>></span><o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">Hi Paul,<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">I reviewed your proposed edits to v3 and my comments are below. I’ve also uploaded and attached an edited version that reflects my comments and includes the finalization process steps provided by Kuo. <<a href="https://www.dropbox.com/home/CoordinationGroup/Proposal%20finalization%20process">https://www.dropbox.com/home/CoordinationGroup/Proposal%20finalization%20process</a>><o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">On Nov 9, 2014, at 4:58 PM, Paul Wilson <<a href="mailto:pwilson@apnic.net">pwilson@apnic.net</a>> wrote:<o:p></o:p></p>
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I’ve proposed a bunch of edits to this document, attached, and also in dropbox here:<br>
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Some of these changes reflect my understanding of the timeline, as shown in the Excel file here:<br>
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In particular this timeline show the release of a draft proposal in March, and a final proposal in June; so I’ve added these extra steps to the process.<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">Agreed, good to have these other milestones in there.<o:p></o:p></p>
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Also, please note I’ve proposed a few substantial additional steps in this process:<br>
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- A public call for comments on the community proposal development processes (deadline 31 Jan 2015); this will allow us to formally gather remaining concerns, or statements of support for the processes which produced community proposals.<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">I have concerns about asking the communities to duplicate efforts here. RFP Section VI already asks the communities to document their processes, level of consensus achieved, and areas of contention or disagreement. We also made it explicit
in the RFP that if people felt that they could not provide comments within those processes, they could send them to the ICG forum <<a href="http://forum.icann.org/lists/icg-forum/">http://forum.icann.org/lists/icg-forum/</a>> and we’ve been passing those on
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<p class="MsoNormal">The target deadline for RFP responses is 15 January, so I don’t think we want to ask people to separately document similar information in a parallel process that we run ourselves at the same time when we’re expecting the communities to
be focusing on finishing their RFP responses. I also do not think it’s appropriate for us to try to circumvent the community processes — if the process comments we receive after receiving the proposals themselves and the statements made in the proposals are
inconsistent, it’s not clear what we would do with that information.<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">My edits in the attached reflect this view — I’ve re-combined into a single step 1 the ICG’s initial reviews of both process and substance.<o:p></o:p></p>
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- A specific provision for ICG consultation with communities and other stakeholders during assessment of the first draft proposal.<br>
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- Incorporating the ICANN meetings in February and June 2015 into the process as opportunities for (in Feb) communities to present their proposals to the ICANN audience, and then (in June) ICG to present the final transition proposal.<br>
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- Presentation of the final proposal to the ICANN board, during a meeting with them; rather than mere “transmission” to them.<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">I would prefer if we not be overly prescriptive about any of the above items, nor about the exact structure or format of any text we might draft to accompany the transition proposal. We have already declared in the timeline our intention
to consult with everyone, so I don’t think we need to say it again. Obviously we will be talking to people at various ICANN meetings, but there will surely be other venues where the proposal gets discussed (as it should be), so I’d rather not single out any
particular meetings in this document. And I’m not sure why we would need to specifically meet the ICANN Board in order to send them the final proposal, particularly in light the statement of finalization steps that we now have from Kuo.<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">Looking forward to feedback from you and others.<o:p></o:p></p>
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