[OFB-WG] REMINDER: VOTE CREDENTIALS: ALAC Statement on Third Accountability and Transparency Review Team (ATRT3) Final Report

[Bastiaan Goslings]

Thanks, staff. 

A couple of comments, after going over the final draft before I support ratification.

- Under point 1;

'With that, the ALAC supports the ATRT3 suggestion to introduce changes to the current structure of reviews, specifically by implementing a moratorium on launching any new Organizational and Specific Reviews until it has made a decision on this recommendation, as per ​Section 8 ​of the report).’

I assume the ‘it’ referred to here is the ICANN board? As it reads now, to me, it sounds like ‘it’ refers to the ALAC

As an alternative: ‘(…) , specifically by having the ICANN board implement a moratorium (…) until it has made a decision’ (etc)


- With regard to point 2:

This ('The ALAC fully endorses the recommendation’ (etc) does not follow logically from the introduction above point 1 ('we advise the ICANN Board to:’ and then come the 3 points)

As an alternative: remove the ’The ALAC fully endorses’ and replace with ‘Fully endorse'. You then get 'we advise the ICANN Board to: (…)  2. Fully endorse’ (etc)


- With regard to point 3:

This ('The ALAC shares’ (etc) does not follow logically either from the introduction above point 1 ('we advise the ICANN Board to:’ and then come the 3 points)

As an alternative: remove the ’The ALAC shares’ and replace with ’share’. You then get 'we advise the ICANN Board to: (…)  3. share the ATRT3 Review Team’s approach’ (etc)


(To make it even more clear, the 'we advise the ICANN Board to:’ could be added above both points 2 and 3 as well)


With regard to my point 2 and 3 remarks above, these of course only apply if we indeed want to explicitly state ''we advise the ICANN Board to’. If that is not the case, then we can remove the 'we advise the ICANN Board to:’ above point 1 and replace the ‘1. Swiftly implement ATRT3 recommendation to evolve both specific and organizational reviews as per ​Section 8​ of the final report'  with 

’The ALAC is of the opinion that the ATRT3 recommendation to evolve both specific and organizational reviews as per ​Section 8​ of the final report should be swiftly implemented’


Hope this makes sense,

regards
Bastiaan

 

> On 29 Jul 2020, at 16:29, ICANN At-Large Staff <noreply-110782 at bigpulse.com> wrote:
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> Dear Bastiaan Goslings, 
> 
> This is to let you know that the ALAC statement on Third Accountability and Transparency Review Team (ATRT3) Final Report is now final. Maureen Hilyard, ALAC Chair, has asked the 15 ALAC members to ratify this final statement.
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> To read the final statement, please visit: https://community.icann.org/x/X4JIC
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> Please note that the ALAC ratification vote will open on 28 July 23:59 UTC and end on 31 July 2020 17:00 UTC.
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