<div dir="ltr"><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:tahoma,sans-serif;font-size:large">Hi Alice:</div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:tahoma,sans-serif;font-size:large">Did not see Lisa's breakdown. Much thanks for bringing it to me. I have emended the draft and attach both redlined and clean copies here.</div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:tahoma,sans-serif;font-size:large"><br></div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:tahoma,sans-serif;font-size:large">Best,</div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:tahoma,sans-serif;font-size:large">-Carlton</div><div><div dir="ltr" class="gmail_signature" data-smartmail="gmail_signature"><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><br>==============================<br><i><font face="comic sans ms, sans-serif">Carlton A Samuels</font></i><br><font face="comic sans ms, sans-serif"><i>Mobile: 876-818-1799<br><font color="#33CC00">Strategy, Process, Governance, Assessment & Turnaround</font></i></font><br>=============================</div></div></div></div></div></div><br></div><br><div class="gmail_quote"><div dir="ltr">On Mon, Jul 23, 2018 at 8:00 AM Alice Jansen <<a href="mailto:alice.jansen@icann.org">alice.jansen@icann.org</a>> wrote:<br></div><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex">
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<p class="MsoNormal">Hi Carlton,<u></u><u></u></p>
<p class="MsoNormal">Hope this finds you well. <u></u><u></u></p>
<p class="MsoNormal">Just making sure you have seen Lisa’s breakdown below. <br>
Let me know. <u></u><u></u></p>
<p class="MsoNormal">Thanks!<u></u><u></u></p>
<p class="MsoNormal">Best<u></u><u></u></p>
<p class="MsoNormal">Alice <u></u><u></u></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><b><span style="font-size:12.0pt;color:black">From: </span></b><span style="font-size:12.0pt;color:black">Lisa Phifer <<a href="mailto:lisa@corecom.com" target="_blank">lisa@corecom.com</a>><br>
<b>Date: </b>Sunday 22 July 2018 at 21:20<br>
<b>To: </b>Carlton Samuels <<a href="mailto:carlton.samuels@gmail.com" target="_blank">carlton.samuels@gmail.com</a>>, "<a href="mailto:rds-whois2-whoispolicy@icann.org" target="_blank">rds-whois2-whoispolicy@icann.org</a>" <<a href="mailto:rds-whois2-whoispolicy@icann.org" target="_blank">rds-whois2-whoispolicy@icann.org</a>>, Jean-Baptiste Deroulez <<a href="mailto:jean-baptiste.deroulez@icann.org" target="_blank">jean-baptiste.deroulez@icann.org</a>>, Alice Jansen <<a href="mailto:alice.jansen@icann.org" target="_blank">alice.jansen@icann.org</a>>, Alan Greenberg <<a href="mailto:alan.greenberg@mcgill.ca" target="_blank">alan.greenberg@mcgill.ca</a>><br>
<b>Subject: </b>[Ext] Re: Single WHOIS Policy Sub-Group Final Report - Draft<u></u><u></u></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">Hi Carlton,<br>
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As requested, I have repeated the gap assessment on your latest draft:<br>
<a href="https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__community.icann.org_download_attachments_71604705_Single-2520WHOIS-2520Policy-2520Subgroup-25202-2520Report-2520-2520-2D-2520Draft-2520-25233-2520CLEAN-2520-2D-2520July-252019-25202018.docx&d=DwMFAw&c=FmY1u3PJp6wrcrwll3mSVzgfkbPSS6sJms7xcl4I5cM&r=hgoi2V8bykqXjZC9kZZRTDSEJ4lQIyKh6k8Q-TUv6Ks&m=1100ycyCslTWBqVdKhi5j2qdnwCmHMpQ_21CgX4GsMA&s=C1a8gPdfVb2a7vBqCNm3v0IoGXDeD5IqJniGXJLKeOc&e=" target="_blank">https://community.icann.org/download/attachments/71604705/Single%20WHOIS%20Policy%20Subgroup%202%20Report%20%20-%20Draft%20%233%20CLEAN%20-%20July%2019%202018.docx
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Here are the remaining gaps that I see:<br>
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· Subsection 3 seems to be a more appropriate place for analysis provided in Subsection 4. Move analysis (that is, 4 questions and the subgroup’s answers) to Subsection 3.<br>
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· Subsection 4 does not list problem(s) yet to be addressed (or clearly state there are no problems.) The analysis indicates work now underway and expectations for completing that work, but what if any are the problems and issues? (e.g., risks if planned work
is not completed)<br>
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· Subsection 5’s “Recommendation” does not appear to be a recommendation to the Board. Within the recommendation text, there is no problem stated, nor any Board action recommended to address that problem. While there is acknowledgement of on-going community
efforts that may fully realize the intent of WHOIS1 Rec #2, what further specific, measurable Board action is recommended?<br>
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You may also wish to address these comments on the prior draft:<br>
<a href="https://mm.icann.org/pipermail/rds-whois2-whoispolicy/attachments/20180720/ae991d80/attachment.html" target="_blank">https://mm.icann.org/pipermail/rds-whois2-whoispolicy/attachments/20180720/ae991d80/attachment.html</a>
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Best regards<br>
Lisa<br>
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At 04:25 AM 7/20/2018, Carlton Samuels wrote:<br>
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<p class="MsoNormal">Dear Colleagues:<br>
Please see redline and clean reports intended as the final draft. I have added content and following the guidance of the Report Gap Assessment Tool, made some other changes.<br>
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Would appreciate if sub-group team members would feedback on whether we are good to go for content and overall intent. it would be highly appreciated if Lisa would be so kind and feedback on the structural changes advised.<br>
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Kind regards,<br>
-Carlton<br>
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