Hi Alice<br><br>Great work - we are nearly there.<br><br>I have a couple of points on the consolidated draft:<br><br>Exec Summary - reading well - I think we should include the recommendations here, for an encapsulated document which 99.9% of people who look at this report will be reading.<br>
P 9 - Lynn made a table of contents for insertion after the Executive Summary. This is a good idea, and if we adopt it, we can delete Kathy's insertion on p9 and go back to her original para.<br><br>P29 - the Dakar versions (of proxy/privacy definitions) to be used throughout please<br>
<br>p44 - please move the highlighted text into an appendix<br><br>Chapter 8 (the GAP ANALYSIS) - this is important, is an older version that was superseded yesterday. This is the latest version. I've removed all the highlighting. It divides the Gap analysis into two (Chapter 7 - or whatever the correct number is - Understanding the needs of stakeholders) then we put in the consumer trust text after that, then move on to Chapter 8 (or whatever number it is) which should be Gap Analysis/Conclusions. Bill is currently reviewing that language.<br>
<br>Kind regards<br><br>Emily<br><br><br><br><div class="gmail_quote">
On 30 November 2011 16:31, Alice Jansen <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:alice.jansen@icann.org" target="_blank">alice.jansen@icann.org</a>></span> wrote:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex">
<div style="color:rgb(0,0,0);font-size:14px;font-family:Calibri,sans-serif;word-wrap:break-word"><div><div><div>Dear Review Team Members,</div><div><br></div><div>Please find attached the latest versions of the master document and appendices. (clean copy – 30 November 16:30 UTC – Alice Jansen) </div>
<div>Since I have applied formatting suggestions Kathy emailed me to the document, I would be very grateful if penholders of chapters could please check the formatting structure of their chapters. Does this match your train on thought? If not, please email me asap so that I can rectify it for the subsequent version.</div>
<div>Documents will be available on the wiki in a couple of minutes.</div><div>The files need additional work (typo hunting etc) but I would be very grateful if you could please read these documents very carefully and flag any missing piece of information or inconsistency you notice.</div>
<div><br></div><div>Many thanks in advance,</div><div><br></div><div>Kind regards</div><span><font color="#888888"><div><br></div><div>Alice</div><div><br></div><div><div><div>-- </div><div><div><div><div><b>Alice Jansen</b></div>
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