[Ssr2-review] Notes on Terms of Reference

k claffy kc at caida.org
Tue Aug 28 03:09:47 UTC 2018


On Fri, Aug 24, 2018 at 07:36:48PM +0000, Weissinger, Laurin wrote:
 > Dear all,
 > 
 > Please see attached the updated draft for review and comment.
 > 
 > With many thanks and best wishes
 > Laurin


<pedantic>

folks,

wrt the citations i pleaded for on what's now page 3 of
the document, i have one minor and one major comment.

(1) minor: we don't need four footnotes if the definitionss
are all from the same place, we can just footnote above the
list after the word "definitions", which i think is cleaner.

(2) major: this choice of source for these defintions is
causing me some heartburn.  who wrote them?  when?  based
on what community ratification process?  how would i even
navigate to this URL on ICANN's web site?  

it appears that these definitions emerged from icann's
response to SSR1's Recommendation (1) and (3), which 
makes it more important to be explicit about the
trajectory of their development.  but when i go to 
https://community.icann.org/display/SSR/SSR1+Review+Implementation+Home
and download the pdf of slides so i can click through the links,
for Recommendation (1) the "Project Status" says: 
 
	Public comment was taken on a draft statement between May-Sept
	2012; 
[https://www.icann.org/resources/pages/draft-ssr-role-remit-2012-05-17-en]
	it was subsequently revised in Oct 2012.
[ http://toronto45.icann.org/meetings/toronto2012/presentation-draft-ssr-role-remit-04oct12-en.pdf]

	The updated statement  (URL we currently footnote)
	was published on ICANNs website and
	incorporated in the FY 14 SSR Framework 
https://www.icann.org/en/about/staff/security/ssr/ssr-plan-fy14-06mar13-en.pdf
	and is part of SSR SOP in which SSR Framework and
	statement is periodically reviewed and updated as
	needed. This statement also has been incorporated into
	other ICANN documentation.

but i do not see where on the ICANN web site this history 
is explained, just in this slide deck sent to SSR2.
i do not see any description of the process by which community 
consensus was reached.  the "updated statement" is significantly
different from the October 2012 revision, but there is no
explanation for how ICANN got from the October 2012 version
(after public comment) to the
one-we-cite-that-doesn't-even-have-a-date.

i would rather suggest replacement text or URL than just 
critique what's there now, but i do not know the history here,
so it's not clear to me what to suggest. e.g., why not
this one:
https://www.icann.org/en/system/files/files/ssr-plan-fy14-06mar13-en.pdf
or this one:
https://www.icann.org/icann-acronyms-and-terms/en/nav/S ?


really not trying to be difficult here..
k



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