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<div>Wonderful turnaround, Jordan. Two edits:</div>
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<div>In the AoC section, page 7, just before 6.6.1. Avri will probably say it better than me, but we need to add this sentiment:</div>
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<div>When the community is satisfied that AoC commitments and period reviews are properly reflected in ICANN’s bylaws, we recommend a cancelation of the AoC by mutual agreement of ICANN and NTIA. </div>
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<div>In the AoC section 6.6.1, page 9, AoC section 8, we do not need to retain the yellow highlighted text “Would B need to be put in a fundamental bylaw?” Avri added that as a question, but I did not hear anyone call for that. </div>
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<span style="font-weight:bold">From: </span>Jordan Carter<br>
<span style="font-weight:bold">Date: </span>Thursday, April 16, 2015 at 5:10 PM<br>
<span style="font-weight:bold">To: </span>"<a href="mailto:wp1@icann.org">wp1@icann.org</a>"<br>
<span style="font-weight:bold">Subject: </span>[WP1] Content Draft with Comments and Tracked Changes - next (Final) draft out 0300 Friday UTC<br>
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<div>Thanks for the call just now.</div>
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<div>Attached is the working document.</div>
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<div>Please review if you are inclined. If you have specific comments please raise them ON THE LIST rather than just to me, so anyone else can react, and I will take into account any comments on THIS version received by 0200 UTC on Friday.</div>
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<div>I will take these comments, clean the document up, do what I can in the time available to add things like the tables / options for votes, and then...</div>
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<div>... and then circulate a nice clean Final Draft for you (and a mark up showing what has changed from V3) at around
<b>0300 UTC on Friday.</b></div>
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<div>Then you will have 21h to make any final comments or thoughts.</div>
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<div>Then, I'll make final adjustments and send it to the co-chairs and staff, or wherever they tell us to send it, for incorporation in the full document.</div>
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<div>This isn't perfect work folks, but it's pretty darn good given the pace at which we are working. <u style="font-weight:bold">Thank you</u> for all the effort represented here.</div>
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<div>cheers</div>
<div>Jordan<br clear="all">
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<div dir="ltr">Jordan Carter<br>
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Chief Executive <br>
<b>InternetNZ</b><br>
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04 495 2118 (office) | +64 21 442 649 (mob)<br>
<a href="mailto:jordan@internetnz.net.nz" target="_blank">jordan@internetnz.net.nz</a><br>
Skype: jordancarter<br>
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<i>A better world through a better Internet </i><br>
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