[Accountability-dt] For your review - updated version of draft charter

[Fares, David]

Colleagues,

I have incorporated several comments/edits into the attached.  I have tried to highlight my edits in yellow for ease of reference.

Thanks,
David

From: accountability-dt-bounces at icann.org [mailto:accountability-dt-bounces at icann.org] On Behalf Of Matthew Shears
Sent: 27 October 2014 12:52
To: Marika Konings; accountability-dt at icann.org
Subject: Re: [Accountability-dt] For your review - updated version of draft charter

Hi all

Some comments/rephrasing and questions related to the Charter.

Hopefully helpful.

Matthew
On 10/27/2014 7:52 AM, Marika Konings wrote:
Dear All,

To facilitate your review of the charter, I've accepted all the changes from the last version (23 October) and included in redline:

  *   Edits proposed by Leon to the problem statement section
  *   Edits proposed by Matthieu to the Expert Advisors section (Matthieu, please note that I've made some suggested edits to your proposed wording to reflect amongst others that the PEG will no longer be in existence following the selection of the advisors, or at least that is my understanding, as well as expectation that any input from the advisors is expected to receive due consideration by the CCWG - I believe the spirit of your comments is captured here, but please feel free to edit as you see fit if this is not in line with your comments)
  *   Edits to fix some left over references to ICG where no longer appropriate as well as updates to reflect that more than one proposal may be submitted by the ICG as the two work streams are likely to be completed along different timelines.
  *   Edits to reflect that in addition to a statement of interest following the GNSO model, participants also have the option to provide a short introduction in writing that accomplishes the same goal (note, based on our experience with the CCWG, some participants appear more comfortable with providing a short bio instead of having to complete the online SOI form)
Please note that the following action items are still outstanding:

  *   Keith to review and provide proposed edits for description of work stream 2
  *   All to review and provide suggested questions to be included for work stream 1 and 2
  *   Avri to review deliverables section first paragraph and provide proposed edits
  *   Keith to review and provide proposed edits to working relationship with ICG section
  *   All to review and identify any other issues that need to be addressed / edited
Best regards,

Marika




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