[atrt2] ATRT2 Final Report - Draft#2 For Your Review
Avri Doria
avri at acm.org
Sun Dec 22 16:29:15 UTC 2013
H,
I don't know if draft2 is the latest, I thought there was going to be a
draft3 after the one day review i missed.
On the recommendations for which i held the 'pen'
avri
Note 1 9.4b
b. A discussion of the degree to which ICANN, both staff and community,
are adhering to a default standard of transparency in all policy,
implementation and administrative actions as well as in narratives,
redactions or other practices used to not disclose information to the
ICANN community, all documented in a transparent manner.
should be
b. A discussion of the degree to which ICANN, both staff and community,
are adhering to a default standard of transparency in all policy,
implementation and administrative actions; as well as the degree to
which all narratives, redaction, or other practices used to not
disclose information to the ICANN community are documented in a
transparent manner.
(this extended sentence was hard to parse based on punctuation and the
lack of parallel construction)
Issue 2 9.4ci
i. requests of the Documentary Information Disclosure Policy (DIDP)
process and the disposition of Board Book requests.
should be
i. requests of the Documentary Information Disclosure Policy (DIDP)
process and the disposition of requests.
(i.e. drop the spurious board book reference that did not get properly
deleted from a previous edit.)
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