[atrt2] ATRT2 Final Report - Draft#2 For Your Review

Brian Cute bcute at pir.org
Mon Dec 23 14:25:48 UTC 2013


Thank you Avri.

On 12/22/13 11:29 AM, "Avri Doria" <avri at acm.org> wrote:

>H,
>
>I don't know if draft2 is the latest, I thought there was going to be a
>draft3 after the one day review i missed.
>
>On the recommendations for which i held the 'pen'
>
>avri
>
>Note  1   9.4b
>
>b.	A discussion of the degree to which ICANN, both staff and community,
>are adhering to a default standard of transparency in all policy,
>implementation and administrative actions as well as in narratives,
>redactions or other  practices used to not disclose  information to the
>ICANN community, all documented in a transparent manner.
>
>should be
>
>b.	A discussion of the degree to which ICANN, both staff and community,
>are adhering to a default standard of transparency in all policy,
>implementation and administrative actions; as well as the degree to
>which all narratives, redaction, or other  practices used to not
>disclose  information to the ICANN community are documented in a
>transparent manner.
>
>(this extended sentence was hard to parse based on punctuation and the
>lack of parallel construction)
>
>Issue 2 9.4ci
>
>
>i.	requests of the Documentary Information Disclosure Policy (DIDP)
>process and the disposition of Board Book  requests.
>
>should be
>
>i.	requests of the Documentary Information Disclosure Policy (DIDP)
>process and the disposition of requests.
>
>
>(i.e. drop the spurious board book reference that did not get properly
>deleted from a previous edit.)
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