[atrt2] ATRT2 Final Report - Draft #3 LATEST
Alan Greenberg
alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca
Tue Dec 24 02:29:09 UTC 2013
See embedded.
Also, there is a reference at the end of your
note to "implantation". Don't know where it comes
from, but presume it should be implementation.
At 23/12/2013 06:35 PM, Larisa B. Gurnick wrote:
>Dear ATRT2,
>Attached is the latest version of the ATRT2
>Report, along with separate documents for
>Appendices B- E (Appendix A is the ICC report).
>All changes have been incorporated and Table of
>Contents has been updated. These are the master
>files and should be used if you plan to make any
>further changes to the report prior to
>submitting it to the Board. Please copy me,
>Denise and Alice when you submit your Final Report to the Board.
>
>Staff flagged several items (previously included
>as notes in the document) for you to consider as
>you finalize the report please see the listing below.
>
>As a reminder, ICANN will be closed for the
>holidays from noon on 24 December through 1
>January. Staff will be available to assist with
>any last minute edits upon return on 2
>January. Staff will submit the final report for
>translation and coordinate the posting on the
>web site as soon as ATRT2 confirms the Final
>Report documents after the holidays.
>
>Happy Holidays,
>Larisa
>
>Items for ATRT2 consideration prior to finalizing the report:
>1. Recommendation #4 Paul indicated that
>the Review Team should develop a footnote
>explaining change from prior language, i.e. only
>mention policy development and implementation,
>not administrative matters. Executive Summary and body of the report.
>2. Recommendation #6 Confirm that the
>following should be deleted: Increase GAC
>early involvement in the various ICANN policy
>processes (tied to ATRT 1 Recommendation
>12). Recommendation was merged and concepts
>included in the recommendations related to
>cross-community development
>processes. Executive Summary and body of the report.
I cannot locate that line, so presume it was already deleted.
In any case, I can see no reason to keep it. If
we really want a link, it could be worded
"Another GAC-related recommendation can be found at Recommendation 10.2".
However, I see no real need for that.
>3. Report Section 1; Findings of
>ATRT1: In the course of its deliberations,
>ATRT1 found that the Nominating Committee
>(NomCom) had failed to implement previous recommendations from, [S1]
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>4. In several sections of the report,
>references to ATRT1 recommendations have been
>footnoted. This has not been done consistently throughout the report.
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>5. Report Section 5; Findings of ATRT1 - capacity[S2] .
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>6. Report Section Headings Alan made a
>change to Report Section 13, which was
>incorporated. He took out the parenthetical
>reference; yet other Report Sections still have
>it and earlier, there was an agreement to
>include these references for further
>clarity. ATRT2 should make a decision to address this consistently.
What I removed was factually incorrect - it
referred to earlier versions which were focused on the GNSO PDP.
What you have for sections 14 and 15 is:
Report Section 14. AoC REVIEW PROCESS
EFFECTIVENESS: ATRT2 Recommendation 11 (New
Recommendation on Effectiveness of the Review Process)
Report Section 15. FINANCIAL ACCOUNTABIILITY AND
TRANSPARENCY: ATRT2 Recommendation #12 (New
Recommendation on Finance Accountability and Transparency)
The parenthetical seems rather redundant to me,
but if you want one for Section 13, it should be:
Report Section 13. CROSS-COMMUNITY
DELIBERATIONS: ATRT2 Recommendation #10 (New
Recommendation on Cross-community Deliberations)
>7. P.54 Summary of other relevant
>information Staff has previously submitted a
>correction: Correction: Page 45 of the Draft
>Report: Reconsideration review on 13-3, the
>Board, through the NGPC, actually accepted
>reconsideration of the issue, though the
>ultimate decision was that the action should not
>be overturned. This is different from the Board
>denying reconsideration, which is what happened in the other instances cited.
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>8. Appendix E p. E-4; Metrics and
>criteria for measuring progress; last sentence -
>ATRT2 requested that it be able to interact with
>One World Trust directly so that ATRT2 could
>reflect the need for metrics in its Final Report
>in a coordinated way. [LBG3]
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>Larisa B. Gurnick
>Consultant/Senior Director, Organizational Reviews
>Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers (ICANN)
><mailto:larisa.gurnick at icann.org>larisa.gurnick at icann.org
>310 383-8995
>
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> [S1]PD7 asks do we know what entity made this
> recommendation? Would need citations LG
> response: Not sure could be the structural review mandated by the bylaws.
>
> [S2]PD19 says reference explanatory text on
> why ATRT2 is only focusing on policy development and implantation?
> [LBG3]Staff suggestion: update the comment
> based on the draft report that has been shared confidentially with the ATRT2.
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