[atrt2] Comment from reading the sections of Draft #3 (Clean)
Avri Doria
avri at acm.org
Sun Dec 29 22:00:00 UTC 2013
Hi,
Mostly trivial things I noticed.
While these come from reading the text, one of the observations points
out a wording defect in one of the recommendations (9.3.B). I do not
think the recommended fix changes the meeting of the recommendation.
It is a good report. Though at times reading things I 'held the pen'
for, I wish I had done a better job.
avri
~ Page 13
In the course of its deliberations, ATRT1 found that the Nominating
Committee (NomCom) had failed to implement previous recommendations
from, did not have
(never says from when the recommendations were not taken. Maybe the
from is a superfluous word?)
~ page 25 (the 9.3 b issue)
In the course of its deliberations, ATRT1 found that the Nominating
Committee (NomCom) had failed to implement previous recommendations
from, did not have
Yet in recommendation 9.3 B we say administrative function instead of
administration or administrative matters.
2 instances page 7 and 59 'administrative function' should be changed to
'administration'
~ page 32
, the idea of "reverse" liaisons from ACs and SOs, as well as a Board
liaison to the GAC
(nowhere do we define reverse liaisons. perhaps a footnote. I know
comments are supposed to include text, but in this case, I don't know
how to define it. The closest I can get is "reverse liaison: a liaison
from a group with which the GAC does have a By-Laws defined relationship.")
~ page 45
The effectiveness of implementation is qualified, but its partial
success is not entirely due to staff performance. .
(double period)
~ page 46
During calls72 with ATRT2,
(footnote indicator in wrong font)
~ Page 53
in fact ran counter to the concept of accountability.83
[Multistakeholder Model].”84
(footnote indicators in wrong font)
~ Page 60
Report Section 12. Assessment of ATRT2 Recommendation 21
(should that be ATRT1 Recommendation?)
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