[bc-gnso] RV: BC comment on ICANN's Vision, Mission & Focus for 5-year Strategic Plan.

[Chen, Tim]

sorry to be late on this thread this week...

Chris - thanks for pulling this together at the 11th hour.

Aparna - it's clear you did a ton of work in this final round of
drafting/editing, thank you.  Certainly I'm fine with the updates you made
the Focus Area I had initially drafted.

And as a point of clarification:  I think I was the one who first struck
that entire second sentence from the Vision statement, which included the
public interest language.  The recent email exchanges have clarified the
more important policy position of the BC on this terminology, but FWIW I
initially struck that bc the original ICANN draft Vision statement was,
IMHO, entirely too long and full of unnecessary wordiness.  The 'public
interest' sentence was talking about 'how' ICANN fulfills its Vision, and
'how' has no place in Vision Statements, at least in my world.  So I cut
it, much like I cut the opener "ICANN's vision is that of" which is
completely redundant in a Vision statement.   Point is, my initial strike
was not policy or terminology related, it was to create a shorter and more
focused Vision statement.

-Tim


On Fri, Jan 31, 2014 at 2:29 PM, Steve DelBianco
<sdelbianco at netchoice.org>wrote:

>   Thanks to Chris for consolidating all those disparate, last-minute,
> edit suggestions.   (I know how difficult that can be!)
>
>  And thanks to all the contributors for producing a high-quality,
> specific response from the BC.
>
>   I'm happy to do the submissions tonight (US eastern time) if that makes
> it easier on you, Chris.  Just let me know.
>
>  --Steve
>
>   From: Chris Chaplow <chris at andaluciaws.com>
> Date: Friday, January 31, 2014 at 5:02 PM
> To: 'bc - GNSO list' <bc-gnso at icann.org>
> Subject: [bc-gnso] RV: BC comment on ICANN's Vision, Mission & Focus for
> 5-year Strategic Plan.
>
>   Dear Members,
>
>
>
> Thanks for your contributions to the  draft BC comment on ICANN's Vision,
> Mission & Focus for 5-year Strategic Plan.
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>
> I have incorporated the comments by members Aparna Sridhar, David Fares,
> Nat Cohen, and Marilyn Cade.
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>
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> Please find attached the individual documents that I will submit to ICANN
> in a few hours time ahead of the deadline.  (I notice that no other
> comments have been submitted at all yet.)
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>
>
> In particular with regard to the Vision I believe I have incorporated the
> comments of Aparna Sridhar, David Fares, and Marilyn Cade. The BC suggested
> version of the Vision is the shortened version (not including public
> interest) whilst the BC statement request "How this is incorporated ..
> deserves more discussion with the ICANN community."
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> I also have added a point I made on the BC call in the Focus Area: IV.
> Striving towards technical and operational excellence being   "BC also
> notes that IANA has been dropped from the title of the focus area but
> management of IANA function should remain a key strategic objective."
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> With best regards,
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