<div dir="ltr">Hi Devan,<br><br>Thanks for this. I have only 2 comments:-<br><br>1. At page 4:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0px 0px 0px 0.8ex;border-left:1px solid rgb(204,204,204);padding-left:1ex">Justine Chew, ALAC Liaison, shared that she has no problems with Preamble 6 and suggested using the tree hyperlinks to show the three different versions of the motion document.</blockquote><div><div dir="ltr" class="gmail_signature" data-smartmail="gmail_signature"><div dir="ltr"><br><font color="#000000">I know I said "Preamble 6" clause that's what I call it, but it now appears to me that, "Whereas Clause 6" would be a more recognizable phrase. Further, I believe some clarity would be useful in referring to "the motion document". <br><br>So, my proposed amendments would be:<br></font><b>Justine Chew, ALAC Liaison</b>, shared that she has no problems with <strike>Preamble</strike> <font color="#0000ff">Whereas Clause</font> 6 and suggested using the <font color="#0000ff">three</font> hyperlinks in <font color="#0000ff">Whereas Clause 7, Whereas Clause 8 and Resolved Clause 1 in the motion</font> to <strike>show</strike> <font color="#0000ff">reflect </font>the three different versions of the <font color="#0000ff">Clarifying Statement, from draft, amended redline, to final,</font> <strike>motion document</strike> <font color="#0000ff">in order to address.<b>Jeffrey Neuman, GNSO Liaison to the GAC</b>'s point about needing to preserve the history of this topic</font>.<font color="#000000"><br><br>2. At page 8<br></font><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0px 0px 0px 0.8ex;border-left:1px solid rgb(204,204,204);padding-left:1ex"><b>Susan Payne, IPC</b>, explained that it might exclude willing participants to make participation in SubPro Working Group a requirement, and explained that it is a requirement to read all of the SubPro documentation including the Initial Report and Final Report. Susan Payne, IPC, also suggested inviting constituencies or stakeholder groups to suggest someone join the small team instead of their councilor.</blockquote><div dir="ltr" style="color:rgb(0,0,0)"><font color="#000000"><br></font></div><div style=""><font color="#000000" style="color:rgb(0,0,0)">I think the word "previous" is missing from the first line; perhaps it should be "....make </font><font style="" color="#0000ff">previous</font><font color="#000000" style="color:rgb(0,0,0)"> participation in SubPro Working Group ...."? I will, however, happily defer to Susan on this.</font></div><br><font color="#000000">Thanks,</font><br><font color="#000000">Justine</font><br><b><br></b></div></div></div><br></div><br><div class="gmail_quote"><div dir="ltr" class="gmail_attr">On Thu, 31 Aug 2023 at 03:14, Devan Reed via council <<a href="mailto:council@gnso.icann.org">council@gnso.icann.org</a>> wrote:<br></div><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0px 0px 0px 0.8ex;border-left:1px solid rgb(204,204,204);padding-left:1ex"><div class="msg7194904790176736645">
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<span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif;color:black">Thank you.</span><span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:Arial,sans-serif"><u></u><u></u></span></p>
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