[CPWG] [registration-issues-wg] [GTLD-WG] Final version of the ALAC Advice regarding the EPDP

[Sebastien Bachollet]

Other questions
Not sure about this
GDPR, in rough terms, only applies to entities within the European Economic Area (EEA) and to entities outside of the targeting individuals resident within the EU. 
Maybe
GDPR, in rough terms, only applies to entities within the European Economic Area (EEA) and to entities outside THAT ARE (of the) targeting individuals resident within the EU. 
?????

And 3 that??
Last sentence 
But it is critical that that, if the Board believes, as the ALAC does, that the EPDP decisions must take all applicable issues into consideration and make fully informed decisions, the Board needs to ensure that this is fully understood by the GNSO and EPDP. 

Thanks
SeB

> Le 15 avr. 2019 à 08:19, Bastiaan Goslings <bastiaan.goslings at ams-ix.net> a écrit :
> 
> Thanks for this - while I personally cannot support the ratification of the draft advice with a ‘yes’, it does look a lot better than earlier versions. For now my intention is to ‘abstain’.
> 
> 
> In terms of wording/grammar:
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> - On page 2, 'At the time the report was issued, there was also an outstanding question to the EPDP legal counsel whether ICANN’s presence in the EU imply that the GDPR apply ALL personal data regardless of location’ (et; )
> 
> I think it should be ‘implies’ instead of ‘imply’, ‘applies’ in stead of ‘apply’, and there needs to be a ’to’ after the ‘applies’.
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> 
> - On page 3, with regard to the advice itself, 'The ALAC advises the Board to request that the issue of legal/natural differentiation be discussed during the EPDP Phase 2 explicitly considering the competing needs of those using the data for cyber-security and other legitimate purposes.'
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> From the sentence it is not clear (to me) what the ‘competing’ refers to.
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> 
> - On page 4, part of the concluding remarks, 'The ALAC believes that the issues being raised here have not received sufficient full discussion’.
> 
> ‘Received sufficient full discussion’ sounds strange to me. Maybe change into ‘The ALAC believes that the issues being raised here have not been sufficiently discussed’ ?
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> 
> Anyway, thanks again, and with regards
> Bastiaan
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>> On 15 Apr 2019, at 08:03, Alan Greenberg <alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca> wrote:
>> 
>> The errors caught by Marita and Sebastien are fixed in the attached version.
>> 
>> Alan
>> 
>> At 14/04/2019 04:23 PM, Sebastien Bachollet wrote:
>>> And if you fix that you may withdraw one of the two issues (the word).
>>> SeB
>>> 
>>> Envoyé de mon iPhone
>>> 
>>> Le 14 avr. 2019 à 20:42, Alan Greenberg <alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca > a écrit :
>>> 
>>>> Thanks for catching that. Will fix. Alan
>>>> --
>>>> Sent from my mobile. Please excuse brevity and typos.
>>>> 
>>>> On April 14, 2019 1:44:48 PM EDT, Marita Moll <mmoll at ca.inter.net> wrote:
>>>> 
>>>> One of the items still says require...
>>>> 
>>>> "The ALAC advises the Board require that the issue of Thick WHOIS issue be discussed during the EPDP Phase 2 in light of the new legal opinion.
>>>> Geographic Differentiation"
>>>> 
>>>> Marita
>>>> On 4/14/2019 3:22 PM, Alan Greenberg wrote:
>>>>> 
>>>>> Attached is the final version being voted on by the ALAC.
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>>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> It is largely unchanged with the exception of "require"
>>>>> being changed
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>>>>> 
>>>>> back t "request" and an explanatory paragraph at the end.
>>>>> This was
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>>>>> done after consultation to ensure that we were not perceived as not
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>>>>> 
>>>>> understanding Board restrictions and to not give an "easy"
>>>>> way of
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>>>>> 
>>>>> rejected the advice ("we don't have that power").
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>>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> Alan
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