[CWG-Stewardship] Transition Proposal v.3 -- Edits due on Sunday at 23:59 UTC

[Grace Abuhamad]

Dear all, 

Attached is the updated proposal. This version includes the edits listed
below. Your comments are requested and welcome until Sunday 23:59 UTC. If
you don¹t have time to read the whole proposal, I¹ve highlighted specific
areas in the document that require feedback.

Areas that require feedback:
* Paragraph 164 (p.32): needs text
* Paragraph 172 (p.34): DT-F to confirm edit
* Section IV edits should be reviewed by CWG (Andrew perhaps?)
* Section VI edits should be reviewed by CWG (Avri perhaps?)
* Footnote (p.65): DT-N to respond to Sidley about status of footnote
* Page 73: DT-C to confirm response to Sidley comment
* Page 80: DT-M to review footnote
* Page 81: DT-M/DT-C to comment on Sidley note
* Paragraph 389 (p.92): DT-N/SR/X to define ³Review Team Liaison² per
Sidley¹s comment
* Page 111 & 112: Bernard to address Sidley comments
Edits included in version 3:
* All the comments & edits from Greg, Avri, Sidley, Lise and Andrew.
* The following items from today¹s call:
> * Paragraph 123 has been reviewed to be internally consistent
> * Paragraph 141: adjusted text around CCWG-Accountability structure
> * Paragraph 167: removed sentence
> * Paragraph 170: Removed the word ³multistakholder" and use 'customer-based'
> instead)
> *  Added footnote to paragraph 169 about .INT (footnote is also in Annex to
> section II)
> * Paragraph 275: fixed composition of IFRT (and also fixed this in SCWG
> composition)
> * Annex S: Added disclaimer about term sheet
* DT C Charter updates (see Section III and Annex G)
* Section IV edits
* Section VI edits
As you know, we had a technical glitch with document versions right before
the call yesterday. In recovering the version, there were a lot of
formatting changes that had to be done. I have attached version 2.5 (the
in-between version) so that you have it, but please note that version 3 is
the version to work off of.  There are still lots of formatting fixes in
version 3, but we will work on these over the weekend and on Monday.

We are almost there!
Grace


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