[CWG-Stewardship] Important: Final Proposal for review until 23:59 UTC on 10 June

Thu Jun 11 03:45:55 UTC 2015

Understood. But to ensure proper intent and 
translation, I think less potentially ambiguous.

Alan

At 10/06/2015 08:34 PM, Greg Shatan wrote:
>Each means both in this sentence. (A bill 
>requires approval of each house of Congress 
>before it is sent to the President.)
>Either would mean one or the other.
>
>That said both also works.
>
>On Wednesday, June 10, 2015, Alan Greenberg 
><<mailto:alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca>alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca> wrote:
>A few minutes late, but...
>
>In paragraph 125, page 24 of V4, I can live with 
>the current wording about the optional Public 
>Comment but meaningful AC/SO consultation.
>
>However, the wording change I requested to 
>clarify that the BOTH the ccNSO and GNSO approval is needed was not made.
>
>...triggered by a supermajority vote of each of 
>the ccNSO and GNSO Councils ...
>
>should read
>
>...triggered by a supermajority vote of BOTH of the ccNSO and GNSO Councils...
>
>(Caps added to highlight the change in this 
>message. The "of" following "both" is probably not needed.)
>
>Alan
>
>
>At 09/06/2015 10:59 PM, Grace Abuhamad wrote:
>
>>Forwarding again to Client Committee.
>>
>>From: Grace Abuhamad <grace.abuhamad at icann.org >
>>Date: Tuesday, June 9, 2015 at 5:46 PM
>>To: Brenda Brewer <brenda.brewer at icann.org >, " 
>>cwg-stewardship at icann.org" < cwg-stewardship at icann.org>
>>Subject: [CWG-Stewardship] Important: Final 
>>Proposal for review until 23:59UTC on 10 June
>>
>>Dear all,
>>
>>During our meeting today, we had our 3rd and 
>>final reading of the Proposal. Changes were 
>>made live, and outstanding changes were noted 
>>as action items (see notes below). The staff 
>>team has reviewed the proposal and completed 
>>all actions listed. Please note that Sidley 
>>will provide a final review as well which 
>>includes some work on the implementation text 
>>in Section IV and the Term Sheet in Annex S.
>>
>>With this, the CWG-Stewardship now enters into 
>>a final review period that lasts until 23:59 
>>UTC tomorrow (10 June). As noted on the call, 
>>the intention of the review period is to do a 
>>â€˜proofreadâ€™ and notify the group of any 
>>errors. During this period of 26 hours, any 
>>statements or comments on the Proposal may also 
>>be sent to the group. As the Chairs noted on 
>>the call, if you are making a statement, please 
>>be sure to identify whether you do so as a 
>>member on behalf of a Chartering Organization, 
>>as an individual representing a specific 
>>organization, or as an individual with a personal remark/contribution.
>>
>>After 23:59 UTC on 10 June, the Chairs will 
>>work with staff to rectify any errors, update 
>>section VI.C. regarding statements, and deliver 
>>the Proposal to the Chartering Organizations on 
>>11 June. Our call on 11 June will focus on how 
>>the CWG-Stewardship does its engagement, 
>>through its members and participants, to 
>>coalesce support for the Proposal among 
>>Chartering Organizations. In addition, there 
>>are two webinars on 11 June (one at 06:00 UTC 
>>and one at 13:00 UTC): 
>><https://www.icann.org/news/announcement-2015-06-03-en>https://www.icann.org/news/announcement-2015-06-03-en. 
>>These webinars aim to provide a briefing to the 
>>broader community about the contents of the 
>>final proposal. Finally, as we head into 
>>ICANN53 in Buenos Aires, please refer to the 
>>schedule of sessions that relate to the 
>>CWG-Stewardship work: 
>><https://community.icann.org/x/EJg0Aw>https://community.icann.org/x/EJg0Aw.
>>
>>Thank you all for your great work and 
>>dedication to the process. Please contact us if 
>>you have any questions regarding the process or 
>>administration over the next 48h.
>>
>>Best,
>>Gramika (Grace+Marika)
>>
>>
>>From: Brenda Brewer <brenda.brewer at icann.org >
>>Date: Tuesday, June 9, 2015 at 4:01 PM
>>To: " cwg-stewardship at icann.org" < cwg-stewardship at icann.org>
>>Subject: [CWG-Stewardship] Notes, Recordings, 
>>Transcript CWG IANA #58 9 June 2015
>>
>>
>>Dear all,
>>
>>The notes, recordings and transcripts for the 
>>CWG IANA Meeting # 58 on 9 June 2015 are 
>>available here: 
>><https://community.icann.org/pages/viewpage.action?pageId=53778032>https://community.icann.org/pages/viewpage.action?pageId=53778032
>>
>>Kind regards,
>>Brenda
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>Action Items
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>>Paragraph 108:  Action: In document text, remove --> "as it is customary"
>>
>>Paragraph 134:  Action: conform text to the 
>>defined terms used in the rest of the Proposal, among other things
>>
>>Paragraph 155: Action: remove capitals in "standing committee"
>>
>>Section IV: Action: Sidley to provide text on PTI implementation.
>>
>>Annex H: Action: remove escalation paragraph and preamble
>>
>>Annex J: Action: edits to #3 should be cross-checked with CSC Charter
>>
>>Action: conform text to the defined terms used 
>>in the rest of the Proposal, among other things
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>Notes
>>
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>>
>>
>>
>>
>>1. Opening Remarks
>>Â·        A big thanks to all who contributed to edits.
>>Â·        Following closure of this meeting, 
>>staff will send final document  to the CWG.
>>Â·        CWG will then have 24h to notify the 
>>group of any errors. Intention is not to reopen 
>>issues, but to focus on proofing --> DUE AT 23:59 UTC on 10 JUNE
>>Â·        Chairs will transmit to SO/ACs on 11 June with covering note.
>>
>>2. Finalizing the Review Tool & Responses
>>
>>Can expect a final version to be circulated in 
>>the next 24h. Staff is working on 
>>consistency-checking across the responses. The 
>>document is frozen as of 1 June.
>>
>>3. Update on questions to ICANN Finance & Legal
>>
>>The letter and responses from ICANN are posted 
>>on Wiki: 
>><https://community.icann.org/x/7Jk0Aw>https://community.icann.org/x/7Jk0Aw.
>>
>>Staff have included the responses in Section IV 
>>(and included an Annex to for the Finance information).
>>
>>4. Last Review of Final Proposal
>>
>>On screen now is version 5. The difference 
>>between the previous version and the latest is 
>>that the Chairs took some time to review which 
>>items were still open and which had been 
>>resolved. Tried to focus CWG on the key 
>>outstanding issues. This latest version also 
>>includes the DT-A annex which has now been included.
>>
>>Paragraph 108: Change the wording from 
>>"ringfence" to "isolate" and remove the 
>>definition in the footnote.  ICANN has control 
>>and ownership of PTI and the implementation 
>>documents will assure against further transfer out of assets.
>>
>>Action: In document text, remove --> "as it is customary"
>>
>>Paragraph 121/ Footnote 11: footnote is satisfactory.
>>
>>Paragraph 125: make clear "supermajority from 
>>both" ccNSO and GNSO. Also including the CSC as part of the remit.
>>
>>Paragraph 128: covered by resolution in paragraph 121
>>
>>Paragraph 134: SLEs discussion -- principles 
>>are included in annex and summary is included in the section now.
>>
>>Action: conform text to the defined terms used 
>>in the rest of the Proposal, among other things
>>
>>Paragraph 155: Action: remove capitals in "standing committee"
>>
>>Section IV: Action: Sidley to provide text on PTI implementation.
>>
>>Annex G: edit to the Remedial Action Procedures table
>>
>>Annex H: Action: remove escalation paragraph and preamble
>>
>>Annex J: Action: edits to #3 should be cross-checked with CSC Charter
>>
>>Term Sheet: staff to revise with comments from Sidley and Greg
>>
>>5. Overall Timeline / Milestones
>>
>>     a. Communications
>>
>>     b. Webinars on 11 June
>>
>>     c. Sessions at ICANN 53
>>
>>6. AOB
>>
>>     a. Thursday 11 June -- 1 hour call about CWG engagement
>>
>>     b. Canceling Tuesday 16 June call
>>
>>     c. Client Committee on Friday 12 June
>>
>>7. Closing Remarks
>>
>>After proposal is sent, 24h to respond with 
>>comments or statements DUE AT 23:59 UTC on 10 JUNE
>>
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