[CWG-Stewardship] Important: Final Proposal for review until 23:59 UTC on 10 June

Thu Jun 11 10:57:33 UTC 2015

Another reason for using ‘each’ is that in some cases a problem may be essentially just a cc problem or just a g problem and in those cases it may not be appropriate for one of the SOs to be able to block an action.

Chuck

From: cwg-stewardship-bounces at icann.org [mailto:cwg-stewardship-bounces at icann.org] On Behalf Of Jonathan Robinson
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To: 'Alan Greenberg'; 'Greg Shatan'
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Subject: Re: [CWG-Stewardship] Important: Final Proposal for review until 23:59 UTC on 10 June

Alan,

Thank-you for your acceptance of the current wording.

Please note that from my recall, Sidley proposed the introduction of “each” as legally less ambiguous. I believe the chat record from Tuesday’s meeting will confirm this but haven’t yet checked.

If this is so, I suggest we stick with it (each).

Jonathan

From: Alan Greenberg [mailto:alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca]
Sent: 11 June 2015 04:46
To: Greg Shatan
Cc: CWG
Subject: Re: [CWG-Stewardship] Important: Final Proposal for review until 23:59 UTC on 10 June

Understood. But to ensure proper intent and translation, I think less potentially ambiguous.

Alan

At 10/06/2015 08:34 PM, Greg Shatan wrote:
Each means both in this sentence. (A bill requires approval of each house of Congress before it is sent to the President.)
Either would mean one or the other.

That said both also works.

On Wednesday, June 10, 2015, Alan Greenberg <alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca<mailto:alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca> > wrote:
A few minutes late, but...
In paragraph 125, page 24 of V4, I can live with the current wording about the optional Public Comment but meaningful AC/SO consultation.
However, the wording change I requested to clarify that the BOTH the ccNSO and GNSO approval is needed was not made.
...triggered by a supermajority vote of each of the ccNSO and GNSO Councils ...
should read
...triggered by a supermajority vote of BOTH of the ccNSO and GNSO Councils...
(Caps added to highlight the change in this message. The "of" following "both" is probably not needed.)
Alan
At 09/06/2015 10:59 PM, Grace Abuhamad wrote:

Forwarding again to Client Committee.
From: Grace Abuhamad <grace.abuhamad at icann.org <mailto:grace.abuhamad at icann.org%20> >
Date: Tuesday, June 9, 2015 at 5:46 PM
To: Brenda Brewer <brenda.brewer at icann.org <mailto:brenda.brewer at icann.org%20> >, " cwg-stewardship at icann.org<mailto:cwg-stewardship at icann.org>" < cwg-stewardship at icann.org<mailto:cwg-stewardship at icann.org>>
Subject: [CWG-Stewardship] Important: Final Proposal for review until 23:59UTC on 10 June
Dear all,
During our meeting today, we had our 3rd and final reading of the Proposal. Changes were made live, and outstanding changes were noted as action items (see notes below). The staff team has reviewed the proposal and completed all actions listed. Please note that Sidley will provide a final review as well which includes some work on the implementation text in Section IV and the Term Sheet in Annex S.
With this, the CWG-Stewardship now enters into a final review period that lasts until 23:59 UTC tomorrow (10 June). As noted on the call, the intention of the review period is to do a â€˜proofreadâ€™ and notify the group of any errors. During this period of 26 hours, any statements or comments on the Proposal may also be sent to the group. As the Chairs noted on the call, if you are making a statement, please be sure to identify whether you do so as a member on behalf of a Chartering Organization, as an individual representing a specific organization, or as an individual with a personal remark/contribution.
After 23:59 UTC on 10 June, the Chairs will work with staff to rectify any errors, update section VI.C. regarding statements, and deliver the Proposal to the Chartering Organizations on 11 June. Our call on 11 June will focus on how the CWG-Stewardship does its engagement, through its members and participants, to coalesce support for the Proposal among Chartering Organizations. In addition, there are two webinars on 11 June (one at 06:00 UTC and one at 13:00 UTC): https://www.icann.org/news/announcement-2015-06-03-en. These webinars aim to provide a briefing to the broader community about the contents of the final proposal. Finally, as we head into ICANN53 in Buenos Aires, please refer to the schedule of sessions that relate to the CWG-Stewardship work: https://community.icann.org/x/EJg0Aw.
Thank you all for your great work and dedication to the process. Please contact us if you have any questions regarding the process or administration over the next 48h.
Best,
Gramika (Grace+Marika)
From: Brenda Brewer <brenda.brewer at icann.org <mailto:brenda.brewer at icann.org%20> >
Date: Tuesday, June 9, 2015 at 4:01 PM
To: " cwg-stewardship at icann.org<mailto:cwg-stewardship at icann.org>" < cwg-stewardship at icann.org<mailto:cwg-stewardship at icann.org>>
Subject: [CWG-Stewardship] Notes, Recordings, Transcript CWG IANA #58 9 June 2015
Dear all,

The notes, recordings and transcripts for the CWG IANA Meeting # 58 on 9 June 2015 are available here: https://community.icann.org/pages/viewpage.action?pageId=53778032

Kind regards,
Brenda

Action Items

Paragraph 108:  Action: In document text, remove --> "as it is customary"
Paragraph 134:  Action: conform text to the defined terms used in the rest of the Proposal, among other things
Paragraph 155: Action: remove capitals in "standing committee"
Section IV: Action: Sidley to provide text on PTI implementation.
Annex H: Action: remove escalation paragraph and preamble
Annex J: Action: edits to #3 should be cross-checked with CSC Charter
Action: conform text to the defined terms used in the rest of the Proposal, among other things

Notes

1. Opening Remarks
Â·        A big thanks to all who contributed to edits.
Â·        Following closure of this meeting, staff will send final document  to the CWG.
Â·        CWG will then have 24h to notify the group of any errors. Intention is not to reopen issues, but to focus on proofing --> DUE AT 23:59 UTC on 10 JUNE
Â·        Chairs will transmit to SO/ACs on 11 June with covering note.
2. Finalizing the Review Tool & Responses
Can expect a final version to be circulated in the next 24h. Staff is working on consistency-checking across the responses. The document is frozen as of 1 June.
3. Update on questions to ICANN Finance & Legal
The letter and responses from ICANN are posted on Wiki: https://community.icann.org/x/7Jk0Aw. <https://community.icann.org/x/7Jk0Aw>
Staff have included the responses in Section IV (and included an Annex to for the Finance information).
4. Last Review of Final Proposal
On screen now is version 5. The difference between the previous version and the latest is that the Chairs took some time to review which items were still open and which had been resolved. Tried to focus CWG on the key outstanding issues. This latest version also includes the DT-A annex which has now been included.
Paragraph 108: Change the wording from "ringfence" to "isolate" and remove the definition in the footnote.  ICANN has control and ownership of PTI and the implementation documents will assure against further transfer out of assets.
Action: In document text, remove --> "as it is customary"
Paragraph 121/ Footnote 11: footnote is satisfactory.
Paragraph 125: make clear "supermajority from both" ccNSO and GNSO. Also including the CSC as part of the remit.
Paragraph 128: covered by resolution in paragraph 121
Paragraph 134: SLEs discussion -- principles are included in annex and summary is included in the section now.
Action: conform text to the defined terms used in the rest of the Proposal, among other things
Paragraph 155: Action: remove capitals in "standing committee"
Section IV: Action: Sidley to provide text on PTI implementation.
Annex G: edit to the Remedial Action Procedures table
Annex H: Action: remove escalation paragraph and preamble
Annex J: Action: edits to #3 should be cross-checked with CSC Charter
Term Sheet: staff to revise with comments from Sidley and Greg
5. Overall Timeline / Milestones
    a. Communications
    b. Webinars on 11 June
    c. Sessions at ICANN 53
6. AOB
    a. Thursday 11 June -- 1 hour call about CWG engagement
    b. Canceling Tuesday 16 June call
    c. Client Committee on Friday 12 June
7. Closing Remarks
After proposal is sent, 24h to respond with comments or statements DUE AT 23:59 UTC on 10 JUNE

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