[CWG-Stewardship] Principles and Criteria that Should Underpin Decisions on the Transition of NTIA Stewardship: New Draft

[Rinalia Abdul Rahim]

Hi.

I find 5.ii not easy to understand. Can the text be improved for clarity?

Thanks.

Rinalia
 On Mar 5, 2015 7:59 AM, "Martin Boyle" <Martin.Boyle at nominet.org.uk> wrote:

>  Hi all,
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> And special thanks to Elise and Paul for their cooperation on g.ii (now
> 7.ii), Stephanie for some useful proposed wording for j (now 10), Maarten
> Simon for some comments and suggested edits and Erick for some interesting
> discussion on h.ii (now 8.ii).
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> The result is perhaps a slightly more complicated document that it was on
> Tuesday evening!
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> I propose that we look to:
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> ·         Remove all the comments and accept all the editing that has not
> had any comment that is the side heading and paragraphs (using the new
> numbering) 2, 3, 5.i, 5.iv, 6.ii, 7 chapeau, 7.iii-vi, 8.i, 8.iii and 9.
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> ·         See whether the suggested compromise on 7.ii is acceptable.
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> ·         See whether the proposed text in 5.iii is acceptable.
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> ·         In the light of Maarten’s comment on 5.vi, check whether
> maintaining the current text (including removing the square brackets) is
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> ·         See whether 6.iii should be retained and whether there is
> consensus to remove the square brackets.
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> ·         See if the edits proposed for 7.i are acceptable.
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> ·         See if Stephanie’s proposal for 10 is acceptable.
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> If we have time I’d like to at least ask Erick to introduce the
> alternative he has proposed for 8.ii.  However, it is not proving to be an
> easy discussion so I propose to take this discussion off line as there is
> unlikely to be any resolution in time for or during tomorrow’s call.
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> Thanks and I look forward to a constructive discussion tomorrow.
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> Martin
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