[CWG-Stewardship] FW: Revised Community Agreement Draft: 08-05-2016

Sun Aug 7 20:37:54 UTC 2016

Dear All,
No matter who made the changes, I am commenting on the text not on the
author's identity.
I have had to convert the PDF in word and have done my verifications and
attached my comments
There are serious problems in some of the terms.
I have indicated all in terms of deletion with reasons and/or with comments
in round bracket.
Regartds
Kavouss

2016-08-07 20:15 GMT+02:00 Greg Shatan <gregshatanipc at gmail.com>:

> The changes were not made by me. The changes were made by the CWG's
> counsel and the IETF Trust's counsel working collaboratively, which came
> after discussion of the IANA IPR collaborative group (including reps of all
> the communities and the Trust).
>
> I don't have the redline in Word. I sent to the list everything that was
> initially sent by the IETF Trust's counsel to CWG's counsel to the Client
> Committee list.
>
> Greg
>
>
> On Sunday, August 7, 2016, Kavouss Arasteh <kavouss.arasteh at gmail.com>
> wrote:
>
>> Dear ALL
>>
>> I HAVE no comments on the initial text before being changed
>> Regards
>> Kavouss
>>
>> 2016-08-07 18:04 GMT+02:00 Kavouss Arasteh <kavouss.arasteh at gmail.com>:
>>
>>> Seun
>>> NO
>>> PLS DO NOT MAKE MY JOB HARD..
>>> WHY NOT A RED MARK WORD VERSION
>>> Regards
>>> Kavouss
>>>
>>>
>>> 2016-08-07 17:42 GMT+02:00 Seun Ojedeji <seun.ojedeji at gmail.com>:
>>>
>>>> Hello Kavous,
>>>>
>>>> An option could be that you look at the PDF and make your comment on
>>>> the word version(though you can make comment on the pdf as well)
>>>>
>>>> Another option is if you (or someone) has the previous clean version
>>>> then one can produce a redline off the two clean versions.
>>>>
>>>> Regards
>>>>
>>>> Sent from my LG G4
>>>> Kindly excuse brevity and typos
>>>>
>>>> On 7 Aug 2016 4:37 p.m., "Kavouss Arasteh" <kavouss.arasteh at gmail.com>
>>>> wrote:
>>>>
>>>>> Dear Andrew,
>>>>> Tks again for your kind reply.
>>>>> Please send me a red mark  Word Version and I Will reply today.
>>>>> I HAVE SOME CONCERS ON SOME OF THE  CHANGED MADE  BY GREC
>>>>> Regards
>>>>> Kavouss
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> 2016-08-07 17:28 GMT+02:00 Andrew Sullivan <ajs at anvilwalrusden.com>:
>>>>>
>>>>>> I don't know whetheer you will get that before tomorrow, and that is
>>>>>> really rather late.  Can you at least say what your concerns are?
>>>>>> There really isn't a lot of time: this needs to go to public comment
>>>>>> on Thursday.  An additional day to wait for the comments would be bad.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Best regards,
>>>>>>
>>>>>> A
>>>>>>
>>>>>> On Sun, Aug 07, 2016 at 05:14:50PM +0200, Kavouss Arasteh wrote:
>>>>>> > Seun,
>>>>>> > I know that a word version was included but the Word Version is a
>>>>>> clean
>>>>>> > Text and it is difficult to identify the changes .I wish to see
>>>>>> what was
>>>>>> > the changes introduced by Greg
>>>>>> > I still need the red mark text in WORD VERSION.
>>>>>> > Regards
>>>>>> > Kavouss
>>>>>> >
>>>>>> > 2016-08-07 14:09 GMT+02:00 Seun Ojedeji <seun.ojedeji at gmail.com>:
>>>>>> >
>>>>>> > > A word version was included in Greg's mail
>>>>>> > >
>>>>>> > > Regards
>>>>>> > >
>>>>>> > > Sent from my LG G4
>>>>>> > > Kindly excuse brevity and typos
>>>>>> > >
>>>>>> > > On 7 Aug 2016 10:36 a.m., "Kavouss Arasteh" <
>>>>>> kavouss.arasteh at gmail.com>
>>>>>> > > wrote:
>>>>>> > >
>>>>>> > >> Grec,
>>>>>> > >> Thank you very much for the amendments. I do not agree with some
>>>>>> of them
>>>>>> > >> In order to enable me to provide my counter comments to you, pls
>>>>>> provide
>>>>>> > >> a word version of your amendment as soon as convinient
>>>>>> > >> Regards
>>>>>> > >> Kavouss
>>>>>> > >>
>>>>>> > >>
>>>>>> > >> 2016-08-07 0:22 GMT+02:00 Greg Shatan <gregshatanipc at gmail.com>:
>>>>>> > >>
>>>>>> > >>> CWG,
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> I am forwarding a revised draft of the proposed Community
>>>>>> Agreement
>>>>>> > >>> relating to the IANA IPR.  In addition to any other comments
>>>>>> you may have,
>>>>>> > >>> I draw your attention to the two specific items in the email
>>>>>> below: (1)
>>>>>> > >>> identifying an entity to sign for the names community, and (2)
>>>>>> providing a
>>>>>> > >>> brief description of the IANA Services used by the names
>>>>>> community (
>>>>>> > >>> *see* Exhibit A for descriptions provided by the other
>>>>>> communities).
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> This will be the subject of further refinement by the IPR
>>>>>> collaborative
>>>>>> > >>> group early in the week, with the goal of initiating a public
>>>>>> comment
>>>>>> > >>> period as soon as possible after the CWG-IANA meeting on
>>>>>> Thursday.
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> Greg
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> ---------- Forwarded message ----------
>>>>>> > >>> From: Hofheimer, Joshua T. <jhofheimer at sidley.com>
>>>>>> > >>> Date: Sat, Aug 6, 2016 at 4:55 PM
>>>>>> > >>> Subject: [client com] FW: Revised Community Agreement Draft:
>>>>>> 08-05-2016
>>>>>> > >>> To: Client <cwg-client at icann.org>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> Dear Client Committee,
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> Attached please find a revised draft of the proposed Community
>>>>>> Agreement
>>>>>> > >>> for your review and comment.  This is an iterative version
>>>>>> prepared jointly
>>>>>> > >>> by counsel (Sidley) to the CWG and counsel to the IETF Trust to
>>>>>> reflect the
>>>>>> > >>> 7-point discussion items.  To be clear, it is still a work in
>>>>>> progress, but
>>>>>> > >>> we believe ready for the CWG to have an opportunity for review.
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> Two important issues to highlight:
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> 1) the Names Community needs to determine who will be the
>>>>>> signatory
>>>>>> > >>> party, acting on behalf of the Names Community, to the Community
>>>>>> > >>> Agreement.  For your information, the attached draft has the
>>>>>> organizations
>>>>>> > >>> put forward to represent the Numbers and Protocols Communities;
>>>>>> and
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> 2) we need a brief description of the IANA services to be
>>>>>> provided on
>>>>>> > >>> behalf of the Names Community.  The following high-level
>>>>>> description was
>>>>>> > >>> included in a draft of the Naming Functions Agreement.  If this
>>>>>> is
>>>>>> > >>> acceptable for including here is well, please advise (or we ask
>>>>>> the Client
>>>>>> > >>> Committee to provide a sufficient description):
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> The “*IANA Naming Function*” is comprised of:
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> (a)             Management of the DNS Root Zone (“*Root Zone
>>>>>> Management*
>>>>>> > >>> ”);
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> (b)             Management of the .INT top-level domain;
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> (c)              Maintenance of a repository of
>>>>>> internationalized
>>>>>> > >>> domain name tables and label generation rule sets; and
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> (d)             Provision of other services related to the
>>>>>> management
>>>>>> > >>> of .INT top-level domains, at ICANN’s reasonable request and at
>>>>>> ICANN’s
>>>>>> > >>> expense.
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> Please provide any comment or feedback as soon as practical, as
>>>>>> we are
>>>>>> > >>> trying to finalize the draft for approval by the various
>>>>>> stakeholders and
>>>>>> > >>> release for public comment by Thursday.
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> Thank you in advance.
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> Cheers,
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> Josh
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> *Joshua Hofheimer*
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> *Sidley Austin LLP*
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> *jhofheimer at sidley.com <jhofheimer at sidley.com>*
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> *(213) 896-6061 <%28213%29%20896-6061> (LA direct)*
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> *(650) 565-7561 <%28650%29%20565-7561> (Palo Alto direct)*
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> *(323) 708-2405 <%28323%29%20708-2405> (cell)*
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> *From:* iana-ipr-bounces at nro.net [mailto:iana-ipr-bounces at nro.n
>>>>>> et] *On
>>>>>> > >>> Behalf Of *Jorge Contreras
>>>>>> > >>> *Sent:* Friday, August 05, 2016 10:01 AM
>>>>>> > >>> *To:* iana-ipr at nro.net
>>>>>> > >>> *Subject:* [Iana-ipr] Revised Community Agreement Draft:
>>>>>> 08-05-2016
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> All – attached is a draft of the Community Agreement that Josh
>>>>>> and I
>>>>>> > >>> have collaborated on over the past two days.  We believe that
>>>>>> it reflects
>>>>>> > >>> the current requirements of the parties, and submit it for your
>>>>>> review and
>>>>>> > >>> discussion.
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> A clean version, as well as a marked version against the draft
>>>>>> of
>>>>>> > >>> 07-30-16 (in PDF format) are attached.
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> Please note a few items that still need to be completed,
>>>>>> including the
>>>>>> > >>> description of the IANA Names Service, the identities of the CCG
>>>>>> > >>> representatives, etc.
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> Best regards,
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> Jorge
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> Jorge L. Contreras
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> Contreras Legal Strategy LLC
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> 1711 Massachusetts Ave. NW, No. 710
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> Washington, DC 20036
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>> contreraslegal at att.net
>>>>>> > >>>
>>>>>> > >>>
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>>>>>> --
>>>>>> Andrew Sullivan
>>>>>> ajs at anvilwalrusden.com
>>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>
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