[Epdp-dt] EPDP Scope

Mon Jul 16 16:11:09 UTC 2018

Thanks Keith.

We can support my alternative language in J, even though I think the issue of harmonization is an important one the WG should consider.  We can’t support Pam’s proposed language, so hopefully, Pam can agree that my alternative language is acceptable.

Best,
Paul

From: Drazek, Keith [mailto:kdrazek at verisign.com]
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Subject: RE: [Epdp-dt] EPDP Scope

Hi Pam and Paul,

Attached is an updated version incorporating Pam’s edits and responding to her questions. I incorporated Paul’s suggested language below for Section J.

Regards,
Keith

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Subject: [EXTERNAL] RE: [Epdp-dt] EPDP Scope

Hi Pam,

Thank you for your proposed edits.  However, I do think that they eliminate an important concept that we were trying to get at and would prefer the question revert to its previous formulation.

If the DT decides to eliminate the concept of reconciliation/avoiding an unharmonized approach, I still think your proposed changes need some work.

If we change to “Can the obligation to provide “reasonable access” be clarified or defined…” I think that leads us down the wrong path.  J1 already focuses on clarifying and defining reasonable access.  I think we could ask “Can the obligation to provide “reasonable access” be further clarified and/or better defined through the implementation of a community-wide model…”  We lose the idea of harmonization, which was the purpose of the question in the first place, but ultimately those working on the answer will hopefully take into account issues that would tend to bring a discordant result and try to avoid those outcomes.

So, Keith, we would prefer that the question revert.  If we can’t get that, we would be OK with:

“Can the obligation to provide “reasonable access” be further clarified and/or better defined through the implementation of a community-wide model for access or similar framework which takes into account at least the following elements:”

Best to all,
Paul

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Subject: Re: [Epdp-dt] EPDP Scope

Hi Keith

Many thanks to you and the small drafting team for the "final" draft.

Because of time zone differences, I have not had an opportunity to discuss this with my RrSG councillors or RrSG members but, in the interest fo time, I have made some suggested edits and queries to the final draft. Most of them are intended to correct minor errors or add more clarity and consistency so I hope they are not controversial, except perhaps my proposed change to J2 below:

"J2) Can the obligation to provide “reasonable access” be clarified or defined reconciled with the objective of avoiding, to the extent possible, an unharmonized approach to third-party access to registration data, , without the implementation of a community-wide model for access or similar framework which takes into account at least the following elements:"

It seems to me neither the langauge in the previous draft (re fragmentation of WHOIS) nor the final draft was helpful hence my proposed change to try to make it more neutral.

I also have a question regarding the last paragraph in the final draft:

"The EPDP Team shall respect the timelines and deliverables as outlined in Annex A and A-1 of the ICANN Bylaws and the EPDP Manual. As per the GNSO EPDP Working Group Guidelines, the EPDP Team shall develop a work plan that outlines the necessary steps and expected timing in order to achieve the milestones of the EPDP as set out in Annex A and A-1 of the ICANN Bylaws and the EPDP Manual and submit this to the GNSO Council. Any significant updates to the work plan are expected to be communicated in a timely manner to the GNSO Council with an explanation as to why the work plan needed adjustment."

The final draft Charter has set timelines for Deliverable 2. Is the EPDP Team expected to develop a work plan for all three deliverables?

Kind regards,

Pam
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Subject:[Epdp-dt] EPDP Scope

Hello again everyone….

Now attached is the final draft of the EPDP WG Charter scope section for your review and our vote on the 19th.

I have attached the redline version (against the version circulate to the DT last Wednesday) and the clean version.

Thanks for your patience and for the constructive input of all parties.

Regards,
Keith

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Subject: Re: [EXTERNAL] [Epdp-dt] EPDP Scope

Hi all. Please wait before reviewing. I may have jumped the gun and we may have more suggested edits incoming from NCSG.

Thanks,
Keith

On Jul 15, 2018, at 8:44 AM, Drazek, Keith via Epdp-dt <epdp-dt at icann.org<mailto:epdp-dt at icann.org>> wrote:
Hi all,

As discussed on Wednesday’s EPDP Drafting Team call, attached is the final draft of the EPDP charter scope section.

I received a few suggested edits from Stephanie and Darcy and did my best to incorporate/address them. The small group has reviewed and agreed this is ready for approval at the 19 July Council meeting.

Thanks to everyone for your contributions to this effort.

Regards,
Keith
<Updated Scope Section 15 July 2018 -- Consolidated Edits.docx>
<Updated Scope Section 15 July 2018 -- Consolidated Edits CLEAN.docx>
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