[Internal-cg] Minor issue with timeline language
mnuduma
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Sat Oct 11 20:09:37 UTC 2014
+1@ Narelle and Lynn.
Mary Uduma
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From: Narelle Clark <narelle.clark at accan.org.au>
Date: 09/10/2014 19:47 (GMT-05:00)
To: "Lynn St.Amour" <Lynn at lstamour.org>,Alissa Cooper <alissa at cooperw.in>
Cc: ICG <internal-cg at icann.org>
Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] Minor issue with timeline language
Lynn's first revised wording is better, and I prefer a clearer statement that this is a piece compiled by the ICG through the community, independent of ICANN, and delivered, unchanged to the NTIA.
Narelle
> -----Original Message-----
> From: internal-cg-bounces at icann.org [mailto:internal-cg-bounces at icann.org]
> On Behalf Of Lynn St.Amour
> Sent: Friday, 10 October 2014 1:04 AM
> To: Alissa Cooper
> Cc: ICG
> Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] Minor issue with timeline language
>
> Hi Alissa,
>
> Various definitions of "submit" say: "given to a person or body for consideration
> or judgment" or "to give (a document, proposal, piece of writing, etc.) to
> someone so that it can be considered or approved".
>
> To make the ICG's intent and responsibility more clear we might say:
>
> "If no concerns are found, the ICG SENDS the final proposal to ICANN for
> delivery to NTIA."
>
> or
>
> "If no concerns are found, the ICG's proposal is transmitted to NTIA via ICANN".
>
>
> Best,
> Lynn
>
>
>
>
> On Oct 8, 2014, at 5:39 PM, Alissa Cooper <alissa at cooperw.in> wrote:
>
> > Hi all,
> >
> > The folks at NTIA have pointed out to me that as a practical matter and to
> remain consistent with their procurement rules, ICANN is the entity that needs
> to submit the final transition proposal to NTIA. If you look at our published
> timeline, it says the following in step 7:
> >
> > "If no concerns are found, the ICG formally submits the final proposal to
> NTIA."
> >
> > I suggest that we should update this to say:
> >
> > "If no concerns are found, the ICG formally submits the final proposal to
> ICANN for delivery to NTIA."
> >
> > Let me know what you think.
> >
> > Thanks,
> > Alissa
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