[Rt4-whois] Updated Exec Summary, and ideas for the clean, consolidated report.

[Emily Taylor]

Hi Alice, Hi All

We had some to-ing and fro-ing on the Executive Summary, and the attachment
dated 20 October is the latest version that I'm aware of.  This is of the
whole report, and is prone to misbehave/crash.

So, I'm also attaching a clean copy with the changes accepted and Bill's
request (that we acknowledge that WHOIS was done by default) taken in.  As
discussed on the latest call, I have highlighted additional text which I
have put in.  Some of this fills in place holders (eg the one describing
our work), another section which was missing was some discussion of
consumer trust.  I have made a first attempt here.

Alice - please can you add this version into your consolidated draft of the
report.

I also suggest that we get rid of the "notebook" format in Word.  I find it
difficult to work with, and am convinced that all it's weird formatting
might be responsible for the instability that we're finding in the document.

Alice - please would you also keep the appendices as a separate document
for now, this will focus our attention on the core report in the coming
days.

Many thanks

Emily
---------- Forwarded message ----------
From: Emily Taylor <emily at emilytaylor.eu>
Date: 8 November 2011 17:54
Subject: Executive Summary
To: "Smith, Bill" <bill.smith at paypal-inc.com>, Alice Jansen <
alice.jansen at icann.org>
Cc: Kathy Kleiman <kathy at kathykleiman.com>, lynn at goodsecurityconsulting.com,
Sharon Lemon <sharonchallis at aol.com>


Hi there

Thanks for this - I've read it many times now, and love it.

I started editing in the consolidated document posted on the private wiki,
and it's crashed, corrupted and whatever.

Anyway, tried to copy the content into a single file so that it's not too
huge, but it died.  Anyway, here's the whole report, with some suggested
edits for the Exec Summary.  I think the file might be dodgy so let me know
if you can't open it.

I think I agree with Sharon's original comment that (to a Brit at least) it
reads quite emotionally.  Over this side of the Atlantic, we are suspicious
of emotion and immediately mistrust it.  That's our hang up, not yours, but
I did want to try and make the point so that we can reach as broad an
audience as possible.

Thanks

Emily



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