From emily at emilytaylor.eu Mon May 7 14:09:55 2012 From: emily at emilytaylor.eu (Emily Taylor) Date: Mon, 7 May 2012 15:09:55 +0100 Subject: [Rt4-whois] FINAL edit of the draft report - to be published Message-ID: Dear Alice, dear All On our last call, you empowered me and Kathy to have a final, final edit, once the whole report was put together. I have spent much of today working through the whole report, and attach a mark up showing some minor changes that I recommend making. As predicted, the new text combined with the old has created a few anomalies. In addition, there are one or two places where I have made changes (eg where public comment suggested we should make clear that we're not advocating going behind PDPs or existing processes - we all agreed to this, but forgot to put it in). I have listed them all out below for maximum transparency and so that you can see what I've done at a glance. They are also marked up in the attached version. My approach through out has been minimalist, and to move existing text rather than amend it. Sometimes, I've had to create new words, but have stuck to areas where I know we all agree, rather than plunging into controversial areas. Alice has also done things like make sure "WHOIS" is consistently capitalised throughout. She will also go through one more time and clear up anomalies in US and UK spelling. *The way forward: I am asking Alice to accept all these changes now, produce a content page, and have the report published.* * * *IF YOU HAVE ANY FINAL COMMENTS (PARTICULARLY ON LATEST CHANGES) PLEASE LET ALICE AND ME KNOW AS SOON AS POSSIBLE.* * * * * Kind regards Emily *---------------* So, here is a run down of the changes that I have made: *Executive Summary, Findings and Recommendations* Page 5 - the new language on studies was there along with the original wording. We agreed to keep the original wording, and sort of liked the new language. Reading the Exec summary through again, I find they duplicated and so went back to the original wording. Page 5 - removed the title "Conclusions" which led into original text. This had been removed, then reinstated, and again reading it through the whole Exec Summary came across as a lot of conclusions, followed by findings etc. So, removing the title, includes much of the text as continuing the "Debate" point, where it originally was. I also moved the paragraph about "Consumer Trust" to the Findings section before Recommendations 3 where it works very well, and introduces the Consumer study into our findings (it wasn't there before, which I think was an omission). Page 5 - moved the original wording describing the Review Team's diversity etc to the final paragraph of "Work of this Review Team" on the following page. Page 7 - Removed the word "honest" (a hangover from my original, bad tempered draft, subsequently toned down and this was missed), and changed "and encourage the " to "encouraging" to fit with the language of the rest of the sentence in the findings to Strategic Priority (rec 1). I also put in a footnote describing the NORC study where first mentioned. It fits better to go into a full definition in the text on Data Accuracy findings (as is). Page 7 - it's marked as me, but I picked up and included text edits proposed by Peter on the Exec Summary (eg "the" included in 5th bullet point on page 7) Page 8 - Peter's text included in second paragraph of Findings to Rec 3, and paragraph moved from original exec summary on consumer study, with first sentence tweaked to keep the flow. Page 10 - Susan's wording and footnote explaining definitions included in the findings on Data Accuracy (NORC study terms). Page 11 - A section starting "Anecdotal evidence suggests..." is added into the para on WDRP to fit with the Findings and Recommendations at the end of the report (which included this text inserted from the original "Findings") Page 12 - Added "in accordance with ICANN's existing processes" in the bit about WDRP to reflect feedback from public comment, which suggested that it reads like we're trying to bypass PDP. Page 15 - the text for findings is new. It was agreed on the list a couple of days ago. Page 16-17 - the order of the final two recommendations has been reversed as agreed, and consequential changes made. *Main report* * * Page 18 - in response to feedback that said it looked as if I was claiming to be Chair of the ccNSO, I have created a table for the membership of the Review Team, rather than the previous bullet point format. Page 36 - new Chapter 4 - I have changed the reference to Findings and Recommendations (which were originally included in the chapter itself). Page 37 - we need to add in the references to Appendix numbers when they are published, and also double-check that page numbers for the report itself are accurate. Page 37 - date of letter to compliance team is added. Page 41 - two "also"s removed. Appendix numbers need adding. Page 42 - emphasis added to quotation about budget, and "emphasis added" is included in text. Page 42 - dates changed, and additional text brings this passage up to date. Footnote added "considered narrowly" in the text. *Gap Analysis* * * We had not really revisited this in the light of our updated findings and recommendations. Mostly, it's still very good, but there were a couple of anomalies. Page 75 - removed "Conclusions" as these are now incorporated into Findings with the recommendations. Full and Substantial Failure are included in keeping with our findings and recommendations on data accuracy Page 76 - included short paragraph on compliance budget/staffing which lays the foundations for the findings. Page 78 - this passage on The Proxy Registration System reflected the state of play on publication of our draft report - ie that we were making separate recommendations for privacy and proxy providers, and two alternatives for "common interface". The situation has now changed. I have dealt with this by removing a few paragraphs that talk about us not reaching consensus, and being sceptical about whether our recommended "voluntary best practices for proxies" would work. Removed the reference to alternatives completely on "Common Interface". and added a few words to try and pull back the sense on how all this relies on a functioning compliance team to work out. Finally, I went through the Findings and Recommendations as set out in the Exec Summary and at the end of the report. They should be identical, and as noted above I made a few changes for consistency (where one had changed but not the other). -- * * 76 Temple Road, Oxford OX4 2EZ UK t: +44 (0)1865 582 811 ? m: +44 (0)7540 049 322 emily at emilytaylor.eu *www.etlaw.co.uk* Emily Taylor Consultancy Limited is a company registered in England and Wales No. 7630471. VAT No. 114487713. -------------- next part -------------- An HTML attachment was scrubbed... URL: http://mm.icann.org/pipermail/rt4-whois/attachments/20120507/28fd84ca/attachment.html -------------- next part -------------- A non-text attachment was scrubbed... Name: WHOIS - Final report V6.docx Type: application/vnd.openxmlformats-officedocument.wordprocessingml.document Size: 429263 bytes Desc: not available Url : http://mm.icann.org/pipermail/rt4-whois/attachments/20120507/28fd84ca/WHOIS-FinalreportV6.docx From Peter.Nettlefold at dbcde.gov.au Tue May 8 04:42:49 2012 From: Peter.Nettlefold at dbcde.gov.au (Nettlefold, Peter) Date: Tue, 8 May 2012 14:42:49 +1000 Subject: [Rt4-whois] FINAL edit of the draft report - to be published [SEC=UNCLASSIFIED] In-Reply-To: References: Message-ID: <636771A7F4383E408C57A0240B5F8D4A3352799C4A@EMB01.dept.gov.au> Hello again all, Thanks Emily for circulating this for final comment. I have not had time yet to read it all, but did notice a couple of potential issues with the IDN text. The first is that the final paragraph of the revised findings that we worked on appears to have been dropped from the report (I've attached the email chain on this for reference). This read: These are difficult issues, and there is ongoing work within ICANN in this area (e.g. the joint gNSO and SSAC working group on Internationalised Registration Data - IRD WG). As the need is imminent, this work needs to proceed with priority in coordination with other relevant work beyond ICANN's ambit, to make internationalised domain name registration data accessible. Also, recommendation 12 remains in its original form in this version. I offered some comments on this on 3 May, and I'm concerned that this recommendation remains unclear. The current text reads: 12. ICANN Community should task a working group within 6 months of publication to determine the relevant internationalized domain name registration data requirements and evaluate the available solutions, especially those being successfully implemented by ccTLDs, at least for the adoption of IDN gTLDs, as already stipulated by the New gTLD Applicant Guidebook.The working group should aim for consistency of approach across the gTLD and - on a voluntary basis - the ccTLD space, and report within a year of being tasked. My comments from the 3rd were: 12. ICANN [p1] should task a working group within 6 months of publication to determine the relevant internationalized domain name registration data requirements and evaluate the available solutions. This should have particular regard to solutions [p2] being successfully implemented by ccTLDs, at least for the adoption of IDN gTLDs, as already stipulated by the New gTLD Applicant Guidebook[p3] . The working group should aim for consistency of approach across the gTLD and - on a voluntary basis - the ccTLD space, and report within a year of being tasked. I'm still unclear on whether the intent is to recommend that the 'solution' be imposed on all IDN gTLDs and/or recommend consistency across the whole gTLD space? I offer the below, based on my best guess of the current intent. I'm not trying to alter the intent, only to clarify what is being recommended, so look forward to any comments on this: 12. ICANN should task a working group within six months of publication of this report, to determine appropriate internationalized domain name registration data requirements and evaluate available solutions (including solutions being implemented by ccTLDs). At a minimum, the data requirements should apply to all new gTLDs, and the working group should consider ways to encourage consistency of approach across the gTLD and (on a voluntary basis) ccTLD space. The working group should report within a year of being tasked. I hope this helps. Cheers, Peter From: rt4-whois-bounces at icann.org [mailto:rt4-whois-bounces at icann.org] On Behalf Of Emily Taylor Sent: Tuesday, 8 May 2012 12:10 AM To: Alice Jansen; rt4-whois at icann.org Subject: [Rt4-whois] FINAL edit of the draft report - to be published Dear Alice, dear All On our last call, you empowered me and Kathy to have a final, final edit, once the whole report was put together. I have spent much of today working through the whole report, and attach a mark up showing some minor changes that I recommend making. As predicted, the new text combined with the old has created a few anomalies. In addition, there are one or two places where I have made changes (eg where public comment suggested we should make clear that we're not advocating going behind PDPs or existing processes - we all agreed to this, but forgot to put it in). I have listed them all out below for maximum transparency and so that you can see what I've done at a glance. They are also marked up in the attached version. My approach through out has been minimalist, and to move existing text rather than amend it. Sometimes, I've had to create new words, but have stuck to areas where I know we all agree, rather than plunging into controversial areas. Alice has also done things like make sure "WHOIS" is consistently capitalised throughout. She will also go through one more time and clear up anomalies in US and UK spelling. The way forward: I am asking Alice to accept all these changes now, produce a content page, and have the report published. IF YOU HAVE ANY FINAL COMMENTS (PARTICULARLY ON LATEST CHANGES) PLEASE LET ALICE AND ME KNOW AS SOON AS POSSIBLE. Kind regards Emily --------------- So, here is a run down of the changes that I have made: Executive Summary, Findings and Recommendations Page 5 - the new language on studies was there along with the original wording. We agreed to keep the original wording, and sort of liked the new language. Reading the Exec summary through again, I find they duplicated and so went back to the original wording. Page 5 - removed the title "Conclusions" which led into original text. This had been removed, then reinstated, and again reading it through the whole Exec Summary came across as a lot of conclusions, followed by findings etc. So, removing the title, includes much of the text as continuing the "Debate" point, where it originally was. I also moved the paragraph about "Consumer Trust" to the Findings section before Recommendations 3 where it works very well, and introduces the Consumer study into our findings (it wasn't there before, which I think was an omission). Page 5 - moved the original wording describing the Review Team's diversity etc to the final paragraph of "Work of this Review Team" on the following page. Page 7 - Removed the word "honest" (a hangover from my original, bad tempered draft, subsequently toned down and this was missed), and changed "and encourage the " to "encouraging" to fit with the language of the rest of the sentence in the findings to Strategic Priority (rec 1). I also put in a footnote describing the NORC study where first mentioned. It fits better to go into a full definition in the text on Data Accuracy findings (as is). Page 7 - it's marked as me, but I picked up and included text edits proposed by Peter on the Exec Summary (eg "the" included in 5th bullet point on page 7) Page 8 - Peter's text included in second paragraph of Findings to Rec 3, and paragraph moved from original exec summary on consumer study, with first sentence tweaked to keep the flow. Page 10 - Susan's wording and footnote explaining definitions included in the findings on Data Accuracy (NORC study terms). Page 11 - A section starting "Anecdotal evidence suggests..." is added into the para on WDRP to fit with the Findings and Recommendations at the end of the report (which included this text inserted from the original "Findings") Page 12 - Added "in accordance with ICANN's existing processes" in the bit about WDRP to reflect feedback from public comment, which suggested that it reads like we're trying to bypass PDP. Page 15 - the text for findings is new. It was agreed on the list a couple of days ago. Page 16-17 - the order of the final two recommendations has been reversed as agreed, and consequential changes made. Main report Page 18 - in response to feedback that said it looked as if I was claiming to be Chair of the ccNSO, I have created a table for the membership of the Review Team, rather than the previous bullet point format. Page 36 - new Chapter 4 - I have changed the reference to Findings and Recommendations (which were originally included in the chapter itself). Page 37 - we need to add in the references to Appendix numbers when they are published, and also double-check that page numbers for the report itself are accurate. Page 37 - date of letter to compliance team is added. Page 41 - two "also"s removed. Appendix numbers need adding. Page 42 - emphasis added to quotation about budget, and "emphasis added" is included in text. Page 42 - dates changed, and additional text brings this passage up to date. Footnote added "considered narrowly" in the text. Gap Analysis We had not really revisited this in the light of our updated findings and recommendations. Mostly, it's still very good, but there were a couple of anomalies. Page 75 - removed "Conclusions" as these are now incorporated into Findings with the recommendations. Full and Substantial Failure are included in keeping with our findings and recommendations on data accuracy Page 76 - included short paragraph on compliance budget/staffing which lays the foundations for the findings. Page 78 - this passage on The Proxy Registration System reflected the state of play on publication of our draft report - ie that we were making separate recommendations for privacy and proxy providers, and two alternatives for "common interface". The situation has now changed. I have dealt with this by removing a few paragraphs that talk about us not reaching consensus, and being sceptical about whether our recommended "voluntary best practices for proxies" would work. Removed the reference to alternatives completely on "Common Interface". and added a few words to try and pull back the sense on how all this relies on a functioning compliance team to work out. Finally, I went through the Findings and Recommendations as set out in the Exec Summary and at the end of the report. They should be identical, and as noted above I made a few changes for consistency (where one had changed but not the other). -- [http://www.etlaw.co.uk/images/stories/etlaw/etclogo250x60.gif] 76 Temple Road, Oxford OX4 2EZ UK t: +44 (0)1865 582 811 * m: +44 (0)7540 049 322 emily at emilytaylor.eu www.etlaw.co.uk Emily Taylor Consultancy Limited is a company registered in England and Wales No. 7630471. VAT No. 114487713. ________________________________ [p1]PN - I assume we're asking 'ICANN' to this? [p2]PN - I have not tried to change the intent, only to break the sentence in two - as the sentence was very long, and risked being unclear. [p3]PN - I'm not 100% clear on what is intended here by the phrase 'at least for the adoption of IDN gTLDs'. Does this mean the solution should be adopted by all IDN gTLDs? If so, I don't think it's currently 100% clear. 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From: "Sarmad Hussain" Subject: Re: [Rt4-whois] Fwd: IDN - a few more changes to bring it up to the readability of the rest of the Summary [SEC=UNCLASSIFIED] Date: Sat, 5 May 2012 02:34:33 +1000 Size: 33636 Url: http://mm.icann.org/pipermail/rt4-whois/attachments/20120508/64e7263e/attachment.mht From emily at emilytaylor.eu Tue May 8 06:32:47 2012 From: emily at emilytaylor.eu (Emily Taylor) Date: Tue, 8 May 2012 07:32:47 +0100 Subject: [Rt4-whois] FINAL edit of the draft report - to be published [SEC=UNCLASSIFIED] In-Reply-To: <636771A7F4383E408C57A0240B5F8D4A3352799C4A@EMB01.dept.gov.au> References: <636771A7F4383E408C57A0240B5F8D4A3352799C4A@EMB01.dept.gov.au> Message-ID: Hi Peter Many thanks for spotting these anomalies. With so many versions buzzing around, it has been a real challenge to keep hold of everything. I am grateful you spotted this. Alice- please can you amend. Kind regards Emily On 8 May 2012 05:42, Nettlefold, Peter wrote: > ** ** > > Hello again all,**** > > ** ** > > Thanks Emily for circulating this for final comment.**** > > ** ** > > I have not had time yet to read it all, but did notice a couple of > potential issues with the IDN text.**** > > ** ** > > The first is that the final paragraph of the revised findings that we > worked on appears to have been dropped from the report (I?ve attached the > email chain on this for reference). This read:**** > > ** ** > > These are difficult issues, and there is ongoing work within ICANN in this > area (e.g. the joint gNSO and SSAC working group on Internationalised > Registration Data ? IRD WG). As the need is imminent, this work needs to > proceed with priority in coordination with other relevant work beyond > ICANN?s ambit, to make internationalised domain name registration data > accessible.**** > > Also, recommendation 12 remains in its original form in this version. I > offered some comments on this on 3 May, and I?m concerned that this > recommendation remains unclear. The current text reads:**** > > ** ** > > *12. *ICANN Community should task a working group within 6 months of > publication to determine the relevant internationalized domain name > registration data requirements and evaluate the available solutions, > especially those being successfully implemented by ccTLDs, at least for the > adoption of IDN gTLDs, as already stipulated by the New gTLD Applicant > Guidebook.The working group should aim for consistency of approach across > the gTLD and ? on a voluntary basis ? the ccTLD space, and report within a > year of being tasked.**** > > My comments from the 3rd were:**** > > *12. *ICANN **[p1] <#1372ac1e1c8fe24b__msocom_1>** should task a working > group within 6 months of publication to determine the > relevant internationalized domain name registration data requirements and > evaluate the available solutions. This should have particular regard to > solutions **[p2] <#1372ac1e1c8fe24b__msocom_2>** being successfully > implemented by ccTLDs, at least for the adoption of IDN gTLDs, as already > stipulated by the New gTLD Applicant Guidebook**[p3]<#1372ac1e1c8fe24b__msocom_3> > ** . The working group should aim for consistency of approach across the > gTLD and ? on a voluntary basis ? the ccTLD space, and report within a year > of being tasked.**** > > I?m still unclear on whether the intent is to recommend that the > ?solution? be imposed on all IDN gTLDs and/or recommend consistency across > the whole gTLD space?**** > > ** ** > > I offer the below, based on my best guess of the current intent. I?m not > trying to alter the intent, only to clarify what is being recommended, so > look forward to any comments on this:**** > > ** ** > > *12. *ICANN should task a working group within six months of publication > of this report, to determine appropriate internationalized domain name > registration data requirements and evaluate available solutions (including > solutions being implemented by ccTLDs). At a minimum, the data requirements > should apply to all new gTLDs, and the working group should consider ways > to encourage consistency of approach across the gTLD and (on a voluntary > basis) ccTLD space. The working group should report within a year of being > tasked.**** > > I hope this helps.**** > > ** ** > > Cheers,**** > > ** ** > > Peter**** > > ** ** > > ** ** > > ** ** > > *From:* rt4-whois-bounces at icann.org [mailto:rt4-whois-bounces at icann.org] *On > Behalf Of *Emily Taylor > *Sent:* Tuesday, 8 May 2012 12:10 AM > *To:* Alice Jansen; rt4-whois at icann.org > *Subject:* [Rt4-whois] FINAL edit of the draft report - to be published*** > * > > ** ** > > Dear Alice, dear All**** > > ** ** > > On our last call, you empowered me and Kathy to have a final, final edit, > once the whole report was put together. I have spent much of today working > through the whole report, and attach a mark up showing some minor changes > that I recommend making. **** > > ** ** > > As predicted, the new text combined with the old has created a few > anomalies. In addition, there are one or two places where I have made > changes (eg where public comment suggested we should make clear that we're > not advocating going behind PDPs or existing processes - we all agreed to > this, but forgot to put it in). I have listed them all out below for > maximum transparency and so that you can see what I've done at a glance. > They are also marked up in the attached version. My approach through out > has been minimalist, and to move existing text rather than amend it. > Sometimes, I've had to create new words, but have stuck to areas where I > know we all agree, rather than plunging into controversial areas.**** > > ** ** > > Alice has also done things like make sure "WHOIS" is consistently > capitalised throughout. She will also go through one more time and clear > up anomalies in US and UK spelling. **** > > ** ** > > *The way forward: I am asking Alice to accept all these changes now, > produce a content page, and have the report published.***** > > ** ** > > *IF YOU HAVE ANY FINAL COMMENTS (PARTICULARLY ON LATEST CHANGES) PLEASE > LET ALICE AND ME KNOW AS SOON AS POSSIBLE.***** > > ** ** > > ** ** > > Kind regards**** > > ** ** > > > Emily**** > > ** ** > > *---------------***** > > ** ** > > ** ** > > ** ** > > ** ** > > So, here is a run down of the changes that I have made:**** > > ** ** > > *Executive Summary, Findings and Recommendations***** > > ** ** > > Page 5 - the new language on studies was there along with the original > wording. We agreed to keep the original wording, and sort of liked the new > language. Reading the Exec summary through again, I find they duplicated > and so went back to the original wording. **** > > ** ** > > Page 5 - removed the title "Conclusions" which led into original text. > This had been removed, then reinstated, and again reading it through the > whole Exec Summary came across as a lot of conclusions, followed by > findings etc. So, removing the title, includes much of the text as > continuing the "Debate" point, where it originally was. I also moved the > paragraph about "Consumer Trust" to the Findings section before > Recommendations 3 where it works very well, and introduces the Consumer > study into our findings (it wasn't there before, which I think was an > omission).**** > > ** ** > > Page 5 - moved the original wording describing the Review Team's diversity > etc to the final paragraph of "Work of this Review Team" on the following > page.**** > > ** ** > > Page 7 - Removed the word "honest" (a hangover from my original, bad > tempered draft, subsequently toned down and this was missed), and changed > "and encourage the " to "encouraging" to fit with the language of the rest > of the sentence in the findings to Strategic Priority (rec 1). I also put > in a footnote describing the NORC study where first mentioned. It fits > better to go into a full definition in the text on Data Accuracy findings > (as is).**** > > ** ** > > Page 7 - it's marked as me, but I picked up and included text edits > proposed by Peter on the Exec Summary (eg "the" included in 5th bullet > point on page 7)**** > > ** ** > > Page 8 - Peter's text included in second paragraph of Findings to Rec 3, > and paragraph moved from original exec summary on consumer study, with > first sentence tweaked to keep the flow.**** > > ** ** > > Page 10 - Susan's wording and footnote explaining definitions included in > the findings on Data Accuracy (NORC study terms).**** > > ** ** > > Page 11 - A section starting "Anecdotal evidence suggests..." is added > into the para on WDRP to fit with the Findings and Recommendations at the > end of the report (which included this text inserted from the original > "Findings")**** > > ** ** > > Page 12 - Added "in accordance with ICANN's existing processes" in the bit > about WDRP to reflect feedback from public comment, which suggested that it > reads like we're trying to bypass PDP.**** > > ** ** > > Page 15 - the text for findings is new. It was agreed on the list a > couple of days ago.**** > > ** ** > > Page 16-17 - the order of the final two recommendations has been reversed > as agreed, and consequential changes made.**** > > ** ** > > *Main report***** > > ** ** > > Page 18 - in response to feedback that said it looked as if I was claiming > to be Chair of the ccNSO, I have created a table for the membership of the > Review Team, rather than the previous bullet point format.**** > > ** ** > > Page 36 - new Chapter 4 - I have changed the reference to Findings and > Recommendations (which were originally included in the chapter itself).*** > * > > ** ** > > Page 37 - we need to add in the references to Appendix numbers when they > are published, and also double-check that page numbers for the report > itself are accurate.**** > > ** ** > > Page 37 - date of letter to compliance team is added.**** > > ** ** > > Page 41 - two "also"s removed. Appendix numbers need adding.**** > > ** ** > > Page 42 - emphasis added to quotation about budget, and "emphasis added" > is included in text.**** > > ** ** > > Page 42 - dates changed, and additional text brings this passage up to > date. Footnote added "considered narrowly" in the text.**** > > ** ** > > *Gap Analysis***** > > ** ** > > We had not really revisited this in the light of our updated findings and > recommendations. Mostly, it's still very good, but there were a couple of > anomalies.**** > > ** ** > > Page 75 - removed "Conclusions" as these are now incorporated into > Findings with the recommendations. Full and Substantial Failure are > included in keeping with our findings and recommendations on data accuracy > **** > > ** ** > > Page 76 - included short paragraph on compliance budget/staffing which > lays the foundations for the findings.**** > > ** ** > > Page 78 - this passage on The Proxy Registration System reflected the > state of play on publication of our draft report - ie that we were making > separate recommendations for privacy and proxy providers, and two > alternatives for "common interface". The situation has now changed. I > have dealt with this by removing a few paragraphs that talk about us not > reaching consensus, and being sceptical about whether our recommended > "voluntary best practices for proxies" would work. Removed the reference > to alternatives completely on "Common Interface". and added a few words to > try and pull back the sense on how all this relies on a functioning > compliance team to work out.**** > > ** ** > > Finally, I went through the Findings and Recommendations as set out in the > Exec Summary and at the end of the report. They should be identical, and as > noted above I made a few changes for consistency (where one had changed but > not the other).**** > > ** ** > > ** ** > > ** ** > > ** ** > > > **** > > ** ** > > -- > > > **** > > * > * > > 76 Temple Road, Oxford OX4 2EZ UK > t: +44 (0)1865 582 811 ? m: +44 (0)7540 049 322 > emily at emilytaylor.eu > > *www.etlaw.co.uk* > > Emily Taylor Consultancy Limited is a company registered in England and > Wales No. 7630471. VAT No. 114487713.**** > > ** ** > ** > ------------------------------ > ** > ** > ****** > > **[p1] <#1372ac1e1c8fe24b__msoanchor_1>**PN ? I assume we?re asking > ?ICANN? to this? > ** > ** > ** > ****** > > **[p2] <#1372ac1e1c8fe24b__msoanchor_2>**PN ? I have not tried to change > the intent, only to break the sentence in two ? as the sentence was very > long, and risked being unclear. > ** > ** > ** > ****** > > **[p3] <#1372ac1e1c8fe24b__msoanchor_3>**PN ? I?m not 100% clear on what > is intended here by the phrase ?at least for the adoption of IDN gTLDs?. > Does this mean the solution should be adopted *by* all IDN gTLDs? If so, > I don?t think it?s currently 100% clear. Also, how does this fit with the > following sentence which talks about aiming for ?consistency across the > gTLD?space?? I may be missing something, but while I support the intent of > this recommendation ? it?s not 100% clear to me. > ** > ** > > > * > ------------------------------------------------------------------------------- > * > NOTICE: This email message is for the sole use of the intended > recipient(s) > and may contain confidential and privileged information. Any unauthorized > review, use, disclosure or distribution is prohibited. If you are not the > intended recipient, please contact the sender by reply email and destroy > all > copies of the original message. > > This message has been content scanned by the Axway MailGate. > MailGate uses policy enforcement to scan for known viruses, spam, > undesirable content and malicious code. For more information on Axway > products please visit www.axway.com. > > * > ------------------------------------------------------------------------------- > * > > > ---------- Forwarded message ---------- > From: "Sarmad Hussain" > To: "'Kathy Kleiman'" , "'Emily Taylor'" < > emily at emilytaylor.eu> > Cc: "rt4-whois at icann.org" > Date: Sat, 5 May 2012 02:34:33 +1000 > Subject: Re: [Rt4-whois] Fwd: IDN - a few more changes to bring it up to > the readability of the rest of the Summary [SEC=UNCLASSIFIED] > > I am Ok with the revisions. **** > > ** ** > > Regards, > Sarmad**** > > ** ** > > ** ** > > *From:* rt4-whois-bounces at icann.org [mailto:rt4-whois-bounces at icann.org] *On > Behalf Of *Kathy Kleiman > *Sent:* Friday, May 04, 2012 9:20 PM > *To:* Emily Taylor > *Cc:* rt4-whois at icann.org > *Subject:* Re: [Rt4-whois] Fwd: IDN - a few more changes to bring it up > to the readability of the rest of the Summary [SEC=UNCLASSIFIED]**** > > ** ** > > I like it, tx Peter and Emily. However, I defer to our lead IDN drafters, > Sarmad and Michael, for final approval. > > What I like is that it helps makes the whole issue approachable -- and > hopefully the rest of the Community will spend more time and attention on > this issue in which a core of dedicated people have worked so hard and so > well. > > Best, > Kathy > > > > > **** > > Thank you Peter **** > > ** ** > > I think this is a good synthesis. One extra element, which is easily > forgotten, is that internationalised WHOIS data isn't just an IDN problem, > but one which has been around ever since Chinese, Arabic and Russian > speakers have been registering domain names. So, the delay in addressing > this has not just been a year (since introduction of IDN.IDN) or a decade > (IDN.tld), it's even longer than that.**** > > ** ** > > So, I've added some language for this, based on the first paragraph of the > IDN chapter (highlighted below).**** > > ** ** > > Kind regards**** > > > Emily**** > > On 4 May 2012 08:08, Nettlefold, Peter > wrote:**** > > Hello again all,**** > > **** > > As I?ve said previously, I?m no expert in this area, but to hopefully help > move this forward I have attempted to pick up what seemed to be the major > themes from both sets of text.**** > > **** > > I hope this helps, and please feel free to edit or discard as needed.**** > > **** > > Cheers,**** > > **** > > Peter**** > > **** > > **** > > *Findings***** > > **** > > Developments associated with the WHOIS protocol and registration data > have not kept pace with the real world. A significant example of this is > International Domain Names (IDNs). IDNs have been available for > registration at the second level for over a decade, and were introduced in > 2010 at the root level. However, these developments were not accompanied by > corresponding changes related to WHOIS. In short, the current WHOIS > protocol has no support for non-ASCII characters, and cannot signal a > non-ASCII script.**** > > This means that while domain names can now be written in a range of > scrips (such as Arabic and Cyrillic), the contact information must still be > transliterated into a format ill-suited to the purpose. The NORC Study on > Data Accuracy highlighted IDN contact data as a major cause of apparent > inaccuracy. **** > > ** ** > > The failure to reflect internationalised registration data does not just > affect IDNs, however, and has existed for much longer - ever since domain > names have been registered by registrants globally. Global users need to > represent their local names, postal addresses and other contact and > technical information in the script(s) which they use. **** > > **** > > These are difficult issues, and there is ongoing work within ICANN in this > area (e.g. the joint gNSO and SSAC working group on Internationalised > Registration Data ? IRD WG). As the need is imminent, this work needs to > proceed with priority in coordination with other relevant work beyond > ICANN?s ambit, to make internationalised domain name registration data > accessible. > **** > > **** > > *From:* rt4-whois-bounces at icann.org [mailto:rt4-whois-bounces at icann.org] *On > Behalf Of *Kathy Kleiman > *Sent:* Thursday, 3 May 2012 11:43 PM > *To:* rt4-whois at icann.org > *Subject:* [Rt4-whois] Fwd: IDN - a few more changes to bring it up to > the readability of the rest of the Summary**** > > **** > > Dear All, > I appreciate the evolution of the IDNs text (and see nice changes in the > findings). Canwe go a bit further? I was wondering if we might take one > more attempt to a) define IDNs (for the many readers who will have no > idea), b) and define better the ambiguous term "this environment". > > For smarter (and more awake) people than I am, do you see a way to merge > the two texts below? I truly want to make sure that everyone understands > the importance and timeliness of our recommendations! > > Also, I saw that Peter has some ideas in this area, but did not propose > wording changes (I don't think). Does some of the text below cover your > thoughts? > > Best and tx, > Kathy > > > *Findings/Kathy: > *[from the Executive Summary] Policy and implementation of the Whois > protocol and registration data have not kept pace with the real world. > International Domain Names (IDNs) were introduced to great fanfare by ICANN > in 2000, and in 2010 at the root level, without a corresponding change to > its policies related to WHOIS. > > What this means, is that while domain names can now be written in Arabic > for example, the contact information for these domains must still be > transliterated into a format ill-suited to the purpose. [from the Public > Forum Slides] These are difficult issues, and members of the ICANN > Community have worked hard to date, but the current Whois protocol has no > support for non-ASCII characters and cannot signal a non-ASCII script. Some > ccTLD registries and registrars have implemented ad hoc solutions and > arbitrary mappings of local scripts onto ASCII code points, and as a > result, IDN Whois data today often appears as a nonsense sequence of ASCII > characters. > > *Findings/Sarmad > *Perhaps it should be no surprise that within this environment [*Kathy: > which environment?] *, policy and implementation have not kept pace with > the real world. A significant example of this is Internationalised Domain > Names (IDN), which have been available for registration at the second level > for over a decade, and at the Top Level for more than a year. During this > time, WHOIS policies were not amended to accommodate the obvious need to > support non-ASCII character sets even though there was a recognition that > Internationalisation is essential for the Internet?s development as a > global resource. There is ongoing work within ICANN (e.g. joint gNSO and > SSAC working group on Internationalised Registration Data ? IRD WG) in this > area. As the need is imminent, this work needs to proceed with priority in > coordination with other relevant work outside the ICANN?s ambit (e.g. > WIERDS initiative at IETF), to make internationalised domain name > registration data accessible. > > The NORC Study on Data Accuracy highlighted IDN contact data as a major > cause of apparent inaccuracy. Having internationalized data will also > address this source of inaccuracy. > > [end]**** > > > * > ------------------------------------------------------------------------------- > * > NOTICE: This email message is for the sole use of the intended > recipient(s) > and may contain confidential and privileged information. Any unauthorized > review, use, disclosure or distribution is prohibited. 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VAT No. 114487713.**** > > ** ** > > ** ** > > -- * * 76 Temple Road, Oxford OX4 2EZ UK t: +44 (0)1865 582 811 ? m: +44 (0)7540 049 322 emily at emilytaylor.eu *www.etlaw.co.uk* Emily Taylor Consultancy Limited is a company registered in England and Wales No. 7630471. VAT No. 114487713. -------------- next part -------------- An HTML attachment was scrubbed... URL: http://mm.icann.org/pipermail/rt4-whois/attachments/20120508/01f3f0f4/attachment.html From emily at emilytaylor.eu Fri May 11 09:59:37 2012 From: emily at emilytaylor.eu (Emily Taylor) Date: Fri, 11 May 2012 10:59:37 +0100 Subject: [Rt4-whois] WHOIS Review Team Final Report Message-ID: Dear Steve On behalf of the WHOIS Review Team, mandated under the Affirmation of Commitments, I have the pleasure to inform you that our final report has now been completed for publication. Alice Jansen will provide you with access to the files through Dropbox (as the file sizes are too big to send through email). You will observe that, in the light of feedback received from the community, including our meeting with the Board in Costa Rica, we have made extensive changes to the presentation of the findings and recommendations. I hope this clears up any ambiguities in the previous wording. The thrust of the findings and recommendations, however, remains largely unchanged. On substance, our chapter on Compliance (Chapter 4) is completely rewritten, and forms the basis for stronger findings and recommendations than in the previous draft. I understand that the next stage in the process would be for the Board to conduct a public comment, but for the WHOIS Review Team this is the end of our process. It has been my privilege to serve as Chair to the WHOIS Review Team, and work with such a strong team of colleagues, now friends, all of whom have served as volunteers. They have been immensely generous with their time, sharing of deep expertise, and most of all a willingness to consider opposing views, and other perspectives, which was the key to finding consensus recommendations. I wish the Board and the ICANN community well in your ongoing WHOIS deliberations, which I will observe with interest - from a safe distance! Kind regards Emily -- * * 76 Temple Road, Oxford OX4 2EZ UK t: +44 (0)1865 582 811 ? m: +44 (0)7540 049 322 emily at emilytaylor.eu *www.etlaw.co.uk* Emily Taylor Consultancy Limited is a company registered in England and Wales No. 7630471. VAT No. 114487713. -------------- next part -------------- An HTML attachment was scrubbed... URL: http://mm.icann.org/pipermail/rt4-whois/attachments/20120511/55d0da91/attachment.html From steve at shinkuro.com Fri May 11 11:25:40 2012 From: steve at shinkuro.com (Steve Crocker) Date: Fri, 11 May 2012 07:25:40 -0400 Subject: [Rt4-whois] WHOIS Review Team Final Report In-Reply-To: References: Message-ID: <73228361-FBBD-4D28-9A22-A7E281419E4C@shinkuro.com> Emily, Thanks! I will keep this response short and expand my expression of appreciation later. At the moment, I want to move things along briskly. Alice's note arrived with Dropbox instructions. I am cc'ing the Board on this note and I will forward Alice's note as well. Our next step will be a thorough reading and an analysis of the feasibility, resources required and locus of responsibility for implementation of each recommendation. We will be looking to Denise for this input, with assistance from all relevant parties. Steve On May 11, 2012, at 5:59 AM, Emily Taylor wrote: > Dear Steve > > On behalf of the WHOIS Review Team, mandated under the Affirmation of Commitments, I have the pleasure to inform you that our final report has now been completed for publication. > > Alice Jansen will provide you with access to the files through Dropbox (as the file sizes are too big to send through email). > > You will observe that, in the light of feedback received from the community, including our meeting with the Board in Costa Rica, we have made extensive changes to the presentation of the findings and recommendations. I hope this clears up any ambiguities in the previous wording. The thrust of the findings and recommendations, however, remains largely unchanged. On substance, our chapter on Compliance (Chapter 4) is completely rewritten, and forms the basis for stronger findings and recommendations than in the previous draft. > > I understand that the next stage in the process would be for the Board to conduct a public comment, but for the WHOIS Review Team this is the end of our process. > > It has been my privilege to serve as Chair to the WHOIS Review Team, and work with such a strong team of colleagues, now friends, all of whom have served as volunteers. They have been immensely generous with their time, sharing of deep expertise, and most of all a willingness to consider opposing views, and other perspectives, which was the key to finding consensus recommendations. > > I wish the Board and the ICANN community well in your ongoing WHOIS deliberations, which I will observe with interest - from a safe distance! > > Kind regards > > > Emily > > > -- > > > > > > > 76 Temple Road, Oxford OX4 2EZ UK > t: +44 (0)1865 582 811 ? m: +44 (0)7540 049 322 > emily at emilytaylor.eu > > www.etlaw.co.uk > > Emily Taylor Consultancy Limited is a company registered in England and Wales No. 7630471. VAT No. 114487713. > -------------- next part -------------- An HTML attachment was scrubbed... URL: http://mm.icann.org/pipermail/rt4-whois/attachments/20120511/9775085d/attachment.html From alice.jansen at icann.org Fri May 11 11:57:53 2012 From: alice.jansen at icann.org (Alice Jansen) Date: Fri, 11 May 2012 04:57:53 -0700 Subject: [Rt4-whois] Dropbox link on your private wiki In-Reply-To: <73228361-FBBD-4D28-9A22-A7E281419E4C@shinkuro.com> Message-ID: Dear Review Team Members, The dropbox link is available on your private wiki at: https://community.icann.org/display/whoisreviewprivate/Final+Report My warmest congratulations to you all on finalizing the report :-) Kindest regards Alice -- Alice Jansen Organizational Reviews Manager 6 Rond Point Schuman, Bt.5 B-1040 Brussels Belgium Direct dial: +32 2 234 78 64 Mobile: +32 4 73 31 76 56 Skype: alice_jansen_icann From: Steve Crocker > To: Emily Taylor > Cc: Steve Crocker >, Diane Schroeder >, "rt4-whois at icann.org" >, Icann-board ICANN > Subject: Re: [Rt4-whois] WHOIS Review Team Final Report Emily, Thanks! I will keep this response short and expand my expression of appreciation later. At the moment, I want to move things along briskly. Alice's note arrived with Dropbox instructions. I am cc'ing the Board on this note and I will forward Alice's note as well. Our next step will be a thorough reading and an analysis of the feasibility, resources required and locus of responsibility for implementation of each recommendation. We will be looking to Denise for this input, with assistance from all relevant parties. Steve On May 11, 2012, at 5:59 AM, Emily Taylor wrote: Dear Steve On behalf of the WHOIS Review Team, mandated under the Affirmation of Commitments, I have the pleasure to inform you that our final report has now been completed for publication. Alice Jansen will provide you with access to the files through Dropbox (as the file sizes are too big to send through email). You will observe that, in the light of feedback received from the community, including our meeting with the Board in Costa Rica, we have made extensive changes to the presentation of the findings and recommendations. I hope this clears up any ambiguities in the previous wording. The thrust of the findings and recommendations, however, remains largely unchanged. On substance, our chapter on Compliance (Chapter 4) is completely rewritten, and forms the basis for stronger findings and recommendations than in the previous draft. I understand that the next stage in the process would be for the Board to conduct a public comment, but for the WHOIS Review Team this is the end of our process. It has been my privilege to serve as Chair to the WHOIS Review Team, and work with such a strong team of colleagues, now friends, all of whom have served as volunteers. They have been immensely generous with their time, sharing of deep expertise, and most of all a willingness to consider opposing views, and other perspectives, which was the key to finding consensus recommendations. I wish the Board and the ICANN community well in your ongoing WHOIS deliberations, which I will observe with interest - from a safe distance! Kind regards Emily -- [http://www.etlaw.co.uk/images/stories/etlaw/etclogo250x60.gif] 76 Temple Road, Oxford OX4 2EZ UK t: +44 (0)1865 582 811 ? m: +44 (0)7540 049 322 emily at emilytaylor.eu www.etlaw.co.uk Emily Taylor Consultancy Limited is a company registered in England and Wales No. 7630471. VAT No. 114487713. -------------- next part -------------- An HTML attachment was scrubbed... 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Particular thanks to Emily's outstanding leadership and guidance throughout. I hope to see you all at some stage in the future and If any of you visit London at any stage it would be great to meet up. Best Wishes Sharon -----Original Message----- From: Emily Taylor To: rt4-whois Sent: Fri, 11 May 2012 23:18 Subject: [Rt4-whois] Final Report Published Congratulations, everyone http://www.icann.org/en/news/public-comment/whois-rt-final-report-11may12-en Thanks for all your hard work. Best, Emily -- 76 Temple Road, Oxford OX4 2EZ UK t: +44 (0)1865 582 811 ? m: +44 (0)7540 049 322 emily at emilytaylor.eu www.etlaw.co.uk Emily Taylor Consultancy Limited is a company registered in England and Wales No. 7630471. VAT No. 114487713. _______________________________________________ Rt4-whois mailing list Rt4-whois at icann.org https://mm.icann.org/mailman/listinfo/rt4-whois -------------- next part -------------- An HTML attachment was scrubbed... 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They doubled down by providing some definitive [and guiding!] recommendations to the Board to that objective. 2. ?Explicitly valorize the finding of widespread interest/convergence of WHOIS matters in the global community by recommending a fulsome outreach initiative. 3. ?Makes an explicit connection between anticipated improved compliance with a different reporting structure for ICANN Compliance that compels greater accountability from ICANN Board for outcomes, coupled with more transparent operations. 4. ?Declares in favour of " *a clear, unambiguous and enforceable chain of * *contractual agreements with registries, registrars, and registrants to require the **provision and maintenance of accurate WHOIS data*.". Speaking as Chair of the At-Large WHOIS WG, I shall recommend that the ALAC issue a statement fully endorsing the recommendations of the Final Report - Carlton ============================== Carlton A Samuels Mobile: 876-818-1799 *Strategy, Planning, Governance, Assessment & Turnaround* ============================= ** ?[image: ICANN] News Alert http://www.icann.org/en/news/announcements/announcement-11may12-en.htm ------------------------------ WHOIS Policy Review Team Final Report 11 May 2012 ?*Forum Announcement:* Comment Period Opens on *Date:* 11 May 2012 ?* Categories/Tags:* Reviews/Improvements WHOIS Policy Transparency/Accountability ?*Purpose (Brief):* The WHOIS Policy Review Team, constituted under ICANN's Affirmation of Commitments (AoC) agreement with the U.S. Department of Commerce, submitted its *Final Report and Recommendations * to the ICANN Board and this document has been posted for public comment. *Public Comment Box Link:* http://www.icann.org/en/news/public-comment/whois-rt-final-report-11may12-en.htm ?This message was sent to carlton.samuels at gmail.com from: ICANN | 4676 Admiralty Way Suite 330 | Marina del Rey, CA 90292-6601 Email Marketing by [image: iContact - Try It Free!] ? ?Manage Your Subscription _______________________________________________ At-Large mailing list At-Large at atlarge-lists.icann.org https://atlarge-lists.icann.org/mailman/listinfo/at-large At-Large Official Site: http://atlarge.icann.org