[CCWG-ACCT] Timeline scenarios - initial draft for comments

Matthew Shears mshears at cdt.org
Sun Oct 11 08:17:39 UTC 2015


Likewise.  Excellent suggestions.  Readability and clarity will be key 
to militating perceptions of complexity.

On 11/10/2015 04:08, Jordan Carter wrote:
> I completely agree.
>
> 1) A readable, simple high level summary is one report and should in 
> my view be our core "output".
>
> 2) Then a chapter by chapter "operationalisation" report that explains 
> the design intent and details, more clear but maybe about the same 
> length as the body of our current report.
>
> 3) Then a report that is the detailed draft Bylaws framework that sets 
> out precisely how it would / could look in the rules.
>
> 4) Then a process / options considered etc report.
>
> They all have different audiences. 4) is vital for NTIA and for policy 
> focused people. 3) is the concrete and crystal clear detail we haven't 
> yet provided. 2) explains the logic. 1) presents the vision.
>
> Jordan
>
>
> On 8 October 2015 at 04:52, Greg Shatan <gregshatanipc at gmail.com 
> <mailto:gregshatanipc at gmail.com>> wrote:
>
>     Given that communication and readability is one of our major
>     challenges I agree strongly with Malcolm that a rushed drafting
>     process is not in our best interests.
>
>     Further to that point, I think we need to rethink how we
>     communicate much of what we are trying to communicate, in terms of
>     format, providing readable overviews as opposed to immediately
>     plunging into mechanics, etc., etc.
>
>     Greg
>
>     On Tue, Oct 6, 2015 at 11:34 AM, Malcolm Hutty <malcolm at linx.net
>     <mailto:malcolm at linx.net>> wrote:
>
>
>
>         On 06/10/2015 13:58, Mathieu Weill wrote:
>         > Dear colleagues,
>         >
>         > The co-chairs had tasked staff to highlight what would be a
>         plausible
>         > timeline scenario after our group agrees on a proposed way
>         forward in
>         > Dublin.
>         > We investigated a scenario where we would not need a public
>         comment, as
>         > a well as a scenario where an extra pûblic comment would be
>         needed.
>         >
>         > The attached slides present an initial draft which we submit for
>         > comments from the group.
>         >
>         > In summary, in the absence of an extra PC period, we could
>         deliver the
>         > final report on Nov 20 to the chartering organisations at
>         the earliest.
>         > If we need an extra public comment, delivery would be around
>         end of
>         > january - beginning of february 2016.
>
>         Seven days to redraft the report, and seven days to review it.
>
>         That means only seven days in Working Parties really thrashing the
>         detailed wording. Whoever has their hand on the pen will
>         likely need at
>         least half that time to come up with their first draft
>         (perhaps more,
>         depending on their personal schedule). So we're really only
>         talking
>         about two or three days for detailed discussion of alternative
>         phrasing
>         for specific clauses.
>
>         Is that really enough?
>
>         Maybe enough to get something on paper. But hardly enough time
>         to polish
>         the language, to make it legible and accessible, and to make
>         sure our
>         explanations properly consider what the uninitiated reader
>         might wonder.
>         We'd also be taking big risks with unforeseen omissions and
>         errata (as
>         with our previous drafts).
>
>         I think it's this kind of time pressure that has gotten us
>         much of the
>         criticism we've had already. I know this is not welcome
>         advice, but
>         Aesop's fable of the hare and tortoise springs to mind.
>
>         Or how does Public Comment Period 4 grab you?
>
>         I propose that we give an extra two weeks for WPs to work on
>         the text.
>
>         So replace this section
>         "3-10 November: Drafting of report language
>         10 November: Report sections sent to CCWG for review & CCWG
>         call for
>         rapporteurs to walk through edits"
>
>
>         with
>
>         "3-10 November: Drafting of report language
>         10 November: Deadline for delivery of draft language to WPs by
>         rapporteurs
>         10-24 November: Review of draft language by WPs
>         24 November: Report sections sent to CCWG for review & CCWG
>         call for
>         rapporteurs to walk through edits"
>
>         with the lengths of the rest unchanged, resulting in a close
>         of public
>         comments on 14th Jan.
>
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