[AT-Review] Draft - next version

[Larry Strickling]

I've been really jammed on other matters the last two days but will try to get my edits in by noon EDT today.

From: at-review-bounces at icann.org [mailto:at-review-bounces at icann.org] On Behalf Of Manal Ismail
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Subject: Re: [AT-Review] Draft - next version

Thanks Brian ..
A quick first reaction with regards to WG2 is the missing of a reference to the 'quorum' needed to be present at any GAC meeting for the GAC to be able to take decisions .. It's in the current version of the GAC Operating Principles http://gac.icann.org/system/files/GAC_Operating_Principles_1.pdf, principle 40 ..
Larry has kindly offered to insert it in the report ..

Kind Regards

--Manal

From: at-review-bounces at icann.org [mailto:at-review-bounces at icann.org] On Behalf Of Brian Cute
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Subject: [AT-Review] Draft - next version

RT,

Attached is the next version of the draft which incorporates our discussion from the call yesterday.  Please note and review the following changes:

Berkman statement of methodology - p.3
Revised description of PPC activities - p. 29
Corrected quote from public comment - pp. 29-30
Cheryl's definition of Cross Community deliberation - p. 29
WG3 Findings - p. 31
WG3 revised recommendation #8 - p.32
WG3 revised recommendation #9 - p.33
WG4 - please read in entirety.  Substantial edits provided by Chris.
ATRT RFI to ICANN Staff - text from Staff response - p.37-39
California law summary (reviewed and edited by Berkman) - p.42-43

One point from our call that is not yet addressed in the draft is Larry's point concerning the IRP undertaking de novo review.  Please offer language for inclusion.

Note that I will do further editing to address grammar, style, structure and citations.  If anyone has edits to suggest on this front please send them to me.

Regards,
Brian
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